| "Red Digivice Diaries" Reviews/Comments [ 154 ] |
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Reviewed By: Lord Tarsisk [MediaMiner Member] On: July 05, 2003 17:19 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I cannot understand how you seem to be able to create enourmous scenes with thousands of words, out of simple ideas like a fight, or a sex scene. It is magnificent, and don't stop writing, ever!
I am also amazed at how detailed your characters are. You have not merely taken existing characters and built upon them (though that would be a common, acceptable view;) you have really dissected them and have shown their true insides. If Digimon did not exist, and you had written this, it would still be thourough and complete.
I am also amazed at the complexity of your stories: nineteen chapters, over a Meg of words, and yet you still seem to running ahead full steam.
And you know a stoy is good when it sparks controversy, and creates CONVERSATION between the READERS. The reviews page is as long as one of your chapters.
Also, your ability to defend your point without having to resort to a creative liscense is incredible.
Congratulations. Those who hate this story are nuts. |
Reviewed By: Kaiser Deathscythe [MediaMiner Member] On: July 05, 2003 12:58 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very good chapter....
4 inches? WTF?
And who the hell is Alan? |
Reviewed By: echo17170 On: June 14, 2003 16:56 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
a good story a bit freaky at times but good none the less good job |
Reviewed By: ladybird2223 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 13, 2003 19:59 EDT
Comment/Review:
Archive, I've been reading your fic for a while, just never took the time to review before.
This fic isn't just a porn story (if it was, i wouldn't be reading it), it has an interesting plot to it to.
Yes people are right that there are some off points in a story, but that can be expected When can somebody write a perfect story? Especially with this one being so long and intertwined with War Diaries.
Overall I think that you are doing a great job with this and can't wait for the next part in both Red Digivice and War Diaries. |
Reviewed By: MolotovCocktailGuy [MediaMiner Member] On: June 10, 2003 11:21 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very very good...I'm not good at writing replies...but I think you did a very good job of uh...well you did a very good job! (Told ya I'm bad at these things!) |
Reviewed By: TiggsPanther [MediaMiner Member] On: June 03, 2003 16:11 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I've seen a fair few people on here bitching at Archive for character assassination and other such bollocks.
From where I look, the core characters seem very in-character. Maybe they're not exactly as they were in the series, but all the twists and turns the characters have taken is very much in the realms of plausible extrapolation.
Daisuke in the Anime always came across as rather headstrong and simple (not stupid, just not always thinking things through...), and Miyako was definitely impulsive and always acting on her emotions. Their attitudes to sex in RDD are believable extrapolations of those character flaws.
Hell, these guy are young teens who've been having to fight and kill since they were young kids. They're not going to grow up into textbook model adults.
Also as to whether their parents are acting like real parents? I'd say so. Especially seeing that they're parents to very not-normal kids. If they came down on their kids' behaviour like a ton of bricks, this would be very bad. if anything, they're bound to have learned from the Ichijouji parents - in that if a Chosen really doesn't want to be at home then it's "Digiport open". If they're too hard on them then they have a real risk of losing the kids for good.
Besides, in RDD's sister story War Diaries, Sayuri's mother seems to be acting more like a "normal" parent would. However this could (and has) cause problems in the long run.
And one final note on the "In or Out of Character" topic. If 'fic-writers just go exactly off the original characterisations without having the characters change at all you can easily end up with "Carbon Copy Adventures", with the main characters doing the same things over and over again, and never learning from mistakes or from successes. (a.k.a. "The Pokemon Effect")
Tiggs |
Reviewed By: Lord Tarsisk [MediaMiner Member] On: June 03, 2003 02:41 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This fic was one of the funniest one's I've ever read. I never expected Sora to pour burning hot chocolate on herself, nor did I expect Taichi to be so... well, not mean-cruel, but ironic-cruel. It was a fetish episode, and I think the part about Taichi blowing up in Sora's face was a little overboard, but it was all good. |
Reviewed By: Zephyr On: May 24, 2003 01:16 EDT
Comment/Review:
Wow. Thanks to Dark Elf and Flameraven for introducing me to your works. I bloody love this one!
once i get more familiar with ranma, i'll try at those...
keep the pen thwappin...just not on my head o.O |
Reviewed By: NoNamedBum On: May 05, 2003 07:35 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Love your work man. I've been a fan for awhile now. Just a couple of ?s. Will you ever finish your Nekoken out of the bag series? And will you start Of Mothers and Fathers and Wandering Spirit series? As I've said, I've been a fan for awhile and understand that you're a busy person. My curiousity just got the better of me. |
Reviewed By: Peter Kim On: May 04, 2003 03:04 EDT
Comment/Review:
HOW ABOUT WRITING THE NEXT CHAPTER OF RED D-ARC DIARIES! |
Reviewed By: Vash The Stampede On: May 03, 2003 17:53 EDT
Comment/Review:
ok i like it and i do not think it is just porn.......well beyond that when was the last time you updated i mean come on man i liked it and your leaving me hanging for a long time
well peace out and update soon
Cool Quote: "Truth in the hands of few can bring light to he many but truth in the hands of many may not sway the few" |
Reviewed By: INICLOF On: May 02, 2003 00:14 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
very well written, i must say you are very good i cant wait to see the chapter 19 |
Reviewed By: KaneR On: April 25, 2003 08:48 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a pure example of young people today and the everyday problems of a child's life. A masterpiece if there ever was one. If you, Lord Archive, changed the characters and maybe the settings and sent it to a publishers, you might have a chance of it being published. But it's only an idea... |
Reviewed By: Mikey B23 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 28, 2003 06:38 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Mikey B23 must say, although he's not into this kind of thing, this one was preety good! Its no wonder over 3500 people haved visited this story! |
Reviewed By: drags On: April 21, 2003 22:50 EDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
so whens entry 19 gona get finished? |
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