| "Let's get it on" Reviews/Comments [ 65 ] |
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Reviewed By: kispexi2 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 29, 2006 02:58 CST
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Argh! The sweetness, the tension and now the cliff-hanging uncertainty. (All of which is good, BTW). Such a lovely, hot, sweet start. Gorgeous playful dialogue. Dolt/agenda/'at least he hadn't assumed' one example of several hilarious throwaways. Also Yohji as cartoon playboy - hee! His declaration of love and Aya's reaction were just perfect. Am totally hooked on this!
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Reviewed By: wedjateye [MediaMiner Member] On: December 28, 2006 23:54 CST
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"I hadn't realized the pouting took up so much brain capacity. I'll keep that in mind for the future." One of many wonderful Aya-lines. I loved the way you tracked their emotions through this - Aya just not getting the effect he has on Yohji, Yohji trying to pay Aya back for his pain until his heart won't let him any more. All so believable. I could keep reading this story forever.
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Reviewed By: deunank [MediaMiner Member] On: December 06, 2006 07:48 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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Oh, I forgot to mention that the horse comments in the previous chapter were freaking awesome.
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Reviewed By: deunank [MediaMiner Member] On: December 06, 2006 07:46 CST
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This chapter was angsty and wonderful and I loved poor Omi's spit-take. Ken's hilarious! And now I'll just bask in the afterglow of the shocking but delicious ending to this chapter. Laf, I still can't believe Yoji's luck! :D
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Reviewed By: slowglass On: December 05, 2006 12:01 CST
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I love your screwed-up, feral Aya so much. Yohji is going to have a permanent "Huh?" expression on his face if this relationship continues. He seems pretty o.k. with that, though, so it's all good. I'm looking forward to The Conversation. Here's hoping Yohji holds Aya to his agreement. Ah, if only Ken were this flexible and quick on the uptake in canon. . .
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Reviewed By: MikaSamu [MediaMiner Member] On: December 04, 2006 14:11 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm so glad there will be at least one more chapter, but I am greedy and hope for more than one. Absolutely delicious, but there still seems to be a gap in understanding to be resolved. Wonderful chapter!
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Reviewed By: kispexi2 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 03, 2006 04:53 CST
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I feel my reviews are inadequate to express how much I enjoy your writing. Lovely dense vocab, gorgeous rhythm, intense POV. Just great, really! Favourite bits in this 'romantic adversary' and coffee as a perfect 'food'. Tiny little phrases that express Yohji so clearly.
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Reviewed By: wedjateye [MediaMiner Member] On: December 03, 2006 01:49 CST
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Well I'm glad your 'lack of discipline' means at least one more chapter. I'm really enjoying the ride. Lots of great lines. I laughed at Aya's 'because we were fucking' explanation. Omi finally made it into one of your stories too - the line about him being amiable was one of the best in the story. I hope chapters of this story continue to ambush you.
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Reviewed By: RS On: December 02, 2006 12:53 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*HOT*. Woo hoo, I'm starting to think sex brings out Aya's personality in a *good* way. But could you please, please put a muzzle on Yoji ? The scene in the van, when he keeps pushing and pushing - I wanted to slap him myself and scream 'shut the fuck up and give the man some space'. Again, too many priceless lines to quote one by one: distance spitting, donut-cramming et al. One quibble: if Yoji is Slut-O-Sarus Rex, would't he have lube scattered everywhere, not *hand lotion* ? Also, please never ever use the word "wantonly" again, I have far too much respect for you for that. Overall, a solid 10 AND much sooner than last time, I am a happy gal!
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Reviewed By: Blythe [MediaMiner Member] On: December 02, 2006 12:15 CST
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What a wonderful chapter! The ups and downs and...ins and outs! *w* I'm so glad that there's still more to come! And the Dada comment was priceless! I love it!
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Reviewed By: Serena1985 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 02, 2006 07:06 CST
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Lol I bow to lack of dicipline and sneaky chapters. Keep up the great work!
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Reviewed By: deunank [MediaMiner Member] On: November 23, 2006 09:11 CST
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Only one more?! But... I want to know more about how messed up Aya is! Guh, what a lovely chapter. I kept expecting Aya to knock Yohji out though.
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Reviewed By: RS On: November 19, 2006 22:17 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
"Aya..was obviously not on consistent speaking terms with reason...Aya was erratic, unbalanced and confused..." Well hell, no wonder Yoji's all into him...who *wouldn't* be. And thanks for FINALLY updating; do you believe I have this story freakin' BOOKMARKED and check it almost every day and was DELIGHTED with the October 22 update but then got all pissy waiting for the latest...well, you get the idea...clearly your readers (at least moi) have too much time on their hands AND you write damn good dialogue. First Ken I've ever seen that I could stand, guess I'll have to retract my euthenasia vote for him. And thanks again for losing Omi, no wonder this is superior to the usual. So give us a nice wrap up, OK ? Maybe another TWO chapters or so, please, please ?? [yes I am greedy, cf 'too much time' comment, above]
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Reviewed By: RS On: November 19, 2006 22:07 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OH come on, what OTHER rating could you give this but a 10? It's so far ahead of the usual trying-too-hard-crap out there... My favorites from this chapter: ..."Aya just looked at him blankly, with a mildly quizzical set to his eyes, as if he were thinking, `Did that horse just speak? How curious.'".... Aya's eyes narrowed, the look shifting more to "that horse has annoyed me; perhaps I will kill it." YES ! I laughed on that one until I had tears. It was right up there with the 'full scrotal contact' and the "we've definitely crossed a line here" response to Yoji's masturbation request [although I don't think he would have quite put it that way, 'jerk off' would be more the man's style, still...] The ultimate for this chapter was Yoji's desire to get over his 'horribly misguided crush'. Boy, haven't we ALL been there ! All in all, nicely done; far above average.
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Reviewed By: Pooja On: November 18, 2006 14:09 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love how funny the things they say and think are. I also like the fact that they can be angsty without being dark and gloomy :P Thanks for writing this and I hope you get the next chapter out soon.
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