| "Violation of Honor" Reviews/Comments [ 497 ] |
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Reviewed By: Snowfall [MediaMiner Member] On: April 22, 2008 15:54 PDT
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I wanted to try to give you a real review-something that I have lacked the ability to do lately. You have some great lines. Some of my favorite: "Quiet," he snapped, before sending a second snap of electric green light toward the gaping mouth………'What a bother.'……. "Are you with me, Sango?" She turned to Inuyasha and grinned. "You lead, and I will follow!" She had sworn her allegiance to Inuyasha many years ago and today would be no different. Her fealty would continue-be the enemy youkai or human…………"Too slow," Sesshomaru hissed next to the demon's ear……… "I do not believe Master Jaken really knows how to reverse the spell, Shin. It looks like we shall have to search elsewhere……..I loved how graphic you were with Sesshoumaru's ruthless nature--splitting open the snake's head and the still beating heart plopping on the floor. I liked your move with the rearward thrust. It was awesome. Miroku taking off with Kagome while the other three fought at each other's backs was like old times, a real pick-me-up. Nana and her brother-in-law were hilarious. Perhaps events will help them become friends. You're phrasing of Miroku's dialogue is perfect for his character. I don't think I could ever pull that off. You have done an excellent job with Rin. She is a wily young woman without having lost the way that she speaks or interacts with others. Sneaky wench. Oh, right. 'Resourceful'. LOL It's truly amazing how you were able to pull that off. Even Jakken is exactly how I would picture him. Shin reminds me of the old irascible Inuyasha.
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Reviewed By: ktshabatie [MediaMiner Member] On: April 22, 2008 09:09 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I've noticed a few grammatical errors in this chapter - but those are easily fixable. Anyway! I loved this chapter! I can't wait to find out what Shin looks like as a human! I bet his emotions towards Rin are going to get even stronger. Poor Shippo, he's going to have a lot to deal with now. I also wonder what Sesshoumaru is going to do about Kagome being held in a barrier like that one. How will he get to her? Oh the suspense! I can't wait until the next update, you're an amazing writer and this is definitely one of my favorite stories in the Kag/Sess realm.
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Reviewed By: Eskamo On: April 21, 2008 19:25 PDT
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OH MAN OH MAN!!!!!!! THAT EAS SUCH A GOOD CHAPTER!!!!!!!!!!!! it was so filling and i cant wait for the next. im truely a fan of yur work! plz stay encouraged!!!! UPDATE SOON!!!!! Eskamo.
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Title: Well done!
Reviewed By: Kagome357 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 21, 2008 19:19 PDT
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What I loved about this chapter is that you slowed the action down a bit and delved into the other minor characters. Like someone else who reviewed, I wonder what Shin really is. I have a sneaking suspicion he's gonna be a linchpin in the whole thing. Shame on Chickenboy for trying to hurt our girl! That filthy pigeon will get his soon enough. I hope you develop Saya and Inuaysha's relationship at a nice pace. I know you said you have a few chapters to go but I love hook ups. I also love Shippo's maturity and grace. I can almost see the striking young demon that he's growing into. Has anyone put your work to drawings? I'd love to see them if so. Outstanding chapter!
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Reviewed By: KAREE On: April 21, 2008 18:37 PDT
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GREAT CHAPTER, TOO BAD KAGOME AND SESSHOUMARU ARENT TOGETHER YET. WELL THINGS ARE GETTING MORE INTERESTING I WONDER WHAT WILL HAPPEN NEXT. PLEASE DONT MAKE ME WAIT FOR TOO LONG. WELL GREAT JOB LIKE ALWAYS. SEE YOU SOON!
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Reviewed By: DemonandGoddess4ever [MediaMiner Member] On: April 21, 2008 16:25 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Can't wait for the next chapter!!! I hope Sesshromaru (sp?) & Kagome will be together soon and I have a odd feeling Shin might not be human?!
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Reviewed By: ice vixen x On: April 21, 2008 09:26 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yes! another update. i can't wait to see how everything unfolds yet again. oh and i realy can't wait to find out what shin looks like. and now that he's bigger will his ignorance for demons cause him to make trouble for rin? hmmm, and what would happen to kagome if iku got his hands on her? Could you imagine if he gets her and sess found out. he knows what he was put through by that evil ass hole. Sess would be devistated and frantically enraged i would think. Keep up the great work. Please update soon... ^_~
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Reviewed By: Ladydot On: April 20, 2008 16:49 PDT
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Yet another wonderful chapter! Hopefully we will get lucky and have some sesh/kag action again soon. So excited for the next chapter. Till then ^^
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Title: Questions
Reviewed By: Sailor Draca [MediaMiner Member] On: April 20, 2008 16:12 PDT
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First: I love this fic!!! I can't believe it didn't come up into the list until two days ago!!! I've loved every chapter and have switched on my computer and read for over and hour!! Secondly: In the last chapter (28) I got slightly confused. You know the soldiers waiting to capture Kagome at her village? Well, were they human? Because the Tetsuaiga (Sp?) was forged to protect humans and in the anime and manga Inuyasha only used the Tetsuaiga on humans who possessed shards of the Shikon Jewel.... So I didn't know if the guards were human or not... Or is Inuyasha's desire to protect his friends that enables him to use the Tetsuaiga on humans wishing to harm them... Although that kinda makes the Tetsuaiga seem like a slaughter weapon than a weapon of protection.... Hope you can clear that query up for me!!! Other than that I'm loving the Sess/Kag mush and the Inu/Saya!!! Love Draca
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Reviewed By: FluffyLady [MediaMiner Member] On: April 20, 2008 05:01 PDT
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i bet that once kagome realizes where they are, she's going to flip. consider, nobunaga goes after the monks...as for sango and shin...that's all up to you but i hope sango dies. it matters not to me about shin. FL
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Reviewed By: Snowfall [MediaMiner Member] On: April 19, 2008 18:55 PDT
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Oh! Shippou pulling one of his time-honored tricks was great! I'm glad that you are balancing the horror and struggles with some light humor and sentimental moments. I'm off to read it again! Until next chapter! ^_^ Snow
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Reviewed By: Snowfall [MediaMiner Member] On: April 19, 2008 18:48 PDT
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Okay. We'll get to Oda later. Right now...I feel so bad about Sesshoumaru having had to leave Kagome. That was so sad. However! You made everything up to us by having him efficiently kick some ass. I'm surprised Inuyasha didn't take out that small band of warriors. It will come back to bite them in the ass. I don't know if I said anything about it before, but healing Saya was incredible. And I wonder what has happened to the mortals and exactly what has been done for Miroku and Kagome. I'm wondering if they are all immortal now. That damn Iku! He's off to get Oda! I don't care what Oda did for Japan, the ends did not justify the means. Hell, he probably has some of Asuza's secrets and will wipe out youkai! Of Oda shows up, Kagome can't say that the girl from the future didn't play a pivotal role. She should rectify what her presence brought about. Who says that the outcome wouldn't be better? I can't imagine what you intend to do with this. Just don't break this mommy's heart with a graphic depiction of history. From Madame Seto's warning, I would think that you are going to allow history to continue as already told, but I hope not. On to less serious business. Poor Shin. I bet Rin brought (shhh) the wrong feather. *snicker* That would be terrible. I hope he didn't become a chicken. That would be even worse! LOL I'm not worried about Sango. She's a tough girl. I don't remember any character death warnings. It's a good thing Saya was watching her back. Saya is lucky. She hasn't had to go through what Kagome did and will have Inuyasha with a clean heart; without the sense of any betrayals. I wonder if she will remain an innocent bystander in all the wars. I hope Miroku gets at least a couple of days rest before anything else happens. I'm sure I've missed some things. This chapter was chock full of events. It was great! Thanks for giving us another great installment! ^_^ Snow
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Reviewed By: Nyuka [MediaMiner Member] On: April 19, 2008 15:22 PDT
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lol you sound like an old cartoon show from when my parents where kids.....lol.........any way this is really koo.....Sesshoumaru deffeted the threat at home with little to no effort...Shin is Human again (not sure thats a good thing with his predgidous)...Kagome is safe from Iku...thats koo....The inu gang easily took down the small army........even if Sango is hurt I'm sure she will be fine...Sango is a strong person...she will be fine I'm sure of it...............ummmmmmmmmmm I hope when Sesshy goes after Kagome againt that he doesn't get upset that she is in a place he can't reach.........which reminds me is Iku going to have Nobunaga's troops go after Kagome.......hmmmmmmm....well like you said I guess I'll have to toon in till next time.............chaaaaaaaaa.............Nyuka
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Reviewed By: Dragon Dagger [MediaMiner Member] On: April 19, 2008 10:25 PDT
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ooo you are evil. that was a wild spot to leav the chapter off at. *grins* However you have managed to write yet another incredible chapter filled with enough descriptive passages that I could see what was happening to the characters. However. I can see that Shin's interest in Rin is going to cause problems. Especially when Shippou cares for her as well. Hope it doesn't come down to a fight. not sure Rin would like that. She's a bit like a young Kagome in your story for her to appreciate those two fighting over her like a couple of bull elephant seals.
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Title: Nice
Reviewed By: rage2velvet [MediaMiner Member] On: April 19, 2008 09:42 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
My only complaint? That I have to wait for the next part. If I don't, I won't get to see Iku get his comeuppance--I can't wait to see what happens when his is caught by Sesshoumaru. And of course the HEA with Kagome. Another tight chapter. Can't wait to see what Shin looks like as human.
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