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| "A Balm for Social Failure" Reviews/Comments [ 68 ] | | Pages (5): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 › » ] | Reviewed By: Event Horizon [MediaMiner Member] On: May 12, 2009 22:08 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMFG. You completely had me. That was such a mindf**k when Emelia's voice transforms into Light's. I read that paragraph about 15 times, waiting for my brain to catch up. Then I went back and read the beginning, the hints at Emelia's broad shoulders at the bus stop, the whiskey in the restaurant (I saw the connection there, but didn't know where it was going). BUT, my biggest applause is for the awkward conversation in the restaurant and this line from L: "There are so many other ways it could have ended..." I took that 3 different ways and once I finally understood I was just tickled with your cleverness. 1) He's thinking on the inside that he and Light could have been together, and telling Emelia to drop the convo because he could have been dead 2) He's talking to Light/Emelia and saying that they could have been together without the charade if not for Kira and 3) he's talking to Light and saying that he could have been dead, but thinking on the inside that he could have killed Light. WOWOWOW The brilliance of your writing is BLINDING.
| Reviewed By: Passing Reader On: May 04, 2009 16:20 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is getting complicated. It's interesting that you bring in Mikami in the same way he entered the manga, over the phone. He sure has the hots for Light...Light's not going to cheat on L, will he? Misa gets more and more annoying, of course. Ew Misa. L is sure a snide little bastard, leaving Light and Misa alone together. Btw, I say LightxL.
| Title: My last few days of internet...
Reviewed By: Passing Reader On: May 01, 2009 22:08 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Thank you so much for the good luck, I'm going to need it for tommorow; we're putting up fence D: I hate putting up fence *grimences* Plus the state I live in has an abundace of ticks and I hate them even more *shudders* Yeah I'm a girly girl, so sue me :p So we've hit L's and Lights first 'relationship' fight? Are they tecnically in a relationship lol? It's sad that I gotta ask, but I'm sure L would stand by me on this one and ask the same question; put Light on the spot a little heheh >:) This new character (I dubb him who-da-ma-what-it b/c if you mentioned his name I can't remember it :p) Gives me the hebijibies! He's not gonna rape Light is he? Hearing or even reading about rape generally makes me nausious, (not that I woulden't try to get by that in your story!), but if such a thing was to happen (though I really couldn't picture it and so far have no reason to really anticipate it ^^') if you would please forwarn me so that I may skip/mentally prepair I would be forever greatful :p Just in case, I don't think my lab top would survive the experiance if I lost my lunch on it ahahah ^^' Thank you so much for posting! Brilliantly written as always! I like that L and Light's relationship (or not relationship whichever since there is no technical going out process, though I suppose that's hard to do when not only are you a criminal, but a supposed to be dead one to boot ^^') isn't without a few rocky patches. It makes it more believable. *Inhailes* I can't wait for the next chapter, and if I don't review immediatly I'm packing/unpacking ;p Sorry for any spelling/grammer errors, I gotta get up with the sun tommorow *yaay* and am just too lazy to look all the words up since my student trial thingy expired. D:
| Title: Die Misa!
Reviewed By: Passing Reader On: April 28, 2009 22:54 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Updated on my birthday and of course Misa had to be the staring role of the chapter. Just my luck. I have no clue as to where we are going next, but I eagerly look forward to it. Particularly if Misa dies lol. Im sorry, I bash her alot but after reading this, I can't quite contain myself. Let there be much Misa hate mail! ~Passing Reader P.S I'm moving this upcoming monday so I may not be able to review, and/or read, until we get internet at our new place. Just letting you know so you don't this you've lost a reviewer, till next time!
| Reviewed By: Passing Reader On: April 27, 2009 20:34 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
All I have to say is every time you update, I get almost irrationally excited and make an event of reading each new chapter. Your writing is that awesome. I don't think you get enough credit. I love how you switch flawlessly between L and Light's perspectives, and even Misa (who I also dislike passionately), all while keeping everyone perfectly in character and twisting them into your crazy unpredictable plot. I absolutely love this story. Keep it up!!! =))) And I agree, having no internet is pretty much living hell.
| Reviewed By: Passing Reader On: April 20, 2009 15:57 CDT
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Everyone else has said this, but in case you need more confirmation, you are brilliant. How do you manage to keep everybody in character and make them do such scandalous things? (By 'them' I mean Light and L). When I read your story I slip right into their world without being conscious that I am reading a MM fanfic. I can practically see it playing out in anime in my mind. Seriously, you should write books. And, how the hell is Light going to survive this? I just don't see a way, yet I'm thrilled because you say everyone's gonna live. But still, I'm stressed out for Light. And I severely dislike Ryuuk. Annoying much? I freakin love this story.
| Reviewed By: Passing Reader On: April 19, 2009 21:35 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This story has become a drug. A very addictave one. I couldn't stop reading if I wanted to and I have this constant craving for MORE! I think I now know how Ryuuk feels about apples lol.
| Reviewed By: Passing Reader On: April 13, 2009 08:28 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I feel another plot twist coming. I want to know whats happends! So many things are building up and its making me ansy, despite the fact that im sick -_- sorry about any spelling errors, Im too lazy and ill to bother with it, heres waiting for the next chapter!
| Title: Sleepy
Reviewed By: Passing Reader On: April 07, 2009 21:14 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I hate Misa. ...I hope L catches her. Lol :p I'm ashamed to admit that that was part of the reason I watched DeathNote all the way through. (to see if she died :p) I found her to be a very annoying character, Matsuda is too but in a funny-stupid kind of way, I keep picturing him with pompoms and a skirt cheering the investigation on *giggles hysterically*. Charming as always, I can't wait to see what happends next! Till then ~Passing Reader
| Reviewed By: An. On: April 06, 2009 01:39 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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Coming along nicely. Love the Light/L interaction, it's so loaded with double meanings and implications. Sorry to hear about the re-writing hell. This chapter was awesome, as per usual, even if you say it's not as good as it was. I love your wit and style. So much fun to read. Impatient for more!
| Reviewed By: Fluffymiyster [MediaMiner Member] On: April 05, 2009 23:58 CDT
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Oh wow, didn't know you had an account on FF.net! That's generally where I do my writing...personally, I feel that this site doesn't show enough love for us writers...probably because everyone is over on FF.net! MM.org seriously needs to consider adding a button to reply to reviews like on the other site. But anyways, this should be a review about your story, not about the website it's on! First and foremost, I can't believe L slapped Light! I tried to imagine L being so furious as to do something like that...just when I have the image, it disappears, lol! I think of L more as a person to fight with wits and words, but as you had said, him doing such a thing has sickened him. A second thing I noted...I learn new words from you! What a colorful vocabulary! And lastly, it'll be sweet when or if L and Light actually admit that they have feelings for each other point-blank. I like that there's something more to this than just smut. Another great chapter, can't wait for the next one!
| Title: ,,,It's dark...
Reviewed By: Passing Reader On: March 31, 2009 22:12 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm pretty sure I've reviewed before, but between work, college, family, and the new puppy that appears to be insomniac and likes to howl at the moon, I did not have much time to go through all the stories I usually read. That, and the fact that all the stories are saved on my old computer forcing me to go and manually hunt these down ^^' To the point of my review: Your brilliance knows no bounds! I have no idea how you do it, but don't stop lol! This story is and will always be one of my favorites. It's one of the most well written fics I've read and, if you have not already considered becoming a writer, you should defiantly think about it. I am of the firm opinion that Death Note is one of the hardest manga/anime to write a fic about. The characters are so complex that if one were to put them in an alternate universe it would be almost impossible to write. You manage to keep these characters in character whilst bending them to your will. It's amazing to read! What's more impressive is that you make both Light and L the intelligent geniuses that they are. Not many people are able to accomplish that and most end up sounding stupid. I don't believe this fic could have been better written. Managing to keep them rivals and enemies while building a convincing relationship between them...pure un-adult rated (or should I say adult rated? *wink*) genius! If you don't become an author, I implore you to keep writing if only to sate this poor reader's need for brilliant fan fiction. Selfish I know, but I'm going to take a page out of Light's book and want it all.*laughs* I can't wait for the next chapter, but at the same time I don't want the stories end to come any closer so that I may bask in your virtuosity. I dunno what I want but I want it! Ugh! ~Passing Reader
| Reviewed By: Fluffymiyster [MediaMiner Member] On: March 28, 2009 02:14 CDT
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You know, for a moment there, starting with your previous chapter, I thought that Ryuk would develop some kind of feelings for Rem (Nothing more than feelings!! Shinigami can't reproduce anyways...thankfully!). But reading this chapter in particular, naw. Ryuk can be a bit of a bastard when it comes down to other people's feelings (bitterly, I had thought that though he's a shinigami, how much different is he from real men?). Anyways, you really are keeping us on the edge of our seats with all the twists and turns. I'm eagerly anticipating the next chapter, you're an excellent writer! (But why the heck do I always end up reading your chapters at like, two in the morning?! lol!).
| Reviewed By: Addicted. On: March 15, 2009 13:45 CDT
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My dear, I think I love you. I've read my fair share of fanfiction, and I must say that this story of yours is one of the most well-written, creative, endearing, and believable (at least as far as the voices of the characters go) I have seen out there. I love the direction you've taken Light and L's (and Kira's) relationship in, and while I know you said no one would die, I'm really quite restless and I can't wait to find out how this mess is resolved. Kudos on a brilliant story, keep it up!
| Reviewed By: Fluffymiyster [MediaMiner Member] On: February 27, 2009 20:14 CST
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Wow, you really have this characterization thing down to a point, don't you? I'm jealous! Tomorrow, I'll be posting the closest thing to yaoi for Light's birthday (February 28th) and your story is helping me with my own plot bunnies! Also, a GaaraxNaruto (and maybe Sasuke?) story was in the making, but no telling when if ever I'll get to that. Anywho, another lovely chapter. I'm liking the schizo Light and Kira thing!
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