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Reviewed By: Hououza On: December 22, 2003 18:05 CST
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Nooooooo! Not another long one! Please! Too tired! Sorry, had so much going on at work I get no rest the last few weeks so I'm tired all the time atm. Seriously enjoyed the chapter, loved the little interactions between them all. Nice how Inuyasha is maturing into a responsible parent and Sessi is finally learning to accept his brother and let go of all his hatred and resentment. Surprised somewhat byteh introduction of the female fox but of course Shippo needed someone...didn't he? Rin now moving into a daughter role and Sessi once agin showing another side to himself as he seems to be starting to accept what fate has dealt him. Still wouldn't exactly describe him as gentle, after all there is still much darkness in his soul yet I think he is getting closer as time passses. Even more since his sister is there. In fact that brings me to ask will she and her daughter also find mates or will they remain the only ones unaffected? Sorry this isn't quite as long as it could be but it is growing late and as I said before my mind is not quite as sharp as it should be. Enjoy your holidays! Merry christmas and a happy new year! Hououza Ps. Lapis, that is my suggestion for her name.
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Reviewed By: Higurashi Kagome [MediaMiner Member] On: December 21, 2003 12:48 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
great chappy luv this story and can't wait till u up-date again^_^
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Reviewed By: nevets309 On: December 21, 2003 01:10 CST
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Interesting adding a sister for Inuyasha. It is very orignel. I have never read any where he has a a long lost sister. Cant wait to read what you write next! Ja Na Nevets309
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Reviewed By: nevets309 On: December 21, 2003 01:05 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 3 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great story! Origanl! I enjoyed it greatly! Though you could use inprovement on your grammer, spelling and seperating the thoughts, speaking, thinking, and the thing that are happening but all in all a good fic. Ja Na Nevets309
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Reviewed By: Sammy -.-zzz On: December 19, 2003 10:31 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is really good. I like the whole sister thing. Really suprising! REALLY!!! Good story, keep going.
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Reviewed By: Hououza On: December 17, 2003 17:36 CST
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Thank you so much! Not only did you use me in the chapter but you managed to work it in in such a way that the meaning of the name is approriate! Incredible! Really funny chapter, enjoyed all the characters reactions as Anmye introduces herself and proceeds to embarres Sesshi! ^_^ Kagome waking up Inuyasha with the remark about ramen almost made me fall of my chair! Once again you managed to give a real depth of feeling and insight into the bonds between the characters, the interactions between Sesshi an Anmye and the effect her presence was having on Sesshi and Inuyasha's relationship. Really enjoying the story so far, thank you so much for the early update not to mention my inclusion! Sorry I can't write more at the moment but I seem to be tired recently, almost nodding off at my desk. I have some time off at christmas so I promise my next review will be alot longer. Keep up the most excellent work! Good luck, best wishes, merry christmas and a happy new year! Hououza
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Reviewed By: Inuyashu [MediaMiner Member] On: December 16, 2003 22:13 CST
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YAY! Now I have a new name for Sesshomaru to totrure my Sesshi-obssesed friend with! ALL HAIL THE ALMIGHTY FLUFF-BUTT!!! HAHAHAHHAHAHHAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHHA!!!!!!!!!!!!! LOL LOL LOL ROTFL LMFAO!!!!!!!!!
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Title: you do what you do best!!!!
Reviewed By: MissNikki On: December 15, 2003 19:16 CST
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I would like a character named after me...but do you think the name MissNikki would fit in Fuedal Japan??? -_^ You decide as long as your not killing me off...And enjoyed this chapter a lot!!! Oh yeah BTW this is not going to be a long chapter...NOW ON WITH THE CREATIVE CRITISM you do have spelling and grammar errors in the story...they're not big because i had to take a pencil and paper to write them down to remember them...1-one female is a woman, women is plural. 2-this may just be me but i normally spell Sesshomaru's nickname Sesshy...so i wouldn't consider this a mistake. 3-i think you meant shock not shook...shook is the past tense of shake. 4-their not there, their shows ownership and i think that's what you wanted. As for the rest don't worry about them i couldn't remember them to type them so they weren't important. That unexpected twist was amazingly good...or should i say surprisingly good...i don't normally like costum characters but i like this one...Inu is not going to end up with her...so she's ok in my book...Oh here's a question the little girl that Inu is refering to who spanked him is Rin right...because i was thinking it would be nice if it was a farwawy memory of being beat by his older sister...and why doesn't he know her but she knows him??...I ask really good questions don't i...well anyway i have homework to do...and i think i asked all my questions..by the way it's really nice of you to offer any one a role in your story if they write a long review...which makes me think about you writing 'write' instead of right...and you love us or else you wouldn't have attempted to make this a long chapters just for us!! ^_^
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Reviewed By: Hououza On: December 15, 2003 10:46 CST
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Ok, let me appolgise now as this one isn't going to be very long, a bit short on time this time. I promise to make the next one longer again ^_^ Nice chapter, certainly an unexpected twist here adding a sister! Enjoyed the chapter, certainly is becoming a more and more interesting story. Have to say i liked the way you had Inuyahsa start to look on Miroku as his brother, I though that was a nice touch! I wonder how Sessi will react to that idea?! really enjoyed that one, honoured to be offered even a small part in your story. If it would not be too much trouble then naming one of the pups using mine would be a great honour...sorry, using honour too much aren't I... Seriously it would be very nice, I would say thought that just to tell you it roughly translates to pheonix. Probably better for a male child (like me!) Until next time, good luck & best wishes, Hououza
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Reviewed By: Higurashi Kagome [MediaMiner Member] On: December 15, 2003 00:07 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
that was surprising!!!!!!!!!!!!!Inu has a sister that he didn't no of wow i thought i was the only one.................well really great chp can't wait till u up-date ^_^
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Reviewed By: Samantha On: December 14, 2003 08:36 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Really good. Keep the story going. It's one of the best I've ever seen.
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Title: I forgot something
Reviewed By: MissNikki On: December 12, 2003 23:56 CST
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This fic is sooo good and i just read Hououza's review...I realize two things...1-I spelled his name wrong and 2-he talked about the chapter the whole way through and i didn't does this mean he wins???? Mine is longer it's just wonders off topic and then off again and then back on...Well anyway i love the story and in case i haven't told you Keep up the good work. and i want to apologize to Hououza I didnt know your name had two 'ou's in it...well anyway i better get typing i have 9 more paged to type......*finger cramp* and i don't think I'll make it...byebye and luv you!!!! ^_^
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Title: WE'RE YOU TALKING TO ME IN THE LAST CHAPTER? OR EVER1?
Reviewed By: MissNikki On: December 12, 2003 23:42 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey it's me again...I can't believe some1 has a longer review then me...well that just won't do! I could some1 try to top my review lenght not only did he try he did!!!! I'm apalled at this behavior. I'm sending out memos that tell ppl that their reviews can't be longer than mine or 5 lines...which ever comes first. OK...NOW WITH THE CONSTRUCTIVE CRITISM-- why did Inu get down on his near...? and what is a near? and I think you meant month not mouths...who has four mouths anyway? I noticed it before but it didn't bother me i just need to babble to make my revew longer than Houza's or what ever his name is (no disrespect intended) --THAT'S IT FOR THE CRITISM Cocoa: Here Amica use this Amica: but someone wrote on it already... Sassy: Well it is going on the wall....ppl won't see the back... Amica: I guess your right...What i like was on the front...i'll just pu this on my wall MissNikki: Have you guyz seen my memos? Sassy: No. what do they say? MissNikki: they read, to allwho review Operation Sex your review can not I repeat can not be longer then mine! and if mine is only 5 lines that mean you have a minimum of 4 1/2 lines. follow rules or face the conquences. Cocoa: that's funny... MissNikki: whats so funny about it Cocoa: Amica's new wall paper says the samething that your memos says MissNikki: *steaming mad* WHAT!?! NOW FOR THE REAL REVIEW I loved this story and I'm glad you liked my reviews...and you should accept that I'm right only I count and that memo *shakes head in disappointment* my other personalities just can't keep their paws off things that don't have their name on it. Oh well there is nothing i can do about it now...I loved the poem and the idea of putting it in a locket with his favorite picture of his hanyou Kagome. And the fact that the mother actually blushed...shit i didn't think she did that but then again it could have been because it was her father talking abot her and her husband...that would be embrassing but she should have thought about that before taking all the pictures of her 'hanyou babies' naked. the sprinklers...that was priceless...especially since we just use the hose...it works just as well...I am really enjoying this fic it's one of the best so far...and your loyal to your fans!!! and i love that even more...btw did i tell you that i'm in love with this fic...ahhh...do yo know with this review and Houza's you owe us 2 chapters or one really really long one!!! ;p yes i'm a pain in the ass and proud of it!!!! MissNikki: How could you do that??? I mean my memos this is the second time you did this Cocoa!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Cocoa: Huh? Why do you blame me? MissNikki: Because I know in some wierd twisted way you had something to do with it Sassy: Actually it was her fault she gave it to Amica MissNikki: can none of you read???? I mean how could you not tell it was a memo...it says MEMO right on the top!!!! Cocoa: Well shouldn't memo be in the mailbox anyway...it's easier for ppl to read them when they have them MissNikki: *attacks* I was gonna mail them but you messed it up again...How did you think ppl was supposed to read the last memo that you lined your bird cage with IT...ARE THEY TELEPATHIC???? you stupid idiot...DIE DIE DIE Sassy: you may want to let go before she dies MissNikki: WHY SHOULD I?????? YAY!!!! YOU UPDATED--in case i forgot to state the obvious ^_^ MissNikki: Maybe I should just email the memos out and to remind you i expect a really really long chapter or 2 chapters uploaded during the weekend!!! BTW I like your idea of including me into your story but your shortest chapter? What am i suppose to do reread every chapter? and i hoped you enjoyed your partying after finals or midterms...now if you get through the semestra you'd be on a roll...do you write stories for your english class and if you do I know you get 'A's your writing is sooo goooood but your grammar and spelling could use some work...but don't mind me...i'm no better...i just don't realize it because i don't read my own stories which is probably the same thing you do...or should i say don't do ^_^ well anyway if this isn't longer than Houza and I know it's not I'll Make it the longest next time...how about a whole page...you win this time Houza but next time you go down!!!!!!!!! way down...OH YEAH AND BEFORE I FORGET UPDATE AND MAKE IT A REALLY REALLY REALLY LONG CHAPTER...I KNOW I KNOW I ADDED ANOTHER REALLY ON THERE BUT *POUTS* I CHANGED MY MIND AND I BET HOUZA AGREES WITH ME AND IT DOESN'T HAVE TO BE A REALLY REALLY REALLY REALLY LONG CHAPTR IT COULD BE 2 SEPARATE CHAPTERS--AND I ADDED ANOTHER REALLY HUH? WELL GUESS WHAT I CHANGED MY MIND AGAIN!!! ;P I'M A PAIN IN THE ASS AND PROUD OF IT AND I SAID THAT ALREADY HUH? oh i'm really saying good bye this time...i have to go...and type my story it has to be done tonight but it's not going to be well bye bye
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Reviewed By: Hououza On: December 12, 2003 21:27 CST
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Hello again! Just to say one slight problem...for some reason it doesn't like return so all the lines are bunched up, sorry! Better go, nice chapter once again, better go this time lest I crash my computer by falling asleep on it!
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Reviewed By: Hououza On: December 12, 2003 21:26 CST
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*Well that's somewhat of a challenge ne? A review at least as long as your shortest chapter...let's have a go then...* The lead in is very funny as it leads on from the last chapter perfectly. The sprinklers adding an unexpected touch. Then as you move into the description of Inuyasha and Kagome and their position once agian you continue to reafrim the bonds between the two and continue to convey the deep bond between the two,most of all focused on the remarks about the eyes. I like the way you give more impact to the division that was between them when Kagome was human as when she would look at him they were from different worlds. Now they are the same and so the divison that held them apart is severed and the bound between them is deepened. *Next part...take a deep breath...* The sex scene, usually I wouldn't coment on one of these but as I am going for the longestreview in the history of the world here we go...it was beautfil the way Inuyasha first takes a moment to think of his children andthe coming time in which he will become a father for the second time (Shippo being the first in a way). Even after as he moves to make love to his mate and wife you still convey the depth of his passion for her and the concern he has for the lives yet to be born. Even more as she passes away the activities that heighten the arousal to simply reafirm their bond to one another. Next you suddnely shift scene into a light and humor enducing bit, a great departure from a moment before yet it fits perfectly as you cover the confusion of a younger brother at concept that he is yet to understand. Not only that but the comment bytheir jii-chan rounds it off perfectly giving Kagome's mother a little of her own medicine for once. *Puff...puff...gotta keep going...* This is where an unexpected twist comes into play, last time we saw them they were still very much appart and now in the time that the others have been gone their relationship has progressed and they tow are now bonded together. In a way it was like an immovable object and an irresistable force (see if you can guess which is which! ^_^) A fully anticipated an wonderrfully executed revelation of their altered status, particularly the comedy element as Shippo comes calling for his 'aunt' and 'uncle' only to find them like that, not only that but the fact that it has happened before! Once again a very funny interlude but also a stark comparison to the way Souta reacted to Kagome and Inuyasha earlier on showing the difference between the two. *Just a bit further...* I really enjoyed the way you have them try and hide the change in their relationship from the others, even though it only last for a moment its fun to see how they are so nervous at first as Shippo calls out to his parents. *Help...running out of words!* The scene that follow thats is absolutely brilliant, Inuyasha simply walks up to Sango and start listening to her stomach...wonderful! Thus in one fell swoop you managed to cover the fact that she and Miroku are together and that they will be having pups. The only thing I wonder is whythere wasn't more of a reaction from the two, however when I think about it with all the ground work laid it would seem almost natural that they too would fall for one another sooner or later. (Btw, the thing about the length of the pregnancy, very interesting...now if only human women worked that way...^_^...) *Runs dodging sharp objects thrown by all the females in the area* Finally the last scene as Inuyasha one again reafirms his love for Kagome, everything he feels summed up in a simple poem to show the her that he will love her forever, beautiful! I really loved the chapter, sorry I couldn't review immediately but I was at work when I first read through it. I really am looking forwards to the next one, Good luck & best wishes, Hououza PS. That is officially the longest review I have ever written, I hope you like it! Please excuse my bad spelling and grammer, typing at 3:30am can do that to you! Just in case I'll leave you my e-mail... hououza@msn.com Night!
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