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Title: Oh! Okay
Reviewed By: Hanyou Slave [MediaMiner Member] On: December 02, 2004 00:50 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Aaah! I see. I read down your reviews and discovered that the later chapters were in better condition, so I checked one out. Much better! Please go back and edit the earlier ones. Pleeeeze. If you do, I promise to write a review after each chapter, and they will definitely be excellent reviews. I will go out of my way to make them very long. Thanks
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Title: Do It For Me
Reviewed By: Hanyou Slave [MediaMiner Member] On: December 02, 2004 00:41 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 2 of 10
Overall Rating: 3 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love your writing style and this looked like a good story, at least for lemons. You have what it takes, you just need a beta reader. The words you use, though many are misspelled, are excellent. I couldn't get past the first couple of paragraphs because it took such an effort to get through the inordinate amount of errors. Many of the errors are preventable using Microsoft Word. Just turn on the spelling and grammar checker under 'tools' in your toolbar. I would beta for you, but I simply do not have the time. Go to the forum. I'm sure you will find a beta reader there. I would like to see you clean this up because your writing is great. You're welcome to e-mail me and let me know once it has been beta'd. Keep working at it. Thanks
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Title: I like pieeeee
Reviewed By: cowlickspooooooo! On: October 26, 2004 20:51 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This story is great and you need to keep writing.Good lucks with the baby and dealing with a husband their pains in the ass's and I would love to kill mine (shots him in the head) there done hes dead :) no need to get streesed out anymore and one more thing I LIKE PIEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE
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Title: luv the story
Reviewed By: budunkadunk On: October 26, 2004 20:46 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Dont u listen to what those basterds say about your writing I think your a fucking awesome writer and the story is fucking awesome!the duesche bag who says that shit about your story sucking needs to go get laid and chill out because you dont say that kind of shit and I porsonaly like the way you put all the little sayings about unison and stuff it makes the story better. So good luck with the child and peace out from the SORTH side (YES SORTH its my word fu's)
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Title: eck
Reviewed By: storysucks On: September 09, 2004 18:09 CDT
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okay... i personally think you're an elementary level writer. i mean, im not trying to be mean but your story is full of undeniable spelling mistakes, and there's no plot to this "story". i dunno how people can read your story without ignoring the stupid mistakes. maybe you should edit THEN post?? please think of people who have higher literacy levels than yourself.
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Reviewed By: Hiei81 On: August 31, 2004 20:09 CDT
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This fic is SO COOL!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I laughed threw out this whole fucked up story (I mean that in a good way... Is there even a good way to say "Fucked up"?... *shrugges* who cares) I like it an all, but it's too long. No ofence(sp?). And don't blame me if any thing is misspelled. I'm only 14 and suck at spelling. k? ja ne!
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Reviewed By: feilo [MediaMiner Member] On: August 29, 2004 15:24 CDT
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i think da cat's name is Buyo...or sth...can't spell...but it sounds like dat...n oh ya great chapter...just one thing though...rn't da babies still supposed 2 b half-demon??? cuz they're both half-demons...n it's only 3/4 demon if a half-demon n a human mate isn't it???...so their children r half-demons right???...oh well...ya...great chapter ar...
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Reviewed By: Inubunny [MediaMiner Member] On: August 29, 2004 14:29 CDT
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full time mother now i no the feeling some of my friends r full time mothers now as well!! children take up alot of time!! i just wish u luck with raising ur son!! much love!! never forget the love!! and good luck!!!
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Reviewed By: feilo [MediaMiner Member] On: August 28, 2004 23:30 CDT
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hey...nice chapter...but i think sry in jap is gomen...not gome...and i'm sure it's Hojo-kun, not Hojo-chan...but besides from that, it's pretty good...
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Reviewed By: Hououza On: August 27, 2004 18:47 CDT
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Congratulations! Good luck with everything, don't worry about the time it takes, I wills till be here no matter how long. Good luck & best wishes to all three of you, Hououza
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Reviewed By: Higurashi Kagome [MediaMiner Member] On: August 27, 2004 13:23 CDT
Comment/Review:
congatz on the baby^_^
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Reviewed By: JackieChan Dragonfly On: August 27, 2004 08:58 CDT
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Congratulations! And you take all the time you need. I don't mind waiting for something as good as this!
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Title: ~_^
Reviewed By: Heyy On: August 27, 2004 03:51 CDT
Comment/Review:
You know what, not EVERYONE'S damn writing is fucking EXCELLENT!!! And I'm glad you at least tried your best in writing this story. I think you should continue in doing whatever the hell you want because if you don't work at things, you'll never progress. So, for the asshole that had the nerve to come up in here and insult your writing abilities and disabilities...FUCK OFF!! This is a PERSON you're talking to who has FEELINGS!! You don't just straight up tell someone their writing is horrible...that's just messed up. I'm glad you tried and did what you did, because I know impressing a crowd is hard. But it seems to me you've got everything else down, as to paragraph structure and what not. Keep writing though, and dont let fuckers like that EVER make you do otherwise okay hun?? Welp, I've got 2 go, but I hope to see more from you. And the abusive email person w/e bitch complainer...just go fuck yourself and let people do what they wanna do without you bitching cause that's all that damn review was...a bitching statement!!! iight 1 out yall pe@ce
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Reviewed By: Jillian On: August 26, 2004 17:05 CDT
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did u have the baby?! IM DYIGN FOR AN UPDATE! i check back once a week to see if u did...and ive done alot of checkin that means....its been so long...i hope the labor went ok if u had it...unless ur dead...that would be sad....neways still a fanbut itchin for an update! -Jillian-
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Reviewed By: hilome [MediaMiner Member] On: August 11, 2004 05:21 CDT
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so did you get the name for chapter 5 from the song "Puff the magic dragon" 'cuz if you did I love that song, my dad used to sing it to me off key every night when I was little. I really love this story, but I won't be able to finish it tonight. It's 5:20 in the morning and I've been up all night got to get some sleep. nabikitendo@email.com
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