| "Busy Lives" Reviews/Comments [ 695 ] |
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Reviewed By: u_b_san On: November 24, 2004 01:38 CST
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UPDATE FASTER DAMN IT!!!!! LOL
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Reviewed By: babyblue eyes [MediaMiner Member] On: November 24, 2004 00:57 CST
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I loved your fic. It just made me want to read more until I reached the last chapter. I hope you get time to post soon because the suspence it killing me. Thank you for wirting an entertaining but also well wirtten lemon. I've read many and this is the first I have truely enjoyed.
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Reviewed By: yvonne15 On: November 23, 2004 22:36 CST
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yay !!! loved the chap !!! keep it coming its a great story
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Reviewed By: Hououza On: November 23, 2004 17:49 CST
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Excellent chapter! Glad to see Shippo is happy, I wonder if he will get his wish... Inuyasha needs to do something, as does Kagome. The two of them need to sort themselves out, for once I think he should follow his brother's example... Good luck & best wishes, Hououza
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Reviewed By: haisha-chan (nsi) On: November 22, 2004 22:04 CST
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Yay new chapter! I really can't wait to see how Kagome is going to tell InuYasha that she loves him! Please update soon!
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Title: busy lives
Reviewed By: raising fire phoenix On: November 04, 2004 18:43 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i've read this story and i think that it's funny when miroku gets clobbered by kagome, rin, and, sango . Also good work so far and i hope that you review soon!.
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Title: write next chapter soon.
Reviewed By: sessi123 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 28, 2004 22:46 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like this fic for the most part. There is only one problem. The stuff they do is all so obvious that you know exactly how the stories gonna go. I know it's hard to come up with an origonal plot and you've made a great story with a overly used plot line. the story makes me laugh and is entertaining to read. I know it really doesn't matter what I think but rap this story up soon because if you don't this awesome story is gonna get quite boring and reviews are gonna stop.
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Reviewed By: InusDemoness(not signed on) On: October 25, 2004 21:26 CDT
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It took me forever to read this chapter!!! I know you said the story would start going faster, but really it's not good for the plot or the story itself. Moving it so fast is making your characters seem very OOC. Like Kagome just taking the drink with no resistence. I would have like to see her fight it a little bit more. I mean if you tell someone that you don't drink it doesn't make since to give into the offer so easily. That hasn't been her character in the rest of the story (and even if it was it would still be OOC)And it was obvious that you were just trying to speed things up to get her drunk. To be honest with you I don't know if I can keep reading this story. It's lost its flow and seems to be heading in one of those obvious directions. Like I guessed before reading this chapter that it would be Kagome getting drunk. And as soon as I got that part I knew they were going to get Shippou. It's not interesting anymore because obviousness in recent chapters. I know this goes against all your other reviews from other readers. But I take what I read seriously otherwise why bother to read it? And it just feels like a waste of my time. I do hope to read more your work in the future.
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Reviewed By: Kenkaya (ccbkitty13@hotmail.com) On: September 29, 2004 14:55 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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This is a really fun fic! Normally I'm not really into lemon stories (sappy sex tends to bore me) but this is just too cute! I really have only two bits of advice for you; one is that Inu has gotten plenty jealous in this fic for unfounded reasons and Kagome always gets mad. Just once, I'd like to see her get bitten by the green bug so she knows what its like. Another is that you tend to spell out everything. Instead of saying they got ready and walked to the club you could just do a scene cut. I personally find it helps to keep my own stories clean when I just skip to the good stuff. Good job so far! Keep up the writing!
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Reviewed By: kawaii_becky_101 On: September 26, 2004 21:32 CDT
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very good... WHATS NEXT SHE NEVER FOUND HER PILLS! very long but its great. later! ^.^ becky [i am a member but this computer hates me]
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Reviewed By: gabbi-b On: September 25, 2004 20:25 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
What can i say.......wow this was a really long fic but i'm not complaining....just keep it up cause i'm really into the plot of this story thanx
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Reviewed By: Biganimefan1 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 21, 2004 13:21 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
awwww how cute
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Reviewed By: sunshine07 On: September 19, 2004 23:31 CDT
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that was a good chappy!!! pls update soon!!
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Reviewed By: Haisha-chan (Not signed in) On: September 19, 2004 18:46 CDT
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Yay congrats to InuYasha and Kagome for becoming Shippou's parents (and possibly even parents of their own child soon??)!! This was a really cute chapter, thank you so much for the update!!
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Reviewed By: Hououza On: September 19, 2004 17:12 CDT
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No worries, excellent chapter. I just know that one simple fact is going to come back and bite them in the ass...seems like they will be parents soon for more than just one child. Good luck & best wishes, Hououza
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