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Title: Oh gods finaly!
Reviewed By: rin_sama1989 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 25, 2006 20:52 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
It feels like it's been forever! But it was so worth the wait. I'm relieved to once again see your usual crisp, uncluttered storytelling and your ability to force us to care about the characters, even if we arent to fond of them in the beginning. And despite the long agonizing days I sat wondering what thrills the next chapter will hold Kagome's death causes no stir of rage to bubble within me. I suppoe I'm simply relieved that this story is finally coming to a close and the gang can have peace, or as close to peace as an author as evil as you will allow them.XD ver your loyal reader -Rin
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Title: More Beta-y Stuff
Reviewed By: Okaasan-7 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 23, 2006 18:19 EDT
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In fact there are edit taggy things all through the chapter example [AuthorJAH]
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Title: Beta-y Stuff
Reviewed By: Okaasan-7 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 23, 2006 18:17 EDT
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There is some stuff at the end of Ch 24 that looks like comments from your beta -- Just FYI, there are a bunch of "deleted" markers in the early part of this chapter - most of them are just formatting things. You had some extra spaces in front of each paragraph during a certain section, so I just removed them. I'm a little confused. Has Kanna somehow just returned Akago's heart to him? Is that what's happening in this moment? Kagura has her heart now because Sess had it stolen back for her, correct? Or wait - well, it was stolen in the scene where we finally found out who Onnanoko and Otokonoko were (sp? Can't remember… *grin*), and then (I believe) given back to her, eventually. Just trying to recall the details (it's been awhile…). So anyway, what I think I'm reading here is that Kanna has just returned Akago's heart to his body (making it possible for him to die) - and by "their hearts are theirs, yours belongs to Naraku," she means that his opponents make their own choices while Akago only does Naraku's bidding. Is that it? [Author ID2: at Tue Aug 22 15:17:00 2006 ][Author ID2: at Tue Aug 22 15:17:00 2006 ][Author ID2: at Tue Aug 22 15:17:00 2006 ][Author ID2: at Tue Aug 22 15:17:00 2006 ][Author ID2: at Tue Aug 22 15:17:00 2006 ]Yeah, except that it also implies Naraku decides when he dies.[Author ID2: at Tue Aug 22 15:17:00 2006 ] Much better - yeah, it's hard to create that impression of so many things (each complicated in their own ways) happening at once… Just happened to notice that the phrase "both brothers" ended the previous paragraph as well, and thought a little variation would be better… The well sped time for her, or slowed it? I'm just asking because I'm not sure how speeding time up would help…
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Reviewed By: Bumbleflies and Butterbees [MediaMiner Member] On: August 23, 2006 17:57 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm giving you like a 10 on everything because your are totally awesome! I went to school this morning, had a kinda boring day. Was tired when I got home. Went to check my email and saw the update email for your story. Totally flipped! I mean I was seriously jumping out of my seat. I couldn't read the chapter any faster. I'm glad my roommate wasn't home because she would have tried to get me to the looney bin. Anywho. So I read this story and am like on the edge of my seat the whole time. Then the ending!!!! OH MY GOODNESS!!!!!!! I had to reread the last page or so like 20 times to make sure I read it right. It's so wrong! I mean Inu and Kag finally found peace with each other and so on and so forth and then she DIES!?!?! I mean seriously!!!!! Argggg! I absolutely can't wait til the next chapter. I mean seriously! I'm hangin on my a thread here! I REALLY hope that you don't leave me hangin for too long. I'm pretty weak and my arms are already getting tired. But I said this before and I'll say it again. I have NEVER read a story with better cliffhangers than yours. All of them, not just Beautiful Miscommunications. This was no different. So I will go so that you can get to work on that next chapter *winks*. And besides, I think that I am running out of space to type. Can't wait for the next update. Till then. Happy Writting!!!
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Reviewed By: HimeG [MediaMiner Member] On: June 27, 2006 02:19 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Is it sad th I fell in love with this fic over a year ago and only after having my mind corrupted by ALIAS do I realize that 542663 spells Kagome? So... it's either praise be to ALIAS or I finally have found some common sense.
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Reviewed By: Hoshizora [MediaMiner Member] On: June 20, 2006 18:45 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Awesome story!!! You MUST update!!!
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Title: O_o!
Reviewed By: baka_juju2000 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 07, 2006 14:15 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG. this is an awesome story! I lub it! I can't wait for an update.... ^_^!
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Reviewed By: Bumbleflies and Butterbees [MediaMiner Member] On: February 16, 2006 18:35 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I absolutely love you fics. I first read Through Rose Colored Lenses on FF.net and fell in love with it. Then I got to this site and looked up your other fics. I read The Ad and loved it too, Very Good. Then I read this story. I really like it as well and you totally had me hooked. I was all sorts of excited and then I got to the last chapter and started reading and was practically bouncing out of my seat. Then I got to the end where there was the mother of all cliffhangers and I freaked out. Why didn't you finish? I was so sad! Is there any way that you are trying to finish this story or did you just give it up (which I don't know why you would)? Either way I wish I knew. If there is anyway that you could let me know or something, by email or whatever, I would totally love ya. Anyway. Just wanted to ask and tell you how awesome of a writter you are. Thanks.
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Reviewed By: Radish [MediaMiner Member] On: November 06, 2005 18:31 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Entertaining story, glad I'm reading it. You're certainly setting up Naraku's ultimate defeat to be a very satisfying event. However, there are some flaws. Namely, the identity of the twins. That they're Miroku and Kagome was both blatantly obvious and extremely unlikely. First, the buttload of evidence that it was them actually made me doubtful, because it was TOO obvious, and in one of the author notes you acted like it was supposed to be mystery. Second, and more significant, whenever they speak as assassins they always speak of "the Higurashis" as though they're not them. The most glaring instance was when Boy was teasing Girl, that she was "too busy with her charge." She says she was watching his charge aswell. So she was watching herself? No one else was there but Inuyasha. And it's not just them that makes this bizarre separation: when Miroku comes back to Jakotsu as Boy, Jakotsu seems to know who he is but still speaks of the Higurashis as though he wasn't speaking to one of them. It really doesn't make sense, barring the Agency enducing multiple personality disorder in all their agents, and Jakotsu going along with it for some reason. But using insanity to justify character inconsistency is kind of a cop out; it's just too easy. Anyway, point is, every piece of evidence points to Kagome and Miroku being the twins, except when they speak, at which point you seem to try your best to dissuade us from that conclusion. It was dirty, confusing and very frustrating.
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Reviewed By: Knock-on-Wood [MediaMiner Member] On: September 23, 2005 18:33 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow...this past chapter was excellent! Awsome work, the plot has definately taken on a very interesting turn of events...I feel so bad for everyone! They are dealing with so much chaos! Anyway, great job! I can't wait to read the next chapter, please update whenever you can! :D I hope you get some inspiration soon! Take care!
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Reviewed By: jazzyca [MediaMiner Member] On: September 23, 2005 14:44 EDT
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very good chapter. you write so well. I really like how you made it so that Sango joined the Agency instead of killing her. Her new name is awesome too. The mural in Kagome's room is still very intriguing. What about the mural that's in Miroku's room? Will that hold any significance later in the story? Looking forward to the next chapter. Hang in there! I was thinking maybe you gave up on the story or something since you took so long to update. Life's busy, but you should always make time for things that you truely enjoy. It's only by doing that, that you really live.
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Title: Beautiful Miscommunications
Reviewed By: Dilanda Albata [MediaMiner Member] On: September 22, 2005 19:56 EDT
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Wow....I'm not even ticked about having to wait so long...This chapter was AWESOME! I hope you update more often now though...
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Reviewed By: angelbabe17(nsi) On: September 22, 2005 19:42 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
love it!!!
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Reviewed By: cj flutterbye On: September 22, 2005 18:37 EDT
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Wow! This chapter was worth the wait - and then you left an evil cliffee... wonderful!
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Reviewed By: leila-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: September 22, 2005 17:47 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
yea. i'm so happy that you found the time to update. i know it might be a while 'till you give us another chappie, but this one made it worth the wait. you've answered alot of questions, but now you've given me more. for example, who the h*ll has kagome? hah. i kinda feel bad for sango. poor girl. what a crappy day. it's sad that inu had to feel like he'd lost kag before he could pull his head outta his ass and forgive her! now he just needs to find her. oh well. i am excited about what the next chap will bring. can't wait. update when you can. thanx.
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