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| "Beautiful Miscommunications" Reviews/Comments [ 268 ] | | Pages (18): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 17 18 › » ] | Reviewed By: Shadow_Within (lazy) On: March 30, 2005 22:26 EST
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What is this i hear about Kagome dieing!?!?! Pls say it's only temperary!! Anywho! I love this chapter! Just enough angst that it's sweet but I don't feel like killing you! just kidding. Love how this chapter is going! Your Kagura and Sessho romance is one of the bnest i've ever read! Love it!
| Title: Beautiful Miscommunications
Reviewed By: Dilanda Albata [MediaMiner Member] On: March 30, 2005 22:07 EST
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"Explosive Scene?" Does that mean a lemon!?!!^^ Too bad about your wrists there, buddy. Have you had them checked out or are you just letting yourself suffer for us? I hope it's nothing serious o.0
| Reviewed By: DemonicUprising [MediaMiner Member] On: March 30, 2005 21:28 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Incredible, I haven't been on the computer very much in the past few days so I just barely read the last 2 chapters. Overall it is very beautifully layed out, and set up with an intricacy that has been keeping me on the edge of my seat in anticipation. I'm sorry I didn't review sooner but I DO CARE IF INU DIES GOD DAMNIT!!!! AND NARAKU IS JUST AS EVIL AS EVER, AS I READ I CAN LITERALLY HEAR AND FEEL THE MALEVOLENCE DRIPPING OFF HIS PUTRID TONGUE!!!!! I WILL KILL THAT BASTARD!!!!!! Oh and by the way I would like it better if it doesn't end up like Conker's Bad Fur Day, where his girlfriend died and he had the power to change it... but fucked up therefore becoming king of all the lands... but being miserable without Berri, it should have ended with him driving off in a Ferrari F-50 with Berri by his side and a bag of cash, get the drift??? Oh and I love the unpredictability you have going, You totally fuggin' rock the friggin' world... yea... bye.
| Reviewed By: nauriell [MediaMiner Member] On: March 30, 2005 18:38 EST
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so, i'm starting to get a little confused with the story. Or maybe I'm just confusing it with another story, or something, i dunno. Anyway, this chapter was very intense, I fell of my chair, oh, and the confusion is entirely on my part. I don't want you to think youre story is confusing. I'm also wondering, what's wrong with you're wrists? My doctor thinks I've got carpal tunnel (AT SIXTEEN!!!) because I play piano and am a computer freak. go figure. I have to wear splints a lot. it sucks. right, i'm going to stop rambling your ear off now. good story. keep writing. take pain-killers, they help.
| Reviewed By: Hououza On: March 30, 2005 17:29 EST
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Seriously...*pauses while thinking how to phrase this*...don't worry about writing when you're wrist is killing you. We can wait and those that can't don't deserve it. Excellent chapter, glad to see he finally got together with Kagome even if it seems they are going to be torn apart again far too quickly. With regards to deaths of one or both of them...that's is your choice. I won't complain either way, all I care about is finding out what it is you have planned for them and how such occurances would fit into the story. Last but not least I now know why I did not recognise those characters as they are from and arc I have not yet seen, I only hope that it is available on DVD ^_^; Till next time good luck & best wishes, Hououza
| Reviewed By: Cattykit [MediaMiner Member] On: March 30, 2005 16:36 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm really getting into this story now! I really like it. At first, it was a bit hard to get into, for me at least. There was just a bit too much business stuff that was tedious and boring and too little romance. But don't worry; I understand that for a story like this to develope, background needs to be established first. It's this type of tedious background that makes the story more believable. I just have a short attention span sometimes =) As for the lack of romance, you definitely made up for it in later chapters. It was so cute how Inuyasha and Kagome were bonding! I really loved it. As for grammar-wise, I rated you down a bit because you seem to have a confusion at times with words that sound alike but are spelled differently (e.g. your/you're, here/hear, etc.) but most of those mistakes aren't consistent, probably just a slip of the finger. Other than that you've got great grammar for which I'm eternally grateful. I really love this story and with the climax fast approaching, I can't wait to see what's going to happen! Hopefully, you'll update soon, yes? And for the sake of your readers, I wish you a fast wrist-healing! ~cattykit
| Reviewed By: angelbabe17(nsi) On: March 30, 2005 15:38 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i love this story! of course we dont want inuyasha to die. i dont want kag to either but if she must then she must i guess *shrug* n hell yeah naraku is really evil in this story.
| Reviewed By: Netealia Lane Foxwood On: March 30, 2005 09:17 EST
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you are doing a great job with this story and i can't wait to read more. ~foxy~
| Reviewed By: PrncessS (not signed in) On: March 30, 2005 01:16 EST
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Great job! I'll be sad to see it end, but it's really good so far, tons of plot twists and stuff. I can't wait to find out how it turns out! =)
| Title: wow
Reviewed By: Inuyashafan311 On: March 30, 2005 01:15 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
hmmm. I was already to sit down for my evening fanfiction read and discover... something. spliting chapter... well thats your call but can you post the other half soon. ok now that i've finished whinning: wow, as a reader of many fan fictions I have to say ou rdescriptions put me right into the story: from Inuyashas new shower, to running down the stairs hoping wood planks, to dust clouds and rubble.
| Reviewed By: SoftbalLazerGurl22@yahoo.com On: March 29, 2005 21:55 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hi! I love the story!! I hope Kagome lives(in the next three chappies), i don't want her to die!! Okay, lets see...I gave you all tens because I love this story and find it very suspencfull and enjoying! It brings out feelings and thought that i've never had before. It really makes me think! I like how your marking rituials are original. Go you! I hope your wrist(s) feel better and I hope to be reading the next chapter. -Rei
| Reviewed By: FrameofMind [MediaMiner Member] On: March 29, 2005 20:52 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Interesting... Well, you probably already know I loved it overall, so I'll just address a couple of the things you mentioned in your A/N: First of all, yes, I figured you wouldn't kill Inu-chan (just 'cause), but what really clinched it was when you explained the thing about Naraku and Inuyasha's inheritence. Now I know he can't die, because if he does, the bad guy "wins" (sort of). As for the time-jump technique, it's a good thing, but usually I find it works best when the time jump (meaning the section that gets recapped -- the Inu/Kag scene, in this case) adds new, important information that has greater significance in light of what's to come, or when it takes a different perspective on something (like in the beginning of Rozefire's "Zero G," for example). In this case it seems like it could just as easily have been done in sequence, and it's just a tiny bit confusing. Not bad, but it just doesn't seem very necessary. Well, I have more to say, but apparently there's a limit on review length here at mediaminer -- this little counter thing just keeps getting lower and lower...(Only 1500 characters? Bah -- I'm sure you can guess how that irritates me...*grin*) Anyway, I think I forgot to review ch 18 on ff.net, so I'll probably just go finish this there. Speaking of which, is there a reason why this chapter isn't posted there, or is it just that it hasn't shown up in the database yet...? (down to the last 14 characters...whew...)
| Reviewed By: serendith (Not signed in) On: March 29, 2005 17:27 EST
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Kill Kagome?! Wuhh? I like my romances to be happy damn it! ... I guess you know what you are doing but I am still going to beg for a happy ending with all the (good) main characters left alive. I love your writing - it was terribly vivid!
| Reviewed By: reviewer =) On: March 27, 2005 22:32 EST
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Yay! Another chapter! Wow there are so many things going on at once, so many unanswered questions. And you say it's going to end soon. On one hand, I'm sad to hear that, but still excited because all the things that have been bothering me about this story (in a good way, I mean), and everything will be revealed! Maybe it's just me, but Naraku seems like a more-nice guy than usual, it's almost as if Akago is the true villain of the story. Not that this is bad at all, far from it, I kind of like the little twist, and Kanna included seems more 'good' than usual. Not that she was really 'bad'/evil before, she is usually just.. there, during the series. So sorry to hear about your wrists! Make sure you take it easy, you've updated so much recently I'm sure we can all understand and wait for your next update. Hope you feel better soon! Oh, and before I forget, thank you so much for writing such a wonderful story!
| Title: Interesting
Reviewed By: 1 Miroku [MediaMiner Member] On: March 26, 2005 17:36 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
yay for another chapter. I'm sorry about your wrist though. I hope that its nothing serious and is just that your typing to much. Hope you feel better. Interesting chapter though. I'm really a fan of lime/lemons but I feel I have to read them because there somehow essential to the plot. Oh well whatever. T'was a good chapter. Ja ne.
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