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| "The curse of the dragon" Reviews/Comments [ 453 ] | | Pages (31): [ « ‹ 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 17 18 19 20 21 22 23 24 25 26 27 28 29 › » ] | Reviewed By: Tarzan from fanfic.net On: March 24, 2005 01:47 EST
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story just keeps getting better and better. inuyasha's epiphanies and flashbacks...yay and wow and aw and great!
| Title: UGGHH!
Reviewed By: foxfire730(amber) On: March 23, 2005 17:10 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
ok... last one... opps was written be me foxfire730(amber) ok.. i think that's it...
| Reviewed By: OOPPPS! On: March 23, 2005 17:07 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
when i said "portrayed his mother carefully", i meant beautifully! i realy don't know what i was thinking at the time... my fingers have a mind of there own i swear... soo yeah... C-Ya! p.s. i gots my computer working!
| Reviewed By: foxfire730(amber) On: March 23, 2005 17:05 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WOW!! that was definatly one of your longest chapters... not that i mind!! (as we have discussed) ummm.. what to say... Kagome was EXTREMLEY worried about Yash! it was sweet ya know? i think this chapter also has the most flashbacks also. and very meaninful ones at that. so Inu No Taisho knew he was being set up!that's something gotta tell you that. you portrayed inu's mother as a strong woman, and i like that. at the grave inu's discussion with his mother was very heart-felt. it's great that he alked about how much he loves kags, how he'll make everything better, and that he's going to bring kags to meet her. can't wait till that chap! i'm guessing that the whole flashback on the roof led to inu's being at the grave in the first place verdad? and about that scene on the roof... i think that is the most Sessh and Inu have talked without trying t take eachothers heads off! it was a nice change. and Yash had a preety good car choice! but now he's registering some things in his mind that he hasn't thought of before... R-E-S-P-E-C-T! YES! Bingo and we hit the JackPot!! wonder what kags is going to say over the phone. Also that was some pretty interesting detail on why inu isn't worried about kag gettin pregnant. this was a great chapter! had a lot about inu's mother and you portrayed his mother carefully! N E Wayz... i think i'm going to use up all my writing space so TTFN! Amber
| Title: arg, don't you hate the character limits!?
Reviewed By: rhiara_123@hotmail.com On: March 23, 2005 02:43 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
ok, some other things to add :p you said you wanted reviews!!! ummm ok, I know that for the sake of the story you have to change things, but I attended senior high school in Japan for a while, and it's really nothing like what you portray here. The school I went to was also rich bitch, lol, THE rich bitch school of the city. In Japan EVERYONE and I mean EVERYONE save perhaps 20 kids caught public transport to school...the schools have buses of their own that go on routes to near the students homes or to bus stations and train stops. I think you're seriously underestimating the public transport system, lol. The school I went to had 48 buses :O But anywho, it is seriously discouraged for students to drive or be driven. Also, I'm guessing you're an American? The school system seems to be very like the American one, too, lol. It sure ain't like our Australian one :p Also, Japan is obsessive about Uniforms (I'm sure you knew that, I'm merely being pedantic, :p) and even taiku (gym class) has a specific uniform all the way down to school sports shoes!!! Also in Japan they remain in the same classroom for all their lessons and the teachers move. Homeroom is both in the morning and the after noon. There is no morning break except the brief ones between classes, and lunch is very short, most students remaining in classrooms or going to a friends to eat. The cafeteria is small and not all students eat there. Yeah, like I said, I'm merely being pedantic! Any questions, feel free to ask! | Title: I love this fic, but I am a grammar nut!!!
Reviewed By: rhiara_123@hotmail.com On: March 23, 2005 02:22 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey! I just spent three days reading your fic (don't you hate those pesky things like school that get in your way?) and I'd like to say I loved it!!! You have great characterization and written expression, the writing flows easily and smoothly, and you seem to know your plotline extrememly well. The stoyline flows nicely and seems to arise naturally (unlike some fics, lol). One thing I would like to say is that you perhaps need to work on your spelling and grammar! I mean this in one particular way: your use of homophones. I am sure you know what these are but in case, homophones are words that sound the same (hence homo and phono) but are spelt differently, eg, see and sea, you're and your. However, you have a wacky way of using these! I think that what happens is you write the word as it is sounded, then press spellcheck and pick the one that sounds right, when in fact it has a completely different meaning! For instance, winced (as in flinched). You write this as winched, which actually means to pull something up by degrees by means of a pulley and winch system! I am a Other than that, I'd like to say that I really really enjoyed this fanfic! Please, keep it going, I am desperate to see what happens to poor Rin....is it just me or is the Good Doctor a money grabber? I get a bad feeling about her...lol. Anywhoo, please feel free to email me if you would like me to check any grammar...I love editing, and am a perfectionist in that sense! cheers, Rhiara
| Reviewed By: krzy_grl On: March 21, 2005 12:07 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
great fic!! update soon please!!
| Reviewed By: ayngel_babie On: March 21, 2005 12:05 EST
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WOW! this is really hitting Rin hard! and not only her, but Sessh too! i really feel bad for her : ( ....you are such an awesome writer!! please write more chapters soon!! UPDATE PLEASE!!!
| Title: Celestial Fox
Reviewed By: Celestial Fox [MediaMiner Member] On: March 20, 2005 23:43 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great story! How long does it usually take you to write a chapter? I am eternally jealous of your god-like author/ess skills! I must say that it is interesting and has gone great, I'm not sure if you're done with this story but I hope you continue to make new fan fics! Later
| Reviewed By: Lady_iNsOmNiAc_ On: March 20, 2005 23:30 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I must say that it almost looked like you knew what you were doing, with all that medical stuff. I have been seeing head shrinks for 8 or 9 years now, i've been taking medications for depression since i was 9. I know all about the medications, i've attended the groups and all that stuff. If you ever need a reference for anything just e-mail me (cHaOs3035@yahoo.com) or you can IM me (AIM screenname: KillTheToadMan) I know all about these kinds of things (PTSD, Depression, Bipolar, ADD, ADHD). I love your story, and i hope to hear from you soon. Always, Lady~
| Reviewed By: jade_pendant(too lay-z to sign in) On: March 20, 2005 15:41 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
hey girl i just have a quick question to ask you...how old r u if u have an english major?? im 18 and in university. where do you find the time to write such good shit?:)e0mail me if you want jenn_1010@hotmil.com your anime pal- Jade_pendant
| Title: curse of the dragon
Reviewed By: trinity757575@yahoo.com On: March 19, 2005 22:58 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
(kneels adoringly at your feet, while giving you the big anime eyes of awe) I take my hat off to you! The part with Shess and Rin, OH. MY. GOD!! You truely captured the pain and anguish that Rin would defintly be going through, for what she has indured for six months is something truely tramatic, and with Shess feeling helpless and frustrated anger at not being able to help, that you can't help but feel it tear at your heart. WOW. You did a wonderful job! BELIEVE ME!! Sug..you don't need any suggestion with this story!! You even had my laughing at the part where Shess asked Ryen if he beat Naraku, which he replied "like a redheaded step-child" remined me when me and my brother were younger and we would threaten each with that phrase!LOL! And it's a good thing that Ryen already has silver/white hair, because if he didn't Yash would defintly have it lighter....heheheh! But hey, that's why we love him!! I knew he wouldn't be able to keep his hands or *cough, cough* "fingers" to himself even though his Uncle Ryen was their, and right in front of Kagome's mom....(WHOOO WEEEEE, I laughed right out loud when I read that part!) GOD! I love this story!! You are defintly DEFINTLY one of my favorite authoress, keep up the great, wonderfully, awesome job....intel the chappie...I'll be reading yeah!
| Reviewed By: ayngel_babie On: March 19, 2005 16:20 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
awwww!!! poor rin : ( ...this is a really good story ...i hope that you write more chapters soon!! UPDATE PLEASE!!! : )
| Reviewed By: foxfire730(amber) On: March 19, 2005 16:05 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WOW! this is really hitting Rin hard! and not only her, but Sessh too! i did laugh a few times in this chap. Example: the idea if inu fingering kags in front of her mother without her knowing is definatley a funny one. imagine Ms. Higurashi's face if/when Ryen tells her! inu and kags did have a very brief talk indeed. and Souta knows just the right time to intervene! (and get his revenge if you will...) I wonder who this "doctor" will be.... hmmm..... a darker side with heart threnching moments for Rin and Sessh. but a lighter mood to inu and kag. can't wait till the next time! e-mail me! Amber
| Reviewed By: crazed assassin On: March 19, 2005 15:13 EST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i just have a question....u know how miroku has that wind-thingy in his palm in the original anime, well is he gonna have that issue in your fanfic too? that could pose an interesting issue.... ?_?
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