| "Sex Days: Shinji Ikari" Reviews/Comments [ 177 ] |
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Reviewed By: Hakun [MediaMiner Member] On: December 29, 2005 23:52 EST
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You've got a great story here, but it needs something, badly. And that would be more updates.
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Reviewed By: Hentai_Chick [MediaMiner Member] On: December 27, 2005 22:11 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great JOB!! Continue pls!!
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Reviewed By: Hentai_Chick [MediaMiner Member] On: December 27, 2005 22:11 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great JOB!! Continue pls!!
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Reviewed By: YugiocardsharkII On: December 18, 2005 02:57 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Good god man, i don't see a whole lot of good lemons. me like lots. :D improve the grammar though. :)
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Reviewed By: dennisud2015 On: November 10, 2005 19:12 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
First I wanted to say you have a very sex filled story...but IMHO a story that can become great if you pull it that way. I think that you might want to make a PG-13 version for say www.fanfiction.net while keeping the sexy parts here. I'm very intrigued In tha fact not that Shinjki is winning all the girls but in that he simply doesn't see why they want him other than a pumping station. I think you might want to boost the caring all three have for him, yes even the sex crazed Asuka. She like Misato uses sex to show she actually cares. Hikari could have been brought in better of say as in the manga Touji died and used Shinji as her source of comfort. Rei is played very welkl here so far. Plus what will Gendo do later on? dennisud
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Title: YAAAAAAAAAAY!
Reviewed By: pieceoftoast On: November 08, 2005 20:12 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Finaly, an update. I was afraid that you had abandoned us. If you see any death threats from me, sorry. If not, disregard that statement. Excellent story thus far. Just one thing: Make Misato more involved. I know a lot of people would like to see that. Keep writing, or you might just find yourself in an unpleasant predicament. Get it? GOT IT! Good. Keep writing. NOW! Lol.
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Reviewed By: RandomReviewer3000 On: November 07, 2005 17:17 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Actually I enjoyed this fic surprisingly enough... although the story could shine more with better pacing and a bit 'o revision. Otherwise the premise is toward mainstream taste (thank goodness), and therefore easily enjoyed. There isn't much to complain about in terms of content, except maybe... just maybe... the characters jump the bed to early? Hikari, after all, her feelings were only briefly described, with no actual transition from stranger to friend to lover...
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Title: New chapter
Reviewed By: Peacemaker [MediaMiner Member] On: November 07, 2005 10:16 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
It's great to hear from you again. This chapter was very good but it did seem a little rushed. Keep up the good work and update when you have time please.
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Title: Update!
Reviewed By: entei0126 On: November 04, 2005 10:31 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 4 of 10 Comment/Review:
i have given you a 4 because i've been watching this fanfic for a while and you never update! You need to update before you start getting death threats!!!!!
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Reviewed By: Taro M.D [MediaMiner Member] On: October 26, 2005 06:56 EDT
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Good news to all my fans: I am now writing up the first part of Day 3.
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Reviewed By: maoloch On: August 20, 2005 21:26 EDT
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Great chapter
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Reviewed By: Knight2 On: August 19, 2005 10:48 EDT
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Shinji/Mana chapter? That would be damn awesome. I'm waiting to see.
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Title: ch.6
Reviewed By: Peacemaker [MediaMiner Member] On: August 18, 2005 08:14 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ch.6 was a very well done chapter and Shinji now has done it with a total of ladies. The story is progressing along smoothly and I can't wait to see where this goes. Keep up the good work and update when you have time please.
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Reviewed By: cory On: August 14, 2005 20:45 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
keep writing
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Title: Great Series!!!
Reviewed By: AverageWolf02 On: July 21, 2005 01:44 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You really are a great writer!!! Everything about these chapters really keep you awake just wondering how it will turn out later on!!! You should continue this until you finish it up with the finale! Awesome job!!!
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