| "Sex Days: Shinji Ikari" Reviews/Comments [ 177 ] |
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Reviewed By: Taro M.D [MediaMiner Member] On: September 01, 2006 09:25 EDT
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THIS JUST IN! The mature lemon contest is now offically up and my contest entry is there as well... let's just say this. My entry is totally original.
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Title: Taro M.D
Reviewed By: Taro M.D [MediaMiner Member] On: August 04, 2006 07:56 EDT
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I had planned to make all chapters with only 3 parts but since we're now in the last half of the story... I'm going to make day 5-7 5 parters.
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Reviewed By: denisud On: August 03, 2006 22:51 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
A bit rushed in this chapter. Also I see the development here, course you can vary the parts of days 5,6 & 7, so this can stretch out a bit more. A suggestion, you could use Megumi From the 2nd Evangelion Movie to use as your ACC. dennisud
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Reviewed By: Dark Lord Tokunaga [MediaMiner Member] On: August 03, 2006 18:36 EDT
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...... Taro..... I normally log in to see and review stories..... and I would never use the tag, "The Lazy DLT Not Logging In" i would put that somewhere else.... and I can't think of anyone else on MM that uses my initals..... remember, I always log in to review a story...... anyway, Nice fic and stuff..... too annoyed to say any more then what has already been said..... and personally, i hate whips..... *loading gun* i prefer guns and swords.....
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Reviewed By: goggles195 On: August 03, 2006 16:23 EDT
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Another great chapter. Heh heh. I was wondering, where can I find the website for the lemon contest.
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Title: JAHOOOOO!!!!
Reviewed By: EVA-09 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 03, 2006 16:10 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
YAY! You updated! *runs over to the hill and shouts: "Taro M.D. UPDATED his story!"* Just kidding. We all have been waiting for this. And I'm a bit sad ti hear that someone tries to brake all the fun our heroes are going through. He wears glasses you said. It might be Kensuke or Gendo. If it is Kensuke, then why is he always sticking his ridicoulus nose in to other peoples love lives? And if it is Gendo, then he should die and burn in hell for making everyone suffer. But update soon, please. For inspiration, watch a movie. Like a porn movie for sex scenes and a drama film for other scenes. Just a suggestion from a big fan.
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Title: Good but bad
Reviewed By: volostheguardian [MediaMiner Member] On: August 03, 2006 15:56 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
At the beginning of this story, I had very hopes for the progress of it, and it seems to be up there with the works of Warpwizard and Rx7, at least in the short story section. Now, the more recent chapters seem to be more mindlessly written, like you were rushing to complete it. The thoughts of the characters have a uncharacteristic rapid fire feel to them, not feeling what they would normally think - in essence kinda out of character. Now granted its an out of character story, but even then their's a sorta half assed undertone like a child wrote it.. In addition the sentences tend to run into each other and there is a decided lack of say, commas. Overall I like the story, but I think I would forget the story if I waited another month for an update that doesn't live up to earlier chapters.
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Title: This Story Is Great
Reviewed By: Hazerd [MediaMiner Member] On: August 03, 2006 15:13 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Dog your story is in my opinon the best evangelion story i have ever read i cant fuckin wait until u finish this thig man keepit up man and update ASAP ill be lookin 4 it aite my Nig PEACE!!!!!!!!!!!
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Title: The Lazy DLT Not Logging In
Reviewed By: DLT On: August 03, 2006 10:17 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
TARO! Excellent as always! Keep up the great work. Now get to work on the contest! *cracks whip*
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Title: Oops..
Reviewed By: JSaysNo On: July 21, 2006 12:56 EDT
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Forgot e-mail. jlmason66@hotmail.com hehe
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Title: I Can Beta...
Reviewed By: JSaysNo On: July 21, 2006 12:55 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I think (in my honest opinion) I have read enough fanfiction to be of service to you. Not mention I am one of the many fans you mentioned. Keep it up man.
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Reviewed By: jarold On: July 20, 2006 23:33 EDT
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im a patient person i can wait.
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Title: Beta here
Reviewed By: Peacemaker(not logged in) On: July 12, 2006 16:42 EDT
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Hey man, great to hear from you again and I would be more than happy to be a beta for you :). If you would like some examples of work that I have helped on I could send you some. Here is my email adress: lessrof2evils18@aol.com and peace out man you rock!!!!!
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Reviewed By: Dark Lord Tokunaga [MediaMiner Member] On: July 12, 2006 14:53 EDT
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nice story.... and i'm ok with waiting..... i'm patient......
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Reviewed By: GrayBear32 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 05, 2006 15:13 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Some minor gramatical errors, but otherwise a well written fic.
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