| "Sex Days: Shinji Ikari" Reviews/Comments [ 177 ] |
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Reviewed By: Dark Lord Tokunaga [MediaMiner Member] On: February 06, 2007 19:59 EST
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i don't know if it's just me, but it seems like it's rushed.... this chapter i mean... it seems very rushed, as if you threw it together in the space of 15 minutes... no offence to you.... it was still comical and i can honestly feel sorry for kensuke.... and i'm stressed which leads to my review being formal.
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Title: Few facts explained
Reviewed By: Taro M.D [MediaMiner Member] On: February 01, 2007 05:26 EST
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Ok first off there's no virgin this story... the only one is Shinji and he lost it to Rei at 1-2, Rei was made up by cells as you know... personally Gendo's a pedophile. Asuka had experience when she was in college, I'm guessing lesbianism and Hikari who for one slept with Touji at this point then dumped him because he got hurt and ended up being emo. Yeah Vilkath I will agree with you on one point... Touji IS an idiot.
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Reviewed By: Vilkath [MediaMiner Member] On: January 30, 2007 19:55 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Interesting story, some plot even if it is not perfect it's more then most lemons. The lemon content is okay, a bit drab and undescriptive though. Could use a little more foreplay, and him pounding them gets old after a while. Best thing you seem to describe so far is the blowjobs. Love the odd pairings, a night with all three Horaki's has definetly been a fantasy of mine, that most fan fics dont' answer. Far as I know they have never officialy said her sisters ages, just one is older and one is younger. So perhaps the younger sister isn't to bad, mabye 11 or 12. Some what dispointed in how slutty/used you made most the girls. Only 14 and auska the only real virgin of the group? Rei is probably, but lacked a hymen, unless you just forgot to write that in. Mana being a prostitue was a bit anoying. I know it sort sets the scene, saying their sexualy depraved to begin with, but still. Just a turn a slight turn off to have such experienced sluts at a young age. Touji gave up Hikari after a 3 some with her sister? What an idiot.
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Title: Halleluyah!!
Reviewed By: MikeyP On: January 11, 2007 02:56 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hazaaah! Welcome back man. Glad to see you decided to restart this fic. I vote for the Hikari/Rei/Shinji 3-some. The more the better I say!
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Reviewed By: Dark Lord Tokunaga [MediaMiner Member] On: January 09, 2007 23:06 EST
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*encouragement?* i am sorry to hear that, but i don't mind how long it takes.... what matters is that you write something that you feel is good, not what other people say it's good and you think otherwise... do you understand? sorry for the rushed review, it's late as hell and i've still got a lotta h/w to finish... god damn my teachers... and if you're wondering about why my review is somewhat formal, i seem to write very formally when i'm depressed....
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Title: YAY
Reviewed By: A guy you know: 09 On: January 09, 2007 13:29 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yay! You updated this. Nice to see that you are not abandoning this. But why is Kensuke screwing things away from Shinji? And why is Touji getting stressed from the fact that Shinji is sleeping with his EX girlfriend? I hope you tell us. And I so want to see how things go when Kensuke blows everything to Shinji's lovers.
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Reviewed By: DB Waffles On: October 10, 2006 15:49 EDT
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Very good can't wait for the next chapter, but its kinda getting a little repetitve
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Reviewed By: Spite001 On: September 04, 2006 16:50 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love it. You have a very unique style and once I got started reading it I couldn't stop until I'd read all the chapters you have posted. I can't wait to read more.
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Title: Taro M.D
Reviewed By: Taro M.D [MediaMiner Member] On: September 02, 2006 07:19 EDT
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Thanks for voting guys you need to keep it up like... your support means all to me. Eva-09: I didn't want to go over the limit but there is always the chance I might re-write it and add some more scenes in a director's cut.
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Title: You got my vote
Reviewed By: EVA-09 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 02, 2006 05:47 EDT
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Your story was good, but you could have added some pussy licking and some titty grapping and fondling. But don't get me wrong, your story was arousing. I hope you win. Good luck. And like I said, I voted it.
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Title: Taro M.D
Reviewed By: Taro M.D [MediaMiner Member] On: September 01, 2006 21:00 EDT
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Guys take your time with this... don't go at it at once.
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Title: Of Course
Reviewed By: RyoTheSaiyan [MediaMiner Member] On: September 01, 2006 19:02 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love your story of course I'll vote for you! Waiting patiently for results!
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Title: Taro M.D
Reviewed By: Taro M.D [MediaMiner Member] On: September 01, 2006 17:11 EDT
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Alright if it helps then I will tell you the title of my entry... mine is Eva Stockholm, it has OC Pairings.
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Reviewed By: njmonteforte@earthlink.net On: September 01, 2006 15:10 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Excellent fanfic i've been following for quite a while. Proud to vote for you in the contest.
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Reviewed By: Shran On: September 01, 2006 14:21 EDT
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it would help if you told us the title, rather than, "Entry 2"
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