| "Sex Days: Shinji Ikari" Reviews/Comments [ 177 ] |
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Reviewed By: NuttyAl On: May 24, 2005 00:48 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Comment/Review:
Excellent! I am begging you to update around once a week! I Hope to see Hiraki in action soon! Why not have Misato thrown in just for a chaos' fun!
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Reviewed By: Gaara of the Sand54956 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 16, 2005 15:41 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm a big eva fan and you write a great story.
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Reviewed By: soul eva On: May 11, 2005 03:38 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
I agree with nunuskhan what he said to not to listen to those Lemonstatica members since they full of morons don't have a life especially Saiyan Price1, so continue with your story.
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Reviewed By: Taro MD On: May 11, 2005 02:48 EDT
Comment/Review:
How about this Mr Pointy, I do what I like... Fuck off.
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Reviewed By: Mr. Pointy On: May 11, 2005 02:22 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
Listen to those Lemontastica retards, because you're writing needs a hell of a lot of work.
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Reviewed By: nunuskhan On: May 08, 2005 14:19 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well, Taro, this is not the best lemon ever but it is far from crappy : no major grammar mistakes, a regular plot... Don't listen those Lemontastica faggots and go on.
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Reviewed By: FMA On: May 04, 2005 22:31 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i liked it alot and y do u always have to criticize it and all
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Reviewed By: JWMA On: April 30, 2005 18:27 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
Okay, you've improved a bit. However instead of 'a weapon' I would use something like 'a frying pan'.Also I think Shinji would be alot more freaked out waking up tied up. The line 'oh forget my morals' is a bit cliche along with 'the strength of 10 men'. Finally Shinji isn't the type of person to say cliches like 'I am no longer a WIMP'. I'm not trying to insult you, but you need to revise you're work.
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Reviewed By: JWMA On: April 29, 2005 22:41 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
No offense, but the Heart,Body,Soul line is really cliche. Your writing style needs revising,its also cliche for two 14 year olds to fuck like adults. Finally, Asuka would have probably started screaming. You have a good idea, but it needs work.
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Title: Taro MD
Reviewed By: Taro M.D [MediaMiner Member] On: April 27, 2005 05:11 EDT
Comment/Review:
Hikari will play some part in Day 2 I can pretty much confirm that.
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Title: Chapter
Reviewed By: hdfgdrttstetryt On: April 27, 2005 04:40 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Good chapter. I wonder when Hikari is gonna get in on the action?
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Title: Nice
Reviewed By: Unknown Flamer On: April 26, 2005 02:21 EDT
Comment/Review:
Pretty good. I didn't notice any spelling or grammer errors. Waiting for the next chapter...
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Reviewed By: Mr. Pointy On: April 25, 2005 06:12 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
Chapter 3 was better than the last two. Asuka knocking Shinji out and having her way with him was actually sort of funny. But you definitely still need to shorten your sentences - they make it hard to read your fic. It's the reason why I didn't read your first two chapters fully.
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Reviewed By: Oldwolf [MediaMiner Member] On: April 25, 2005 00:01 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
A superior story so far. Shinji's life is going to be very, very interesting for the forseeable future.
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Reviewed By: forechunkukee [MediaMiner Member] On: April 19, 2005 00:18 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey, keep up the good work so far! Your style of writing is good, its merely just a matter of personal preference on the matter. Your spelling and grammar thus far have been very impressive, save one or two mistakes. In particular, I was impressed by the plotline...have Ayanami and Sohryu fight over Shinji AND throw Horaki in the mix? very cool. I will be looking forward to see how this turns out, Keep it up!
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