| "Sex Days: Shinji Ikari" Reviews/Comments [ 177 ] |
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Reviewed By: Mr. Pointy On: April 25, 2005 06:12 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
Chapter 3 was better than the last two. Asuka knocking Shinji out and having her way with him was actually sort of funny. But you definitely still need to shorten your sentences - they make it hard to read your fic. It's the reason why I didn't read your first two chapters fully.
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Reviewed By: Oldwolf [MediaMiner Member] On: April 25, 2005 00:01 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
A superior story so far. Shinji's life is going to be very, very interesting for the forseeable future.
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Reviewed By: forechunkukee [MediaMiner Member] On: April 19, 2005 00:18 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey, keep up the good work so far! Your style of writing is good, its merely just a matter of personal preference on the matter. Your spelling and grammar thus far have been very impressive, save one or two mistakes. In particular, I was impressed by the plotline...have Ayanami and Sohryu fight over Shinji AND throw Horaki in the mix? very cool. I will be looking forward to see how this turns out, Keep it up!
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Title: Taro MD
Reviewed By: Taro M.D [MediaMiner Member] On: April 10, 2005 17:37 EDT
Comment/Review:
It might be, it might not be... one thing I've learnt is always expect the unexpected.
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Reviewed By: Saiyan Prince1 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 10, 2005 05:03 EDT
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i hope he stays with rei cause asuka going to kill him with time, or rei will kill her
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Title: Dun dun dun...
Reviewed By: AndrewJTalon On: April 09, 2005 10:45 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Nicely done, my friend. Keep it up!
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Title: Taro MD
Reviewed By: Taro M.D [MediaMiner Member] On: April 03, 2005 06:41 EDT
Comment/Review:
I do this for the fun of it. Thanks for the reviews though, I am working on Episode 2 at this moment.
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Title: bsmart
Reviewed By: Tiek Mo Shet [MediaMiner Member] On: April 02, 2005 22:08 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 3 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 2 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 2 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
To call this painful to read would be a gross understatement, sentence structure, punctuation, grammar in general, it's appalling. Lemon Rebellion was crap but it was vaguely readable crap. Aside from grammatical errors too numerous to count there is the simply problem that this concept is only slightly less well worn than the wheel. The characterizations were alright, though I'm not sure who you were characterizing since I don't recognize any Eva characters in the cast. Some how you've managed to turn out a lemon even worse than Lemon Rebellion.
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Reviewed By: Oldwolf [MediaMiner Member] On: April 02, 2005 08:22 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Fairly good overall. Very nice concept. The characters are slightly OOC but it's needed to make the story work. The only real problem I had on the technical aspect is that, while shorthand and the like are prefectly acceptable when used in speech and character written works, using them the rest of the time should be avoided if at all possible. Still, I like it and hope to see a continuation appear soon.
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Reviewed By: church On: March 30, 2005 16:19 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
not bad I look forward to the next chapter
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Title: Alright
Reviewed By: jj0 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 30, 2005 15:52 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Not bad
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Title: not bad
Reviewed By: Shanderson [MediaMiner Member] On: March 29, 2005 23:23 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Not bad, not bad atall. I liked it but every time I read a Rai/Shinji fanfic I get a little wierded out. Ya know, Rei being a Yui clone afterall. But good none the less.
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Reviewed By: DarkYggdrasil [MediaMiner Member] On: March 29, 2005 00:08 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 3 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 2 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 3 of 10
Overall Rating: 3 of 10 Comment/Review:
This fiction needs some work. Style and Grammar need to be taken more into consideration. Rewording is the best I can say to most of this fan fiction. Simply, if it was reworded it would make more sense and give a better flow to the entire story. While these "surface" errors do not make a completely horrible; the oddness, complete lack of sense, and bad pacing help it become "less than enjoyable". It needs more work and probably a editor to point out more specific errors.
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Reviewed By: Cyber Angel [MediaMiner Member] On: March 28, 2005 00:01 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey I did not thing it was bad I can not wait to see the next chapter
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Title: Hm...
Reviewed By: Andrew J. Talon On: March 27, 2005 19:50 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 4 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Not bad, my friend. Continue. It's a cliche concept, but not a bad fic at all.
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