| "Lost Hopes" Reviews/Comments [ 113 ] |
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Reviewed By: Ethril Dragon [MediaMiner Member] On: April 26, 2007 15:40 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I just finished reading the entire story and I needed to say that you are one of the greatest fanfiction writers I have ever seen. Never in my wildest dreams would I have imagined Inu-Yasha and Kouga in a situation like this (ok maybe in my wildest dreams...)The point is, you have a way of making this story even better then it is. I like how you were able to slightly alter the personalities of several of the characters so that they fit into this story, but not enough to really change who they are. (Personally I do think Kagome is a bitch) I really like the emotions you put the characters through and of course all of your own characters you placed in to make things better. Everyone and everything seems to really support the plot you have going. The most recent chapter I think is my favorite, although the earlier chapters really touched me emotionally. Don't quit writing this story, I sooo want to see two little furry pups of doom (because any child of Kouga or Inu-Yasha would mean doom on the world) running around. Also, I want to see Kagome become humble! Over all rating: Way higher then a ten my dear. This is probably one of the best Kouga/Inu-Yasha fan fictions ever
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Reviewed By: sesshys numba1 gurl [MediaMiner Member] On: April 26, 2007 10:04 EDT
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YES!!! KaHOme is finally getting what she deserves i hope she is alone 4 the rest of he life and never gets to see inuyasha again!!! update soon
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Title: Chapt. 33
Reviewed By: Bibi11 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 25, 2007 20:23 EDT
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Wow - 14 rewrites! I'm glad you didn't give up. A lot of nice things going on; the cubs visit to Inuyasha-sensi; Inu and his sister-in-law giving Katashi a couple of lumps for being a jerk; Keiko lets Kouga know that Inuyasha will have more than one pup (and then dosen't say how many!)and punishment is dealt to Kagome. Yeah, being stuck as a slave, endlessly cleaning every thing in sight and living off of table scraps 'cause she won't have time to find roots and berries to eat seems about right...lol And she could still be trouble; she could purify Inuyasha if she got a hold of him. The thing that I miss are the 'change of action' strings...the O O O O O O or * * * * * to show that some thing else is being talked about that you used earlier. How much longer before the pups are born? Can't wait for the next update! Thanks for another fun chapter!!
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Reviewed By: Zetsuii [MediaMiner Member] On: April 25, 2007 11:38 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow it has been while since the last chapter...I think I will have to reread...but thats ok cause I like it so much...please update some more though...need mroe angst yay
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Reviewed By: DBZVegeta [MediaMiner Member] On: March 10, 2007 19:53 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a very good story. The plot is realistic and well-thought out. I hope that you will update soon.
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Reviewed By: lostsun21 On: February 26, 2007 21:54 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like your story but I keep noticing A LOT of typos. You should re-read some of your chapters (I'm on chapter 13) to make sure you find and fix a lot of them.
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Title: wow
Reviewed By: shadowfantisy On: February 20, 2007 21:15 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this is really an awsome fic and I hope you're going to continue it, the plot is realy original and I realy love reading it. the writing style caught me a little off gaurd but ut's nice and your spellings better than that of some others. I give you full props on this fic and I'a so glad what you did w/Kagome*happy dance* she is evil. I don't like her much, but please continue this soon! thnx and major props to u and your beta you guys rock.
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Reviewed By: KADJFHKDXJFH On: November 18, 2006 10:53 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 2 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love your story's plotline! Kouga and Inuyasha make such a cute couple, especially when Kouga gets all possessive about Inuyasha. However, your grammar and whatnot is atrocious. Do you have a "beta reader"? If you don't, you need to get one; if you do, they're not doing their job. Normally, if I can figure out what you mean, I just overlook grammar, spelling, etc. I knew what you meant in most cases, but when I really stopped to read the actual words, I only confused myself. I believe you said, "we are anything but proud to have you at our side"? I interpreted it as, "we're not proud to have you with us". I know that's not what you meant, but that's what you wrote. You also said, "he should have disrespected his alpha"? I interpreted it as, "he should not have shown respect to his alpha". Again, I know that's not what you meant, but again, that's what you wrote. Most of the time, I know what you mean, but these mistakes are annoying and a little distracting. Although some of them are funny, like, "wedge a war". I think the word you're looking for is "wage". What you wrote, I couldn't even interpret that, it doesn't make any sense at all. I would like to tell you that I'm not harshly criticizing your writing because I find your elementary mistakes funny. I'm doing it to make you a better writer. I prefer not to sugarcoat the truth.
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Reviewed By: sesshys numba1 gurl [MediaMiner Member] On: November 14, 2006 18:29 EST
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awe kouga so possesive on inuyasha jeez lol. but its cute, update soon
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Reviewed By: inuyashawifey [MediaMiner Member] On: November 11, 2006 10:10 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
awesome story i hope to read more u r an awesome writer later and kagome desevered what is happening 2 her later
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Reviewed By: Zetsuii [MediaMiner Member] On: November 10, 2006 23:10 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
oh boy...stupid Kagome...thats what she gets for being an ass...but I cant wait for the next update...your writing is as good as ever...and I cant wait to read more of your work so update soon please
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Reviewed By: Zetsuii [MediaMiner Member] On: November 09, 2006 18:08 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow...it has been a long time since I have read this story...I ended up rereading it all over again since I missed maybe a year of not reading it I think...but OMG I am so happy that Inuyasha is pregnant again...I cant wait till the birth...like I said last time your story is awesome and the flow is amazing...saw some errors in grammer and spelling but that cant be helped...I hope to get an update soon from you...so please update PLEASE
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Reviewed By: slytherinstranger On: November 08, 2006 20:16 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Update! Update! Update! Please! i know i havent read this story in the last couple months, but now you've got me hooked! It's been a month please update!!!!
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Reviewed By: veka On: October 29, 2006 01:09 EST
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Gees, I hate Kagome now. I hope she ends up old and alone with a bzillions cats as company. So I love your story but i wish Inuyasha's character is portrayed as a hormonal female but as the stubborn and male-ly male that he is. Keep it going.
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Reviewed By: inuyashawifey [MediaMiner Member] On: October 22, 2006 19:29 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i don't know if the story is finished yet but it is totally awesome you are a wonderful writer i hope to read more
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