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| "Seductive Embrace" Reviews/Comments [ 157 ] | | Pages (11): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 › » ] | Reviewed By: Kuramas gurl [MediaMiner Member] On: June 15, 2005 06:54 PDT
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She hit the nail on the head with that about Hiei killing her. Update soon please.
| Reviewed By: DeJaVooo [MediaMiner Member] On: June 14, 2005 03:49 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey, a very nice fic, i love it so far.Can't wait till you update again, so please update soon, k? ^_^
| Title: Review Chapter Four, Continued
Reviewed By: Kin-chan Pandun [MediaMiner Member] On: June 13, 2005 18:14 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
(I can't believe my review was so long I had to submit it twice!) ....................... Anyway, on with the review. I'm very flattered that you used my idea to help you out with the story. I'm glad that I could be of help. Also, the part where the other girl tears off Kagome's shirt? I couldn't figure out what was going on there between the time Kagome dodged (what did she dodge, a slap?) and the part where her shirt was ripped open. Also, I'm not sure if Keiko should buy the whole "it was a dog" thing. Personally, I thought it was cool how her lame excuse was actually the truth in a roundabout way of looking at it. Maybe you could have Keiko try and talk to Kagome about it? Also, you should have Kagome keep Kurama's shirt (they can forget, or he can offer). Kurama can use that as excuse to talk to her again. I'm curious as to wether Kagome will find out/make any more observations on "Shuichi's" Youki? ALSO: If you kill Shippou, you will die. The kit and Kagome do not deserve it, after all they've both been through (esp. Shippou) to see each other again. Will you have Shippou reffer to Kagome as "mother"? I think it would be really sweet. Sess and Kouga could drag a broken Shippou to her, she would call out his name, he would go: "Kagome?", she would sob, and say: "Yes, Shippou, It's me." His head would be in her lap and he would go "Can I call you mother?", she would sob/smile "Yes" just B4 he passed out. It would be so perfect! *squeals* -_-; Thanks, Kin
| Title: Review Chapter Four
Reviewed By: Kin-chan Pandun [MediaMiner Member] On: June 13, 2005 17:49 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, I really liked this chapter (you using my idea had only the smallest influence on this opinion). You kept to your previously established characterizations. You did the movie scene wonderfully. You left clues about Kagome's past, but nothing overt besides her scars. Questions for this fic now include: When will Hiei and Kagome meet? Will Kagome just loll around tomorrow, and have nothing important happen (ie: skim over it, and then go on to the next day after putting in some fun Keiko/Kagome interactions)? When will Kagome go to Genkai's? How will she locate Genkai's? Will she ask for Directions from someone (Keiko?) and have them realize it's Genkai's, and then tell her they know the place/maybe will escort them there? What will Genkai sense of Kagome? What will Kagome sense of HER? Will Kagome be honest with her from the start? Will anyone (Hiei/Keiko) overhear Kagome's explanation to Genkai? How will Kagome explain her knowing about youkai? When will Hiei and Kurama see each other again/swap information on Kagome? What will happen to Shippou? Will Shippou be okay? What will Shippou reveal about Kagome? Will Shippou reveal anything about Kagome? What will happen between Kouga and Sesshoumaru? When will Sesshoumaru and Kouga miss Shippou? Will they be able to mount an immediately succesful rescue? Or will they have to go to the ningenkai and retrieve/confront Kagome? How are they/when are they coming to ningenkai? Will any of the Tantei meet them?
| Reviewed By: juana-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: June 12, 2005 16:08 PDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i really like your story. espically with Youko! ^^ Anyway, please keep writing!!
| Reviewed By: Kuramas gurl [MediaMiner Member] On: June 12, 2005 09:40 PDT
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I haven't noticed anything wrong...all fun and stuffs. update soon please. Kagome's another puzzle for Yoko to just try to figure out...but that's one puzzle that he'll never solve completely.
| Reviewed By: Fox Vixen [MediaMiner Member] On: June 12, 2005 09:28 PDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh the was so sad if it were me i'd had kagome straight beat the shit out of the lil bitch. but it's still a nice story very nice can't wait for the update.
| Reviewed By: Drachegirl14 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 12, 2005 06:21 PDT
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He-he! Very cool chappie, very cool. I love this story and I think that you are a very good writer. Really enjoyed it, more soon please!
| Reviewed By: Bad_boy_lover [MediaMiner Member] On: June 12, 2005 01:38 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
its a great story, i like they way you put it together, though it was very anitclimatic. though, i was fun to read, and i'm no better. great story, please update it soon.
| Reviewed By: Ryukotsusei [MediaMiner Member] On: June 11, 2005 23:11 PDT
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Wonderful chapter, I love how you are portraying Youko. Too many people pass his character off as an oversexed playboy without a brain in his head. It's wonderful that you are giving him the depth of character that he deserves. I look forward to reading future chapters, Update soon please.
| Reviewed By: moonscout11 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 11, 2005 21:01 PDT
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THAT WAS COOL! PLEASE UPDATE!
| Title: Review Chapter Three
Reviewed By: Kin-chan Pandun [MediaMiner Member] On: June 11, 2005 16:32 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Okay, I take back what I said in my first review. This fic is totally original and I LOVE IT!!! I love the characterizations. I love the writing style. I love the mood. I love the ambiance. I love the plot (or at least what I've seen of it). I love the interactions, and MOST ESPECIALLY, I love how it's practically typo/mispelling/grammar atrocity-free! I LOVE YOU! Please continue. This is going up there right next to "Par Tout Autre Nom" (formerly "By Any Other Name") as a grade-A, first class, Kagome/Kurama fanfic! I can't wait to read more! When will Kurama accidentally see Kagome's scars? What will Kagome say as an excuse? Will Kurama notice the scars were inflicted by a Demon? How is the new antagonist going to get wind of Kagome? When will Kagome meet Genkai? What will happen in the mean time? The list of questions goes on! ALSO: I think that they should all see a horror movie, so that Kagome and Yusuke can laugh at it. Keiko (funnily enough) would probably be the only one scared! Kagome could sympathize with the "monsters"! It would be a wonderful opportunity for Kurama to make observations about her! Whatever you do, please continue writing! ... ... Luck, Kin ... ... ... ... ... ... PS: I love how you've put a baddie in here, and how it won't be solely romance. That story path can get slow, tedious, boring, and redundant. I LOVE YOU AND CONTINUE!
| Title: Review Chapter Two
Reviewed By: Kin-chan Pandun [MediaMiner Member] On: June 11, 2005 16:07 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yes! You had them "meet" but didn't force anything! You're going to draw the information aout over long periods of time! I can hardly believe my good fortune in finding this fanfic! I love you! You're brilliant! You're restrained! You're NON-CLICHE! You rock! ... ... ... I can see you are setting up a Kurama/Kagome pairing here, but all I want to say is: Go For It! BUT DON'T RUIN IT! Don't wreck it with that "love/lust at first sight" shit. That is dumb and tacky. Draw it out, make the chase for information last long. ... ... ... May I say again that I LOVE YOU?!?! ... ... ... Ahem, Thank you and please continue writing your wonderful story. Gratefully, Kin-chan Pandun
| Title: Review Chapter One
Reviewed By: Kin-chan Pandun [MediaMiner Member] On: June 11, 2005 15:51 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Okay, this story has, oddly enough, not the most original concept when it comes to getting Kagome and the tantei to meet. HOWEVER, this piece is wrought so wonderfully, and done with so much care, that I think this will turn out to be an exceptional fanfiction. Also, you combined two cliches to form your own story, and, in doing so, have created a new thing, with your own style and mood. I really love this fic, and it feels different from so many others that I've read. Please continue, and be careful not to rush a "spill the beans" confrontation between Kagome and the Tantei. Although I doubt you're in danger of that. I really love both the writing style, the ambiance, and the fact that it is practically error-free. Please, please, please continue, I would love to read more than the few chapters you have posted here. ... ... Luck, Kin-chan Pandun
| Reviewed By: Reiti Hecam On: June 11, 2005 07:02 PDT
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Oh, this is so good! I hope InuYasha comes back so Kagome can sit him so hard, he...Heh heh heh...
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