| "A Dark Past" Reviews/Comments [ 244 ] |
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Reviewed By: geminis [MediaMiner Member] On: January 02, 2006 22:55 CST
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wow i like the story keep up the good work and up date soom
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Reviewed By: dangersque [MediaMiner Member] On: January 02, 2006 16:14 CST
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I'm a lot less confused now that you explained things in the reviewer response. It probably would have been hard to work that stuff into the story without it seeming like you were hitting us with the exposition hammer. And about that jailbreak, I see what you're saying about having nowhere to go, but he does have his entire punishment to work that problem out. Of course, that's assuming Inuyasha gets motivated enough to do anything. (And you decide to change the whole direction of your story because of one measly reviewer.) The way you write Inuyasha kind of reminds me of Daria. He just seems content to stay on the sidelines and watch the insanity around him unfold and make smartass comments to himself. Changing the way they are treating Inuyasha isn't a bad idea. Some say the definition of insanity is repeating the same things over and over and expecting a different result, which is exactly what Kaede's doing. This raises the question, who are really the crazy ones: the patients or the staff? Did I just blow your mind? Now onto the chapter you wrote: I liked the interaction between Inuyasha and Kagome. He wasn't overly mean, and she wasn't overly sensitive. Good job. And were you hinting at something with the Souta mentions? Did something bad happen and Inuyasha's the reason (or covering up the reason)? Or am I looking too much into things and pulling stuff from a certain body part? Wench actually is a correct term for Kagome, it's slang for a young woman (dictionary.com).
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Title: please update
Reviewed By: inu_kagforever [MediaMiner Member] On: January 01, 2006 22:36 CST
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
omg i love this story u have to update soon i cant wait to see if kagome took miroku's jod as inuyashas baby sitter PLEASE UPDATE!!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: dangersque [MediaMiner Member] On: December 31, 2005 21:50 CST
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Oops, I forgot to add... If they won't use real doctors there, is it safe to assume they don't use real security either? Is there going to be a jail break in the near future? Because that would be cool.
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Reviewed By: dangersque [MediaMiner Member] On: December 31, 2005 21:48 CST
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About waiting for the answers all I can say is.... boo-urns. I'm impatient dammit! I know you said you'd explain about the teenagers, but I'd still be wary of sending my child to any place using that many teenagers. I mean, don't they have school? How can they spend that much time there? His parents must not like him too much if they're sending him to a shoddy place like that. And that art class gave me flashbacks of my high school art class. Seriously, that could have been my art teacher. I like how everyone else in the class has been "drinking the kool-aid" so to speak. Has Kagome replaced Miroku? Is Kaede hoping that Inuyasha's hormones will kick in, making him more pleasant to impress a pretty girl? Or is she trying a new approach because Miroku knows him too well? This chapter seemed really short to me. I don't know why, it's about the same length as the others and I didn't skip anything... Weird.
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Reviewed By: Cindyve13 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 29, 2005 20:36 CST
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well i finally caught up with this story. I'm interested to see were is going and I'm dying to see why inu and the rest of them are there. There is much more to kogas story that constantly wanting attention right?? I kinda have a thought about why he's there but i'm not sure if it's correct. Also is there going to be a thing with him and auyume?? Well I hope you update soon and good luck with the writing. I'll try to review the story any time I have a thought or question about it. take care. Peace!
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Reviewed By: dangersque [MediaMiner Member] On: December 28, 2005 15:52 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This story's great! I get endless entertainment from it and I don't know why. I think it would be great to have Inuyasha be even more of a shit disturber, I mean, he has to get entertainment somehow right? What can they do to him? His life's already completely miserable. I'd like to know more about his family though. Were his parents the type that would lock him in his closet when he was bad or were they more the type to send him to Tranquility Bay and pretend there is no problem? What made him snap? Why is the center run by teenagers? Why is an 18 year old doing the job of a shrink? When will he punch Miroku in the throat (He's so annoying in this story)? When will these questions be answered? It keeps me up at night. Seriously though, I think he's right not to respect or trust that place. They seem to be more concerned with keeping up appearances and killing time with useless activities than actually helping. Even his former best friend treats him like a precocious child. Respect should not be given, it should be earned, and nobody running that center would have earned it from a rational person.
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Reviewed By: priestessmykala On: December 27, 2005 23:33 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 4 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i am interested and i would like to see you addmore and get it going im soo sorry that wwIII has happened in your own home
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Reviewed By: star555555528 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 01, 2005 14:47 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i love ur story its amazin please keep going and post soon please well bye star555555528
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Title: review
Reviewed By: kag_gurl On: November 28, 2005 19:26 CST
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I loved this story it was real funny!! that little girl inuyasha talked to was Rin right? that was sweet he helped her. and i'm sorry about your grandmother but i know how you feel i was really worried about the few times my grandma was in the hospital because she was sick or got hurt and then she's alone now but i get to see her a few times a year. But i hope you will update soon!!!
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Reviewed By: bbbeleana On: November 28, 2005 14:21 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Your story is great! I couldnt stop laughing while reading it.Keep up the humor in the story! I am really interested in the background and so on. See ya soon, bbbeleana
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Reviewed By: InuBaby369246, not signed on On: November 26, 2005 16:19 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm sorry about what happened to your grandma! But, the fanfic was sooo funny. I will wait patiently until you update.
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Reviewed By: DMInuyasha [MediaMiner Member] On: November 26, 2005 11:07 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Im sorry to hear about you grandma. Mine just broke her foot. Ill wait so no rush to update.I hope your grandma gets better.
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Reviewed By: DMInuyasha [MediaMiner Member] On: November 25, 2005 21:47 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You now have me hocked. so ill beg. PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE UPDATE SOON
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Reviewed By: steelfether11 On: November 15, 2005 06:49 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
please continue this fic I realy want to see how kagome fits in to the story.
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