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| "Purity 9: Subterfuge" Reviews/Comments [ 2359 ] | | Pages (158): [ « ‹ 104 105 106 107 108 109 110 111 112 113 114 115 116 117 118 119 120 121 122 123 › » ] | Title: Chapter 46: **sniff** Oh, HOLD me, somebody!!!!!!
Reviewed By: iloveanimecartoons [MediaMiner Member] On: February 07, 2009 07:32 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
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Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Damn...just, damn. I...wow. **blows out a breath** That famous Evan temper mixed with hurt, guilt and incredulty is...intense! And poor V, just lost for words--whoo, my stomach about slammed to my feet when she almost said Diet's name! And I loved how Bas was being so patient with Evan...just warms the heart. But, seriously, This chapter was a bittersweet one and I love the emotional growth between Evan and V. Especially this part: "Thought you said you were my friend, too," he murmured. Valerie managed a weak little smile. "I am," she agreed, leaning forward, clasping his knee and giving a gentle squeeze. PLUS, Sue, I'm SO glad that, from what I've read, Miss looks to survive the mate seperation byway of never being marked--at least, I HOPE so! Please, oh please, oh pleaaaaaaaaaaaaase, Sue! I ADORE Daniel and would be HEARTBROKEN to see him lose BOTH parents!
| Reviewed By: theablackthorn [MediaMiner Member] On: February 07, 2009 06:03 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I just can't describe the sens of feeling this chapter evkes. IT's so profound and yet so very sad too. Amazing.
| Reviewed By: WhisperingWolf [MediaMiner Member] On: February 06, 2009 21:02 PST
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I wish I had the eloquence and words to describe the feelings this chapter evoked in me. Suffice it to say, in short, this chapter left me breathless.
| Reviewed By: Meru [MediaMiner Member] On: February 06, 2009 20:32 PST
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blah! V's gotta give Marvin the boot. I agree that its a good thing Diet didn't mark Miss, though she would probably still get sick and really weak, but I think she would fight for Daniel. Cain stayed around after his mate died (and he marked Isabelle didn't he?) for Belle, because he didn't want her to be alone. and he later found Gin 8D
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Reviewed By: Titiana [MediaMiner Member] On: February 06, 2009 19:24 PST
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This chapter was really sweet and emotional. Can I just say I absolutely LOVE Valerie and wish I was her sometimes... Anyway I can't wait for an update!
| Reviewed By: Dark Inu Fan [MediaMiner Member] On: February 06, 2009 18:51 PST
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Heh... number 667, I was one off! I'm glad that Dieter never got around to marking Miss, I was worried about that. Evan and Valerie, they've practically professed their love to each other, yet not. I wonder how it'll be when she finally has to break up with Marvin. Maybe that might put a spark in his britches and a flame in his eye to be more passionate in things that aren't work related. Keep up the good work, dark
| Reviewed By: inyu01 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 06, 2009 16:21 PST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this story!!I feel so sorry for evan!!I hope the story gets better.I had a question well i read all mostly all of your stories this is the last one i have left I was wondering do you know anyone who writes just as good as you in your opinion.I LOVE ALL OF YOUR STORIES!!!!!! KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!!!!!!!!!!
| Reviewed By: DonthatemecuzImbeautiful [MediaMiner Member] On: February 06, 2009 15:14 PST
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Daniel...oh, that part just got to me right here in the heart. The whole chapter I kept thinking "Poor Evan..." But I can't help but think that maybe, just maybe, Diet's death was a way of making Evan grow up and see that he's not immortal by any means. Though Diet being gone is incredibly painful and awful, in the end, something good has got to come out of it. Still, even though this chapter had me nearly bawling in the worst way, I adored the end. AHHHHH! So...much...LOVE!
| Reviewed By: Sovereignty [MediaMiner Member] On: February 06, 2009 15:09 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
great chapter! Poor Evan... I really wonder how Miss will be... I really loved this bit too Evan nodded as though he could understand that. "For Maddy?" he challenged. Valerie let out a deep breath and a husky chuckle. "For Maddy . . . I'd give up everything I own . . . I'd give up . . . my kidneys or my . . . my liver . . . or my shoes . . ." He smiled wanly at the hint of teasing in her tone. "And for me?" he asked quietly. Valerie was caught off-guard by his question, even though she probably shouldn't have been. She opened her mouth to answer, but paused, a distinct shiver rushing up and down her spine as the memory of those hours when she didn't know whether he was alive or dead ran through her mind. "I'd . . . I'd give up my sanity for you, Evan," she replied in a whisper.
| Reviewed By: malitiadixie [MediaMiner Member] On: February 06, 2009 14:17 PST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
So, out of great saddness comes something good. The further bonding of V and Evan. Great chapter, and I still wanna cry...
| Title: Chapter 46
Reviewed By: Ryo5492 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 06, 2009 13:11 PST
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awwww so cute...you know i almost thought youd have sesshoumaru come in and save dieter with tenseiga...but then again...how practical would that be? i mena diets bdy is gone...so yah...
| Reviewed By: Sesshomaru4Kagura4ever [MediaMiner Member] On: February 06, 2009 12:17 PST
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That's so sweet, how Evan's telling Val how he feels about her, but... the guy's dead... that's... kind of sick... I mean, no retribution for Diet's death, no outlet... Evan's gonna be hurting for a LONG time...
| Reviewed By: OROsan0677 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 06, 2009 11:24 PST
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I liked the ending to that chapter, it's just hard to know that Valerie doesn't know anything about his heritage, it'd probably be a lot more easy for her to understand things, but then again, be worse because of the possible outcome with Miss. About that...if Miss was that in tune with Diet mate wise, regardless of her not being marked, wouldn't she still have to really fight to stay alive? I'm thinking in the psychological sense of course! Just wondering because of Cain and Gin even though they weren't mates in any form besides psychological they were still were mates of the heart, so does that count?
| Reviewed By: sunshine161820 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 06, 2009 10:37 PST
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i think there's more to this story than an accidental shotting. it was too accuarte for the guy to be aiming at Zel and D when there weren't even any docters outside. his story would've made since if Zel was still inside the building but he was outside so there was no reason for the guy to shot....i think its a coverup!! but that last scene bt zel and v was soooo sweet. more please : )
| Reviewed By: Dark Inu Fan [MediaMiner Member] On: February 05, 2009 14:39 PST
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That is true, what about the kid. Though Miss is human... maybe, maybe she would survive... Keep up the good work, dark
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