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| "Chains" Reviews/Comments [ 115 ] | | Pages (8): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 › » ] | Reviewed By: Cody Thomas being lazy On: May 23, 2010 12:03 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
The Chibi definitely has a sweet tooth about as large as my own. Yohji, needs to learn Aya-pet is relating to the fact he's in a BEDROOM more than the fact he's actually scared. He was trained as a sex-slave Yohji-kun, bedrooms are not the safe havens for him that they are to us, so whenever you put him in one he will fall back on behaviors that he has been mentally trained to result in the least amount of harm to him. if you want him to really start getting better Yohji-kun, keep him out with others for longer periods of time, let him stay mostly in the living room or kitchen, and if you all need to discuss something sensitive send him to the other room, not the bedroom. perhaps make him a room of his own, he'll relax a bit more if his master isn't always in the room with him. This room can either have a couch that turns into a bed, or a twin, something which would only fit a single person comfortably and Aya wouldn't immediately equate with sex occurring in it. place the bed in the corner so he has a sense of having some protection and nothing can sneak up on him from that side. Give him a set of inside window locks so he can control if he wants the window open or not and give him thick blackout curtains so he knows that no one can look in and watch him. maybe even a simple locking doorknob when he gets a bit better will also make him feel more secure. I love this story Miko san and thank you for all the fast updates!
| Reviewed By: Cody Thomas being lazy On: May 23, 2010 11:42 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
My wife kidnaps the computer for two days and I get to come back to FOUR lovely chapters of my beloved Miko's writing! It will take QUITE a bit to make me have anything even remotely resembling a bad day after that! I'm so glad the outing went relatively well, I KNEW Aya-pet would find that sweater. Yohji-kun admit it, Aya wouldn't be Aya without the hideous thing. Although, I doubt it's the actual COLOR he loves so much as the warm, thick, comfy softness. So maybe if you are very sneaky about it, you could either darken it to red and from there to violet or black, or lighten it to yellow or even cream if you tried. There are ways around any ugly sweater situation.
| Reviewed By: Cody Thomas being lazy On: May 20, 2010 01:21 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
you know, if Yohji hates the collar so much, he might have more success at getting it off by replacing it. Buying or even making a new collar for Aya and explaining to him that that was the collar from the old master and his ownership, and since that relationship is over he has no more need to wear it since he has a new owner, and Yohji's collar is a symbol of his new start. Many willing dom/sub relationships have a collaring ceremony of some sort, it can be very special to the couple.
| Reviewed By: Cody Thomas being lazy On: May 20, 2010 01:16 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, I wonder how THIS is going to go, being out in public and all. I must admit I am rather worried. I hope it goes well.
| Reviewed By: Cody-san the sleepy On: May 18, 2010 14:03 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
heh awww Yohji I could cuddle you for how nice you're being... I think I will *tackle hug glomp* I think there is a slight bond forming here, can't wait to see it progress!
| Reviewed By: Degenerate On: May 18, 2010 05:52 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this story :D You write really well, and it's really interesting! Pllleeeeeaaassseee please please keep up with the frequent updating!!
| Reviewed By: Anonymous1191 On: May 17, 2010 18:15 EDT
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Oh wow, that was really well-written. It does seem strange now what exactly Schwarz is doing with Aya's sister. Because after Ran is sold, they don't really have any point to keep her other than to threaten Ran (Schuldig's mind reading doesn't even work over long distance, right?). Also, if they actually do kill her, they no longer have any leverage on Ran (well, only when he finds out that is). Argh this is interesting. I really wanna know what's going on. =) You write very well!
| Reviewed By: Cody Thomas the lazy On: May 17, 2010 10:52 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
"Go Yohji! Whoot! ^_^ Actual progress in the right direction!" *Brushes Omi's and Aya-pet's hair* "Omi love, will you hold Ken still so I can do his next? I doubt Yohji will put up so much fuss. Honestly Ken, you're acting like it's some violation of your masculinity to have a woman brush your hair." O_O "You're a GIRL?!" *Glares* "You know, I normally take that as a compliment, how the hell did you make it an insult? Boys, hold him down, lets have a little fun with my new little Ken doll." "Noooooo!" I'm only borrowing him Miko-san, I promise I won't hurt him. *hears muffled whimpers coming from the torture chamber.* '^_^ and Schuldig is still a little tied up, he found a few uh 'toys' that are keeping him quite occupied. thanks for the update! they makes me happy!
| Reviewed By: Cody Thomas being lazy On: May 15, 2010 10:36 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow two more chapters! You spoil us Miko! ^_^ those flashbacks just make me want to hurt those bastards for harming my beautiful Aya-pet. I hope Yohji can earn his trust soon, it would be Sooooooo cute to see them cuddling!
| Reviewed By: Cody Thomas being lazy On: May 13, 2010 14:40 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow TWO chapters! No matter HOW sick I am I feel spoiled! I feel so bad for Aya-pet, this is quite the confusing world he landed in, and Farfarello is worrying me a LOT. I hope he hit his Femoral Artery when he stabbed himself. *get's the Hentai Slug's attention with a neon pink thong* Pssst if you really want out, I still live in Las Vegas, about 2 miles from the Strip, and I have a whole fully furnished bedroom I don't really use. Come on, how does a little 2 week vacation sound? You know you're not gonna get a better deal than that! All I ask is for you to wear your bishie form to attract prey-I mean pretty gay boys, and give me some of the most perverted ideas you can think of which I promise to write down faithfully. What do you say? ^_^ and Miko, since you're offering so nicely and Aya-pet is asleep... *Grabs Shuldig's leash* Get over here you disgusting piece of flesh, after what you did you don't even deserve to be called human. You are going to clean up every room in my house and you get no breaks until you are done! If you don't move fast enough, you will feel my whip, and I promise you, I'm not going to hold back. When you are finished, you and I are gonna have a little instructional time in my Torture Chamber. It's filled with all kinds of toys I think you'd be interested in, most are fully functional replicas from the Spanish inquisition, and some are my own invention. I'm going to demonstrate how each and every one of them works, and YOU get to be the demonstration model! Won't that be fun? I hope your interwebs come back soon Miko, I love reading your writing!
| Reviewed By: Cody Thomas being lazy On: May 11, 2010 13:59 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well it's progress. Hey Omi, pick up a toothbrush for Aya while you're at the store will you? Hmm thanks for the offer, but I don't like Schuldig much, especially in this fic. Unless you are willing to loan him out as torture chamber fodder I don't think I should take him. *brushes Aya-pet's hair.* I think itis best if I stick with pretty little Aya-pet. ^_^
| Reviewed By: Cody Thomas being lazy On: May 06, 2010 23:09 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Aaaaaand I was right... Ok Yohji, Pet recovery 101. First off, get his ass in bed and order him to stay there if you have to. These should help keep him occupied. *Hands over tray full of books, word searches, sudoku, crosswords, dvd's, and hand held video games.* You will keep him in said bed at all times except for bathing and natural functions. Next, I hear you aren't very handy in the kitchen and that's ok, I'll let you know the EXTREMELY easy way to nurse him back to health. Mix a 50/50 solution of water with non-acidic juice like apple or grape, then add a quarter teaspoon of salt. Have him take SMALL sips only. This will hydrate him, raise his blood sugar, help him retain fluids, start to balance his electrolytes, and stave off hunger pains. Once he has kept down a full glass you can make a tasty, healthy 'quick soup' by mixing a can of chicken or beef broth and a small can of V8 juice then warming it in the microwave. When he starts holding things down regularly, add protein and starch to help him recover muscle and put on weight. Put rice or soft tofu in the broth, give him a few crackers, or give him some mashed regular or sweet potatoes on the side and gradually work up to eggs and meat. But if you give him any dairy before he's up to at LEAST eggs, I will kill you myself. If his blood sugar drops dramatically when his metabolism starts kicking in again, give him a few spoonfuls of honey with some room temperature water to balance things out. And voila, your pet will soon be on his way to recovery. *huggles Miko* I would kill the guy who killed your internet, but it would prevent me from reading your work once you get it back, due to me being in jail... so I'll just be patient. ^_^
| Reviewed By: Cody Thomas being lazy On: May 06, 2010 22:26 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Food is good, but Yohji, I think you aren't starting small enough. Curry? Honestly? With how long he's been deprived of food? His stomach will have shrank, I doubt he can keep down solids, I was surprised with the coffee to be honest. I do NOT see this ending well. *prepares nutrient water, and broth.*
| Reviewed By: Cody Thomas being lazy On: May 06, 2010 02:15 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Omi really? A spy? Seriously? what crack are you smoking? and Aya Pet looked cute kneeling by Yohji's feet. Take you'r head out of your ass and stop scaring him or I'll tie you up and throw you into the closet with the Hentai Slug. REALLY?! All mine for a whole hour?! I LOVE YOU MIKO! And if his condition is any different than when I took him it will only be improvements I promise! ^_^ *clips a leash on his (now properly cared for) collar.* come on Aya-pet I'll bet you've never had a nice soothing massage before, we'll do that first and then I've got a nice pretty new collar for you, it's black suede and green velvet, it will look beautiful with your hair and skin tone... oooh and outfits! I have so many outfits I wanna put you in, things that are sexy AND covers you at the same time. I'll make you feel just like the wonderful pet you are! Come on Aya-pet let's go play!
| Reviewed By: kat716 On: May 05, 2010 23:06 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is so entertaining to read. I feel bad for Aya, but Yohji will take good care of him. I'm grateful that you update often. Thanks. N
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