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| "Kindergarten Flirting" Reviews/Comments [ 84 ] | | Pages (6): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 › » ] | Title: WooHoo!
Reviewed By: inuyashaloverr [MediaMiner Member] On: April 21, 2012 19:34 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
There is nada thing I'd change in how you're telling your story here. Nope, zip, zilch, nada! You have kept me highly entertained all throughout with your storytelling, and I can totally see each and every character being as you've written them, including the OCs! But when I see Yash and his sense of humor it just makes me wonder if that's how he would've been in the series if RT would've let the lose reigns. And it be a shame everyone can't have a fun and interesting workplace as the one you've created in your story. Would be fun as hell to work in such a place, all things considered. Thanks Much for writing and sharing. ;) | Reviewed By: Ame'sLostIt [MediaMiner Member] On: April 21, 2012 18:50 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
When I first found this story last night, and began reading it, I swear I was hooked. I was up until 3 in the freaking morning reading this, and only got about halfway through. Then this morning when I got up, the first thing I wanted to do was continue [ But, alas, I had things to do! ] But I finally got back to reading it about four hours ago. :) I very much love the creativity you put into this story, I've only seen about one or two stories where Kagome works for InuYasha, but everything else about this is very unique! :) | Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: April 20, 2012 21:38 PDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Awesome update! I think this went perfectly! It was funny that Kagome was mad for a second for him dragging her away to remove the renchaku now, just because he hadn't asked her...a 'principle of the thing' kind of mad at him, although she was clearly going to go along with it. I LOVED that he had that serious moment where he sincerely apologized, and she has forgiven him from realizing that he honest to truly didn't mean to hurt her, he hadn't known and he hadn't done it on purpose. It was an accident because he's just an idiot; an idiot in love. I love that he took her out to eat and that she's basically willing to stay with him as close to 24/7 as needed to stay healthy until it wears off (I'm kind of glad that there was no way to remove it aside from upping the ante with the higher up mark; that fits better with what you'd originally intended the renchaku to be. After all, if it were reversible then it wouldn't have been so deadly in the past or outlawed in the first place). And just when we might start to think Inuyasha's really matured from this experience? BAM! Trick roses! I have to admit that even I didn't see that coming and was just as shocked about the water in the face as Kagome...before I proceeded to laugh just like the people out in the hall were laughing, LOL. I think this was perfect, he proved that he can be mature and sincerely apologize, but now that she's forgiven him and it's 'crisis averted' he can happily go back to being himself. After all, if she's ever going to fall in love with him then it has to be the real him; what good would putting on an act do? Something tells me all that childish behavior is not an act, he's just stuck in perpetual 'class clown' mode, LOL. I love it! I'm so glad that she was (more or less) okay with it and her thoughts were not that she's given up on him all over again and is hurt and/or pissed off by him reverting back into his pranks but rather her thoughts were 'It's on now!' and she intends on playing his game and winning it. I'm routing for Kagome! LOL | Reviewed By: Snowfall [MediaMiner Member] On: April 20, 2012 15:22 PDT
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"I love you...I love you" Bam! Water to the face. I laughed so hard. You are ebil! Hilarious chapter. Love Totosai and glad Kagome wasn't mad. ^_^ | Reviewed By: Breebear On: April 13, 2012 11:19 PDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is so great so far. I really can't wait for you to finish writing this. I hope it's soon. I can't wait to see what happens with Sango either. | Reviewed By: bluerose3514 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 02, 2012 15:42 PDT
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"I'M IN-TUNE WITH HER BODY TOO; YOU DON'T SEE ME FLAUNTING THAT!" Classic, lol. Wonderful chapter. Inu can be such a child sometimes, haha. | Title: Really?
Reviewed By: weyrdkat [MediaMiner Member] On: April 02, 2012 12:34 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Really? People stopped reading because of the renchaku? I thought it was extreme to her at a couple of points, but in no way did I feel it was out of context with the rest of the story. He wasn't hurting her on purpose and if he didn't know he couldn't fix it. I liked the idea rather than all the "marking" that everyone does all the time. I'm kinda sorry to see it go so soon, but I hope you can get it to fit the way you want your story to go. I really like the way the dialog played out in this chapter too. Keep up the good work. | Reviewed By: angel-up-above-heaven (not logged in) On: April 01, 2012 17:35 PDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I could see why people might of not liked the idea of the Renchaku, but I didn't mind it. Stories are made up and the author can write about anything they want. Anyways it didn't bother me, it made me giggled =P and I just love how they yell at each other at work, makes me laugh haha. Cant wait to read what happens next =P | Title: I love you!!
Reviewed By: Sango Tajiya [MediaMiner Member] On: April 01, 2012 11:59 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is one of the best stories I've ever read in my life and I haven't even finished it yet. Every LINE is just filled with hilarity and brilliance. You've had me cracking up in my room all day and you have me waiting at the edge of my seat to see where their relationship is going. It's romance but it's REALISTIC romance and I can see where they're both coming from y'know? It all makes sense. I also love how you put Naraku in the story, but you didn't put him as the stereotypical villain. This story is just fuckin AWESOME!!! THANK YOU for making such a great story. ^_^ | Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: March 30, 2012 20:29 PDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Perfect chapter! First of all, I was going to start this review off with "Bwahahahahahahahaha!" because I was literally Laughing Out Loud through damn near the whole thing, but that serious bit at the end there tampered me down enough so I'm not still laughing my ass off. But back to the laughing my ass off, that shit was funny! Oh kami...*wipes tear* and then just when I think we've switched over into less-funny mode you have a guy named Kanji Romanji? WTF? LOL! But that seriousness at the end there...I gotta tell ya, that's my personal favorite kind of plot device. This is exactly the type of situation I was hoping would happen. Although I hate to do anything bad to Kagome, really, I like the scenario of Inuyasha being a dumbass, and it taking something bad happening to Kagome that snaps him out of it, preferably with that something bad being a direct result of something he did in his dumbassedness. I'm sorry to hear you lost some followers because of the Renchaku, but for me personally I like the idea. Although, strictly speaking from within the story's POV, as if that universe is real, then I do not think Inuyasha should have done that if he really loves Kagome and I can agree with why the Renchaku was banned. But there again, he was just being a dumbass. You've revealed now that he didn't know how badly it was really affecting her, physically. He thought it just made her more 'heartache' and depressed and longing for his presence. Not that she could literally not breathe and could very possibly, actually die from it. And it makes perfect sense, because it's a demon curse, so it's magic, you don't need to explain it beyond that, and for back in the day when the woman could always be with her man then no harm done, but in this day and age? I'm just REALLY glad the trip to Canada had been bogus from the beginning just to screw with her, and I'm even more glad that you've thrown in a way that it can magically be reversed as well. Sure why not. It's your invention so I won't argue what can and cannot be done. But even if it can't be undone, worst case scenario now is that Inuyasha will make sure he's around Kagome 24/7 until it wears off but he'll be inconsolable in his guilt. That might do him some good, actually. And Kagome, too, because then she would realize that he really does care, that he hadn't meant to put her through so much torture, and maybe, just maybe, she can forgive him then. I said it before and I'll say it again, whatever you decide to do is fine with me. Some people out there might be quitters, but I could never quit you. ;-) | Reviewed By: angel-up-above-heaven (not logged in) On: March 26, 2012 06:18 PDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
nawww its like a cute dream with the both of them having coffee XD when will Inuyasha tell Kagome that he aint leaving? like will he pop into work monday morning and surprise everyone?? haha anyways i love it and I think that plan is going to backfire on Kagome =P | Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: March 24, 2012 11:31 PDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Awww...sweet update. Looks like even though Inuyasha is still mostly his cocky-bastard self he does also feel at least a little bit guilty for what he's putting Kagome through. I'm definitely glad that he's not actually going to Canada, because that could've created an honest health risk, with how bad her attacks seem to get in his absence. Sango was probably right in telling Kagome to just suck it up and agree to spend time with him, to stop torturing herself, though I'm anxious to see if she'll still want to throw him off their office building once the two weeks are up. In the meantime, can't wait to see what happens with your little subplot with Sango playing seductress. Update as soon as you can! :-) | Reviewed By: DemonInuyasha [MediaMiner Member] On: March 17, 2012 09:46 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I've read a lot of fan fics on here and by far this is my top favorite #1. Please update soon! And I hope you write more fan fics! And sorry to hear about your family. | Title: Bad Puppy!
Reviewed By: weyrdkat [MediaMiner Member] On: March 15, 2012 04:50 PDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WB -- I'm so sorry to hear about your family not doing well. I hope everything in Bangladesh gets better. Thank you for posting before you left! Fantastic chapter and I can't wait to see who gets the last laugh! It's so good! | Reviewed By: angel-up-above-heaven (not logged in) On: March 15, 2012 00:24 PDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
to think that Inuyasha was that evil to make them believe he was leaving. my eye was twitching lol but Im happy its going to go on longer =] and I hope your grandmother gets better! | | Pages (6): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 › » ] |
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