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| "Break Through" Reviews/Comments [ 147 ] | | Pages (10): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 › » ] | Reviewed By: Tenshi of Hikari -not logged in On: July 18, 2006 08:52 EDT
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UPDATE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I LOVE YOU SOOOOOO MUCH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ....... for some reason this chapter seemed shorter than the others. still good though, and I'm OK cuz you said you'd have the other chapter posted before the end of the week.... you better... oooh, what is Mikka-san going to do? If you DARE make Hiro and Tohma split up, I won't love any more..... seriously...... HEY! I want Eiri to open Mika's eyes about Tohma and Hiro... but you already got this chapter written don't you? ;p..... ooh, CAN'T WAIT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! love you so much!!! you're awesome!!!!!!!!!
| Reviewed By: Reyn [MediaMiner Member] On: July 18, 2006 00:37 EDT
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YaY! You've updated! You've updated! Everything's going so well for Shuichi and Yuki right now..but you're such a wonderful angst writer that now I'm paranoid of the fall that's bound to happen. And what's Hiro going to do? Surely he'll tell Tohma everything, right? RIGHT? Oh god! He can't jest break up with him without telling him why!
| Title: finally caught up
Reviewed By: dharmaserenityishere On: July 10, 2006 23:21 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great chappie and I noticed no one mentioned that tense scene where they were on the same program together, Yuki being an uber nasty to poor Shu. I don't know, but there's something about Yuki being nasty to Shu, when you know all the time that he's completely obsessed with him. I guess that kind of story is safe in the confines of fanfic lol and not in everyday life, so its a guilty sort of pleasure. But yes, I really loved that scene. And then of course their get together was thrilling because of the way Shu fought and weakened Yuki. Oh goodness do I detest Mikka. She's just seriously annoying. Bah! Stupid woman. Well, I'm looking forward to the next chappie.
| Reviewed By: leilachan *nsi* On: June 16, 2006 17:03 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow, that was the most intense reunion ever! as for grammar/sp mistakes... who cares. they don't detract from your story at all. your fic holds my attention just fine as it is. the sp doesn't have to be perfect. the plot is perfect, tho. as for mikka, ugh, i feel for her, but hate her nonetheless. and the yuki/shu moments, the hotter the better!!!! please =P meow8cg@yahoo.com
| Reviewed By: Ningi On: June 07, 2006 02:18 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I've been lurking around your fic for a while, but I've never actually bothered leaving a review before. I really like that the chapters are getting longer. I find it easier to read when you don't have to stop every thousand words or so (as many authors tend to make you). I'm also completely in love with your portrayal of Hiro and Tohma's relationship. I played that pairing once in an RP and I've loved it ever since, but it's so hard to find fics with them, let alone good ones. I'd love to see more on their relationship, but if I remember correctly, you did mention something about Mika and poor Hiro in the next chapter, so I guess we'll just have to wait and see. ^^ Keep up the nice work!
| Reviewed By: Carmen86 On: May 31, 2006 01:23 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
To answer your pole question, I believe the sex scene should be long...drawn out, and specific. This is because there have been only two, and so far apart, that a long one is required to imply the normalcy that the couple will supposedly share from now on. Secondly, I know your chapters are very long, and that is a great thing, I really look forward to reading them, but I don't believe the story should be finished in two chapters. Obviously, there is the whole divorce to tie up first between Mika and Tohma. But then you still have to state specifically what is left for Hiro and Tohma, such as where they will live, how do they feel about the whole thing. What is there for Mika? You can't just leave her hanging; does she meet someone new, does she move away, does she ever forgive Eiri or reconcile with Tatsuha? Then obviously there is the whole Shu/Eiri/Mikka triage. Obviously Mikka is going to cause a huge scene - that much you have hinted at. But what about the rest: how will Shu and Eiri deal with this? How will the public respond? Will the situation bring Tohma and Eiri into an amicable relationship once more? How will the Mikka and Eiri relations fair after the whole fiasco? And on the complelty unrelated notes, what is going on with Noriko's husband and will he pull through? Is this the end with Tatsu and Ryu, as in, no more will be said about them? Will Tatsu's mom come to her senses, is he alienated from the family forever? Will he and Eiri become closer? How about with Mika, will they be happy siblings, or at least forgive each other? And what about poor Suguru? Will he remain that extra little tidbit on the side like usual? Will he ever be happy? Like I said, these are a lot of questions. If you were planning on answering them in the next two chapters...I guess that's cool and all, maybe you can pull it off, but I just think that the story wouldn't be complete without all those questions being answered. Other than that, I think the story is magnificent and utterly captivating. You have really good plot ideas and always keep your readers in suspense. Just try not to keep readers waiting so long, ne? There are a lot of stories out there, and it's really hard when you haven't updated in months to go back and read the chapters so that you can be fair to the story and enjoy it as much as possible. Keep up the awesome job, and if you want to answer my questions or tell me why some questions won't be answered in the next two chapters, my email addy is tauruschick202001@thomail.com Carmen
| Title: ZOMG!!!
Reviewed By: gravilove19 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 29, 2006 15:11 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG!!! Your awesome, I can't wait for the next update. Yuki and Shu's makeup was prefect, and with mikka there it only seemed to make it better. Update soon I can't wait. Oh, and I like the scenes just like you did this one. But then again Shu and Yuki together is always fun.^^'
| Reviewed By: Nishi Imaidegawa On: May 29, 2006 07:40 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Regardless of what it seems i dont give perfect tens to just anyone. this story is awesome, i have followed it from its begining and i thought i had reviewed by now, but upon reflection i realized i had neglected telling you exactly how much i have thoroughly enjoyed your fic. your twist with yuki as a manga writer seems far more fitting than the sappy romance writer he was portrayed in the book, i enjoy the very unique pairing of hiro/tohma, and the way you wrote it somehow managed to keep both characters in character and make their relationship seem like an absolute constant that we all somehow managed to overlook while reading the series. You have a great sense for intresting plot turns, but i have to say that the way you resolve them is definatly what makes your writing so unique. my only complaint is how you've written poor Suguru into a horrible unmatched lonely existance. but everyone has to have their black spot it makes the happy ones all the more obvious. i can't wait to see how you end this, this chapter was by far worth the wait. and as far as that poll of yours goes, lets just say this ***YOUR LEMON SCENES ARE AWESOME, GIVE ME MORE, MORE, MORE!!!*** sorry just had to make sure you got the point. a devote, but undeniably hentai fan, Nishi Imaidegawa
| Reviewed By: mirrorhanyou [MediaMiner Member] On: May 28, 2006 19:55 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love it as for the sex make it hot.
| Reviewed By: Reyn [MediaMiner Member] On: May 26, 2006 13:57 EDT
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YOSH!! (does an extremely, over-the-bloody-moon, happy dance) They did it! They did it! Yuki doesn't want to let Shuichi go this time! YaY! Oo, but you do have me worried about Mikka. At first I was like 'what the heck can she possibly do?' cuz everything I thought of only seemed to backlash onto her. Then I remembered in the series that Shuichi gets raped. She's not gonna get him raped is she? IS SHE?!?! WAH! She's gonna out him as a man whore and make him look bad! And then she's gonna tell Yuki she's pregnant and force him into the wedding by saying if he doesn't she's gonna sell the pictures she took of the rape to the world! O_O
| Reviewed By: morly On: May 26, 2006 05:27 EDT
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Also that's like the only fic I've seen where Shu fought Eiri back. I really enjoyed reading that as well.
| Reviewed By: Morly On: May 26, 2006 05:26 EDT
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All I can say is wow. I reread the entire story through and I have to say it's even better the second time around. Great make up scene between them and the way ou alowed Mikka to witness and hve her eyes opened. I can't wait to see what happens next, nothing like a woman scorned. Kudos.
| Reviewed By: Tenshi of Hikari -not logged in [MediaMiner Member] On: May 25, 2006 11:09 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*squeals delightedly* omigosh!!!!!!!! i like my lemons, er... well, Y&S lemons long and detailed. detailed makes better. I loved that last lemon. poor mikka MWA HA HA HA HA HA!!! didn't like her anyways..... *squeals* EEEEEEEEEEEEKKKKKKKKKKKK!!!! plz, update soon. You've had me hooked on this from the begginning, ya'know. oooh, plz update soooooon. I can't help but to daydream and fantasize about this. who cares about your grammer mistakes. The story is awesome!!!!!!!!! keep it up, keep it up, keep it UUUP!!! yeah, yeah, I'm excited! now that I think of it, you've had quite a few grammer mistakes that bugged me a bit, but as long as you update and your story skills are still as good as allways, then I'm happy and satisfied. ^^ EEEEEEEEEEEKKKKKKKKK!!!!
| Reviewed By: Amoraluv [MediaMiner Member] On: May 25, 2006 01:58 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
totally hot. Can't wait for the next chapter!!!!!
| Reviewed By: mzfluffy [MediaMiner Member] On: May 25, 2006 01:04 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I loved this... I couldn't wait till you updated!! This story has been one hell of a ride. Oh so emotional, and I like what you've done so far. To answer your question, I thought the sex scenes were great, although a bit more detail would have been nice. Don't get me wrong, its not like it needs to be clinical, you could make it hot and sensual. Heck, its just the smut queen in me talking. Keep going you're doing great.
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