| "Sex Days: Shinji Ikari" Reviews/Comments [ 177 ] |
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Reviewed By: Rahhel (not looged in) On: May 07, 2006 06:51 EDT
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This was a little bit too short, but you got my attention
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Reviewed By: Ran.Reader On: May 03, 2006 01:03 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Your early chapters came out not too poorly, but these last few feel like your just writing to get from point A to point B. It feels like a race to the get to the end of the chapter.
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Title: awesome
Reviewed By: EVA-09 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 01, 2006 01:57 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Long time and now an update. That is a great news for the readers and in next chapter, like Taro said, we are going to see how Kodama reacts when she sees Shinji and his weapon. We can't wait for that, but we have to. Keep up the good work Taro.
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Reviewed By: Marine Brother Shran [MediaMiner Member] On: April 30, 2006 20:50 EDT
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Well that was interesting. And I'm going to assume that you are still immature in the world of lesbians. One way, is to watch lesbo clips. But nonetheless, that was hot. Very hot indeed ^^. That's all I'll say for now, and I hope to see Shinji, Rei, Hikari and Asuka do the deed upon one another later on. Well anyways, that's all from me. Cheers ^^ Ja ne
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Title: Great Story Dog
Reviewed By: Hazerd 008 On: April 08, 2006 16:29 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
yo this is one the best fanfics that ive read its cool as shit and has more then enough lemon moments ( sex moments ) to keep me interested at all times i hope u update soon because i really like ur story dog its got everything a person wants. sex, humor, sex, rape, stupidity ,rape, sex, an more sex. yo update soon dog cuz ur nigga Hazerd will be waitin 4 the nex chap. PEACE!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: YourMom21 On: March 27, 2006 19:42 EST
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Your fic is great, but you need to work on your sentencing. You have one period per paragraph... What I'm saying is that you need to put more periods and sentences, along with commas, semi-colons, colons, and other things in your paragraph instead of making it one big endless sentence.
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Reviewed By: Rahhel [MediaMiner Member] On: March 26, 2006 13:44 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I would like to see another SxA chapter with a dominating Shinji.
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Reviewed By: Genesis D. Rose On: March 21, 2006 20:05 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
After the long wait its finally back and with Shinji's first Hikari fuck, and a HikariRei on the next, sweet. GREAT job man, good luck on the next chapter, I can't wiate!!!
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Reviewed By: Marine Brother Shran [MediaMiner Member] On: March 21, 2006 02:11 EST
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i await Rei's and Hikari's scene lol. well anyways, that's all from me. Cheers ^^ Ja ne
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Reviewed By: duggyd33 On: March 20, 2006 22:19 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I know this whole story will cover only a week but with all the lovve making I HAVE to say One or more of these girls have got to be preggers at the end! The reason i say this is not much mentioned of the girls using the pill or the patch. Oh and i assume mana will be the catylyst for the three to join forces to protect Shinji. I mean he must have an STD just for the alley action he had with her already right! A shot in the butt for most of them right! Nice so far! MR.D
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Reviewed By: Fallen Messiah [MediaMiner Member] On: March 20, 2006 15:41 EST
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How do I put this? Let see, oh yeah....AWESOME!!!!This is a fanfiction worthy of praise!!!!For I THE FALLEN MESSIAH have witnessed art!!!!!!!!!!Me and my army of lazy bastards bows down to you!!!!!!!!!!!
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Title: Yay
Reviewed By: EVA-09 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 20, 2006 08:48 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Finally, an update. It has been quite a long wait but at last, Taro made a new chapter for this lemon story what we have been waiting. Nice chapter and I can't wait for the next chapter, but I have to. And I am eagerly waiting for the next one to see what will Kodama do with Shinji. Keep up the good work Taro.
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Title: New chapter
Reviewed By: Peacemaker [MediaMiner Member] On: March 19, 2006 22:29 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Good stuff man, this story is looking great. Its good to hear that you're better and update when you have time please.
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Reviewed By: cyberclaw On: March 01, 2006 19:11 EST
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Story all in all is good the mystirs chick with the big tit's has me intreeged, couple grammer mistakes and missed letters but nothing big, heh as for being sick i know exactly how u feel ever time i fucking sneez atm 2 feet o snote come out me nose. glad you are good at riting lemons cuz i am not, cybering i used to do butttttt ya cant write the shit wile i am sic ya know all gooing good till you have to try and breath ;) but meh i hope ya dont put this thing on highatist best to get it out and done with but i can wait on it being updated, heh going to be making my own story and it's going to be ORIGINAL not some sleezy knock off from some 1 elses work, much like this one has been. i missed not seeing good lemons any more seems like it has a decressed a lot from the days i started from way back in 1999-2000 but i hope to see you writting soon and i'll send u a page on ff.net if i ever get to type my shiznit up off the papper, cant let it be stoped :P already have the frist 5 chappters writtin out. :/ o well talk to you lates.
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Reviewed By: JBrock On: February 28, 2006 23:36 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You've done a great job so far, and I look forward to your next chapters, whenever they are completed. My only problem is that you should try running your fic through Word's Spell & Grammar check. You have a few conjugations that were off ( "I is," "He am," that kind of thing.) I happen to be an insane Grammar Whore. That kind of thing usually ruins a story for me. For your story, though, I was still able to get past that issue and really enjoy it.
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