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| "A Marriage of Convenience for Whom?" Reviews/Comments [ 126 ] | | Pages (9): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 › » ] | Reviewed By: Im it today On: April 27, 2007 18:11 EDT
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In chapter 14, you mention that Inuyasha's eyes are gold while he is in human form in the limo. As a human, his eyes are actually purple or brown, depending on if you follow the manga or the anime. Also, their marriage is not legal since Kagome did not use her real name. In fact, she committed fraud. Are you going to address that issue? I have been really surprised that Kagome (supposedly a college graduate here) has not been worrying about the fraud at all. You actually write that she is thinking of herself as really married, when I'm sure she would realize that she is not legally married to Inuyasha at all.
| Reviewed By: KaIvAaL On: April 26, 2007 18:28 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
hi there!!! i was hoping for this a long time! OMG it's soo fucking good. I really like your way of writting and telling the story!! it's fabulous...sorry i didn't review last time but to many school works got me stressed jajajaja Why the fuck is inuyasha always angry, he's always hot headed. I love the part Sango got to see how sexy is Miroku...but everything was thrown away by Kikyous calls, that's not nice.There's one more thing i want to see: when Inuyasha discovers Kagome and Kikyou are sisters and that they are different persons, what is he goin' to do? i i beg and hope you update soon cause' i wanna Know what's going to happen!! I'll review every time i can.luck with your exams, Thanks! your fan val Pd: don't hate me if i don't write well english, i'm from Colombia jejeje.
| Reviewed By: Myr-Myr On: April 23, 2007 17:15 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Thank you so much for the update! I'm supposed to be doing my homework but I couldn't resist commenting! It's so sad they should just tell each other every thing and get it over with. I guess that wouldn't make a very good story though. This is why your the authoress and I'm just a lowly reviewer.
| Reviewed By: Rose of Sharon [MediaMiner Member] On: April 22, 2007 18:17 EDT
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Chapter 14: That was inspired. I mean, the name thing was brilliant. If I could, I would give you cookies. Of course, I can't, but... *sigh*
| Title: =9
Reviewed By: jullun On: April 22, 2007 15:17 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
jezz that was a good one. i like this story. i hope u will come up with more chapters soon. PLZ do it for your readers who wants to know how their life will be and if they ever will tell their secrets^_^
| Title: Too lazy to sign in
Reviewed By: Autumn_the_Reviewer too lazy to sign in On: April 21, 2007 23:45 EDT
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*grins* i liked the slip ups with Inuyasha and Kagome. I can't wait to read what the honeymoon is like. You're lucky i like this story so much, im reviewing it on my vacation. How devoted is that? *grins* keep up the good work and i eagerly await the next chapter.
| Reviewed By: Sassa [MediaMiner Member] On: April 21, 2007 18:22 EDT
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Before I praise you, a question. During the ceremony, Kagome is looking into golden eyes it says, but Inuyasha's supposed to be in human form. Is this a mistake or is Kagome thinking about "her" Inuyasha, the hanyou? The text doesn't suggest so, but then again, I'm lacking sleep (as always) and may not have understood fully. Otherwise I really loved how you used the wedding song, making the last "Dun dun du duun" have the effect of bassons of doom due to the situation. That was sneaky comic! I also loved how you let Inuyasha transform to kiss his wife - and then left us hanging completely in the dark. I don't have the slightest idea how you'll go from here, it's totally unpredictable. Will Kouga show up again? How will Kagome tell Kikyo what she needs to know to keep up the facade (conversations and such Kagome participates in but that Kikyo might need to know in case she meets Inuyasha someplace or work with him). Will there be Sango-Miroku-action? And it's hinted Kagome is a virgin which Kikyo is not. Gah, don't let Inuyasha discover the scam that way, GODS! Sorry to be a blabbermouth, but I get like that when I'm enthusiastic. I'm happy you managed well with your speech, and by all means, take your time with your updates. As you can see, your fans are faithfuil and we will wait for the treats. So take time, and take care! : )
| Title: ^_^
Reviewed By: baka_mai_28 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 21, 2007 17:19 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I just love this story and cant wait to see what happens next, keep up the excelent updates! ^_^
| Reviewed By: @___@ On: April 20, 2007 05:18 EDT
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This is a good story. Keep up the good work ^^
| Reviewed By: Pim On: April 19, 2007 04:33 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hi! Inuyasha and Kagome certainly do have themselves in a bind, don't they? I wonder how it's going to play out when everyone finally realizes what's going on. I can't wait! I just wanted to tell you I love the story and good luck with your presentation. =] Sincerely, A.J.
| Reviewed By: Autumn_the_Reviewer [MediaMiner Member] On: April 18, 2007 18:08 EDT
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Alright, this was a fantastic chapter, only a few spelling mistakes. I was glad to read about miroku and sango's end date, that was kind of funny lol. And im waiting for Sango to finally realize who Inuyasha really is, grrrrr lol. And dont worry about speaking in public, its nerve wracking for sure, but if you prepare a speech and read from it slowly and concisely, its not that bad. I used to hate HATE reading stuff in public, but when im behind a mic, and i read what i've written, its not that bad. JUST dont rush it. You have a habit of stumbling over your words when you rush it. *grins* let us know how it goes in your next chapter, or in an email. Good luck in your finals as well!
| Reviewed By: j jarviss [MediaMiner Member] On: April 18, 2007 17:36 EDT
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this chapter was really good. the argument was really well written between kagome and kikyou. The wedding! ahhh! can't wait!
| Reviewed By: Rose of Sharon [MediaMiner Member] On: April 18, 2007 16:16 EDT
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Last Chapter: Erm, this is completely off subject, but are you Chinese? Taiwanese? Okay, back on track... This chapter was really good! I mean, all your chapters are, and... But I really like what happened in this one. Yeah....
| Reviewed By: Sassa [MediaMiner Member] On: April 18, 2007 13:11 EDT
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"Kikyos husband is probably doing something stupid with a power tool..." Heh, now I see why she married him! He's able to enjoy himself with the small things and in that, he also offers her a reason to nag a little, getting some of that frustration out. Kagome sure took Kikyos outlashing well, and, despite my Inu/Kag fixation, it was justified from Kikyos point of view. I am really looking forward for the wedding ceremony. I wonder how Kagome will feel when the priests ask "Do you Kikyo..." and so on, knowing the real Kikyo wouldn't and she herself is in love with someone else - or so she believes. Or perhaps Inuyasha will change "Kikyo" to "Kagome" when he repeats the worda? Or will all hell break loose before that, because Kagome can't explain the article? Update every Friday you say... I love fridays now! OH! About holding a speach...being nervous is good, as long as you keep your back straight and remember that while YOU speak, the stage is YOURS! That will make you sound confident whatever you say. Or at leats it works for me. Good luck!
| Reviewed By: Seiteki_Tenshi [MediaMiner Member] On: April 18, 2007 13:05 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
awww poor kagome! poor inuyasha! i cant wait for the honeymoon, that is going to be so funny, i can just imagine...and when is inu gonna show kagome his hanyou side...and is sango ever, EVER gonna put 2 and 2 together...
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