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Reviewed By: LadyWolf [MediaMiner Member] On: September 24, 2006 08:17 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
What the hell is going on with sango?! Please get her some help and soon! Tell me somebody that really knows their job is coming!! Aw Inu does care about the little one he just won't say it. I hope someone comes to care for her...like maybe Kagome could take her home. I hope ya update when ya can!^_^
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Reviewed By: Ookami Suriya [MediaMiner Member] On: September 24, 2006 08:00 CDT
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...That has almost nothing to do with the rest of the story..
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Title: sweet!!!!!!!
Reviewed By: ominousfog [MediaMiner Member] On: September 22, 2006 18:32 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
dude awsome koga and naraku are semi-perverts and kagomes fucking sneaky.but i gotta know did menomaru get inuyasha in the funny farm?what did kikyo do?and whats this plan to have inuyasha out by his nirthday?will him and kagome get together when e does get out?where will he go?did kikyo adopt or something maybe arrange a false marriage kill someone she thought he care about or get a hooker to have a threesome?haha please update!!!!!!!!!
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Title: Chapters 1-23
Reviewed By: HopelesslyEscaflowne [MediaMiner Member] On: September 19, 2006 23:01 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
ooo, Inu still has more story to tell!! It just gets better and better and I'm a new reader to this story. I have to say, you are quite talented. I love the plot so far, it's interesting and full of character. Your characterization is beautiful and everything seems to flow properly. I am also quite happy with your chapter length and that your chapters always have progress with them! Finally Inu and Kag realize they have feelings for one another, it took long enough! lol I can't wait to hear more about what Inu's youkai voice says! I have questions too! Is it Inu's youkai voice that told him that Kikyou was unsuitable for a mate? I assume that his youkai has to approve of his mate too? I'm sure you'll explore his feelings more in future chapters as well. Another question, Kagome does have miko powers, right? Why don't any of the demons comment on it, even Inuyasha, when they first meet her? Why doesn't anyone say anything about it at all? Come to think of it, Inuyasha is right in that we don't really know too much about Kagome. She's going to have to do some sharing in the future! lol Actually, I'm quite interested in what Kaede has in store for Inuyasha and Kagome cause it's obvious those women in the office were plotting something for the two of them! He won't talk to Sango anymore after all. I look forward to reading more soon!! As for your spelling and grammar, I'm sure we're all thankful you editted! I know am I because it was rare to find spelling and grammar errors so far. You're doing a great job! All I can ask for to improve your story is more of it. ^^ Perhaps more description could enhance your story as well, especially of the places and things the characters interact with. I hope to read more soon and I encourage you to continue.
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Title: omigod
Reviewed By: Ookami Suriya [MediaMiner Member] On: September 17, 2006 21:34 CDT
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this story is sooooooo awsome!! Omigod! What are they gonna do to Inuyasha???! Send him to Shwinsen? Go and make him meet Menomaru and Kikyou and his family again??! And that thing with kagome was awsome!!!
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Reviewed By: dangersque [MediaMiner Member] On: September 17, 2006 21:10 CDT
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Hmmm... So there's another player pulling strings at the hospital... And this person has an interest in Inuyasha's treatment... You're going through a lot of trouble to not mention who it is too. I'd guess this mystery woman is Inuyasha's mother (or maybe Rin), but that's too obvious. Maybe I've been listening to too many of Alice Cooper's songs about being crazy (which if you listen too while reading this story makes you a little paranoid), but to me there seems to be a slight menace to this person. There was certainly less awkwardness between Inuyasha and Kagome than I thought there would be. Assuming that he just wasn't avoiding answering the question, it's a little sad that Inuyasha doesn't know who he's closest to. Considering nobody's even visited him, he probably feels that nobody is close to him anymore. And he's probably at fault for a big chunk of that.
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Reviewed By: paju_13 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 17, 2006 01:08 CDT
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ooooohhh tricky ladies! lol I liked that chapter! He didn't realize he kissed her?? odd...O.o...
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Reviewed By: Ender_kb [MediaMiner Member] On: September 04, 2006 19:18 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow! You're really starting to throw in the information now. This is great. I really loved the shell convo. Did you come up with that yourself or did you have inspiration? I would like to ask that you re-read your chapters to find/fix spelling errors, that seems to be the only proble you have. Did InuYasha really mean to say "I'll tell him to go gay..." or "I'll tell him to go away.." because that was the strangest suggestion I've ever heard "go gay" and then maybe he'll leave me alone. Anyways, you're doing great so far. Keep it up.
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Reviewed By: me On: September 04, 2006 18:09 CDT
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*gasp* no fair! you can't end it right there! i want to know what happens! update soon please!
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Title: That was nice
Reviewed By: LadyWolf [MediaMiner Member] On: September 04, 2006 17:15 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm happy he told her now. This chapter was cute and funny and the kiss oooh what will happen now? UPDATE!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: star555555528 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 04, 2006 16:07 CDT
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~laughs histericly~ omg that was funny!!! i love it how Kagome has a speech about almost everything. lol they finally kissed!!! its about time. twenty question time again lol poor sango she really needs a new job.oh thanks for complimenting my story. :) yep yep im hyper again i had a muffin. well here is a present for ur awesome story. ~pulls out a muffin & puts it next to your computer~ well byez update soon pretty please!!! i gave u a muffin so u dont get a cherry on top.
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Reviewed By: dangersque [MediaMiner Member] On: September 04, 2006 10:30 CDT
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Wow. Kagome has a speech for everything! Does she stay up at night thinking about how to make speeches about random objects? I can see it now, "Oh Inuyasha! You're just like this Reese Peanut Butter Cup! I mean, it's made up of chocolate and peanut butter, they're two different things that you wouldn't think go together. Just like your demon and human sides. But look, they combine into a delicious treat. Oh sure, some people don't like chocolate or are allergic to peanut butter, so they're incapable of enjoying it, hating it for what it is because it can kill them. It's delicious, deadly, and hated, just like you! Don't look at me like that, I spent all night coming up with this metaphor when I could have been eating my candy!" And you're such a tease with the Menomaru stuff. But how good could he have been at his job if Inuyasha could find out the gory details by googling him? And it took 22 chapters but they finally kissed! I bet that's coming up in the one question game soon. This is going to get interesting because it looks like someone's gonna get fired (which would make their relationship ok) because she's stepping into the one thing that makes Kaede get off her ass: making her patients miserable! Seriously, when he gets out, I hope Inuyasha hits her with a malpractise suit. How could he lose once he plays the "They had me going to an 18 year old who just finished high school and whose family wanted me dead instead of an actual doctor!"
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Reviewed By: cartel lover On: September 04, 2006 00:35 CDT
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you know this is the only story i review. its my ultimate favorite! its about time they kiss i can't wait til you post the next chapter!!
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Reviewed By: paju_13 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 03, 2006 21:15 CDT
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You can NOT leave it there!!! I have been waiting for that kiss and you can't leave it there!!! Nooo!!!! Not fair! Not fair! Good chappy but update soon!!
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Reviewed By: amayahime1 On: August 31, 2006 00:23 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Your back! Finally. Hmm... Well your story is very well written and enjoyable. You have minimal spelling and grammar mistakes. This type of plot is not one often used in the Inuyasha fanfic universe, and the ones I have seen done are less than perfect compared to yours. All-in-all... GOOD JOB! GOLD STAR FOR YOU! *pulls out star sticker and sticks it on computer screen*
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