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Reviewed By: mirokusgirl (not on-line) On: February 19, 2006 10:33 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
oh wow, this story is getting could, who is it that hurts her, it sounds like NAraku from the last chap, but then again it could be anyone! Sango finally got Kagome to open up even if it was a little...Doesn Kagome's mom know what's going on or doesn't she? I really like this story and hope to read more!
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Title: Sleep Paralyis
Reviewed By: trinity757575 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 14, 2006 23:35 CST
Comment/Review:
You have me doing the pee-pee dance (hee-hee) with me thinking that it's Naraku one minute or Inuyasha the next (I'm loving it!) who are the one's that are brusing her, watching her, or talking and/or visiting her in her sleep, or it could someone you made up....hmmmm...But PLEASE don't tell me if I'm wrong or right! I want to read it to find out. (hee-hee) Your doing a great job! I put you on my favorite authore, for I defently don't want to miss any part of the story! Kudo's my friend! 'Til next chapter I'll be reading yeah, Trintiy
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Title: Sleep Paralyis
Reviewed By: trinity757575 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 14, 2006 08:18 CST
Comment/Review:
U defently created a good sense of suspense and forboding in this first chapter! I can't wait to see (read) how the rest of this story comes to light, or should I say comes to lie in the shadows. 'Til then I'll be reading u. Trinity
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Title: One 1/2 Brownie Points
Reviewed By: TheFabledCat [MediaMiner Member] On: February 14, 2006 02:52 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very good idea for a story, very interesting. I am a little confused, but I guess that is to be exspected. I always thought cliffies were a good thing. Can she see things from her dreams when she is awake? The part about the children confused me more than anything. I guess I will just have to wait and see where you are going with the storyline. The chapter was a little short, but nicely done.
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