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Reviewed By: Mrs Cake On: April 29, 2006 23:45 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I LOOOOOOOOOVE your story! Sorry i haven't reviewed in a while! Ha, Happousai was hiarious in Ch. 22, It was Ch. 22 right? Oh well, great job!
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Reviewed By: TheDudeAbides On: April 29, 2006 14:55 EDT
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Grammar check time! The "than" in "Well, come in than" should be "then". "Than" is usually used to compare things, "then" indicates consequence or something happening next. "You're" vs. "your". "You're" is a contraction of "you are". "Your" is a possesive pronoun. So, they would be "your responsibilities", not "you're (you are) responsibilities". When in doubt, just substitute "you are" for whichever version of "your" you used. If it makes sense, use "you're". If not, use "your".
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Reviewed By: beccapatty2 On: April 29, 2006 10:26 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
awesome story! ive been reading it from the beginning i jus never got a chance at reviewin.. I absolutely love it! soooo good.. I can't wait to see what happens next.. lol I have this story linked in my favorites and i check it daily to see if u updated! Inuyasha and Ranma crossovers are just great.. but this is the first one ive seen where the two didnt meet and instead u had them one in the same .. Inuyashas reincarnation. ahh and with his memories and demon likeness in him.. I love this story.. please keep up the excellent work!
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Title: cool stuff
Reviewed By: BiG SiR On: April 29, 2006 09:49 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Dude, I would love to see how Inu-Ranma would take Akane trying to smack Kagome. Anyways, that last chapter seemed unfinished rather than put through a cliffhanger. Either way, good job.
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Reviewed By: xtor49 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 29, 2006 01:45 EDT
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Akane is as impatient as ever. One thing you forgot to mention on your description of the Soul of Ice was that one has to be void of emotion for their aura to turn cold.
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Reviewed By: eternalsailorsolarwind [MediaMiner Member] On: April 28, 2006 19:19 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I am not going to ask how Nabiki would know something not human - and willing to spy on the Shikon no Miko. That's just scary. **pauses** And so everyone meets! I got such a giggle out of the the way that Sesshoumaru shut Genma up when he started in on Ranma. I also enjoyed it when Sesshoumaru called Ranma "brother". Hints around that Ranma has been accepted by him. I was a little surprised that the Wrecking Crew was more taken aback by Sesshoumaru calling Ranma brother than by Shippou calling Ranma "Father, though. I would have thought that to be the more startling statement, especially given all the romantic entanglements that Ranma has had to suffer through over the years. I also wonder who Kagome went to go call. It might be a red herring, or it could mean something. The reason I wonder if its a red herring is becuase of something that Ranma said to Genma when his father started in on him. Genma complains that Ranma must do his duty, and Ranma replies, "I have done my duty." Did you get he and Kagome married between chapters? I hope so! Might shock Akane into some sense! Besides the fact that I just want them to get together, of course. ;p Wasn't really surprised that Akane interrupted Kagome, but was surprised that she called Kagome a bitch...of course, if Kagome is mated to a dog-demon (in a roundabout way), she IS one. Can't wait to see Ranma's reaction to THAT. **giggles** But as you can tell from this lenghty (and seemingly endless) review, I did enjoy the chapter - though this cliffhanger is probably the hardest to live with. :) I want to know what happens! **chuckles** But as always, great chapter! Congrats on finishing your first year of school - and the job up in Saskatchewan, by the way. See you next time!
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Reviewed By: Kallipso Eclipse On: April 28, 2006 18:21 EDT
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I have never read a better Chapter. I love these lines especailly.Thank-you. I have no wish to clean up your mess.Ah… but that's what one's employees are for. The part where there all talking to Ranma as family just makes it better. Thank you for the start of the Sesshoumaru and Genma incounter. I can see Sesshou ripping him to shreds. Sesshou may have not liked his brother but he still protects him from harm at times. I can't wait to read more. That saying is very adapt for what is going on in the last couple of chapters. Update soon
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Reviewed By: golden_kitsune [MediaMiner Member] On: April 28, 2006 14:57 EDT
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oh my daisies! That fire is burning bright! It may still need another log though...good chapter!
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Reviewed By: badgerwolf On: April 28, 2006 07:10 EDT
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(remembers kagome's reaction to that word used by someone she loved, ponders what's going to happen to spoiled tomboy) *hysterical laughter*
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Title: !!!!
Reviewed By: lilcar12(LOGGED OFF) On: April 28, 2006 02:20 EDT
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this is no fair!!! they still haven't found out the truth yet!!!! U can't just end it like that >.< ...But its still better than nothing... i await your next updaate...>.
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Reviewed By: Calamity - Queen of Cordite On: April 28, 2006 00:59 EDT
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WHOA!!!! Talk about an abrupt end to the chapter. I felt like the coyote when he realized he had just run off the edge of a clif. =D And yes, the Soul of Ice is a canon tenchnique in the anime as well. And it's actually a product of ones ki being calm as opposed to generated by anger, rage, or any aggressive thoughts. It also has a calming effect on the users emotions, which I'm assuming is how you intended it with big brother. On other things, Akane's last statment is way over the top there, even considering Ranma coming unglued on her. However, I'll chalk it up to artistic license. Just so you know, most portrayals of a psychotic Akane in fanfiction are gross exaggerations. Great job on the last couple of chapters though. I'm looking forward to the next one. Calamity
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Reviewed By: author On: April 27, 2006 23:52 EDT
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The soul of ice technique actually isn't fannon. It is in the manga as it is used for the hiryuu shoten ha technique. one must first learn to keep calm and also keep their aura down at very cool temperatures. so no it isn't fannon at all, you should read the manga and watch the anime.
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Reviewed By: ladyofthedragons1984(doesn't this site realize how annoying it is to keep having to sign in?) On: April 27, 2006 23:20 EDT
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lol misk: the stage of mixing when baking between whisking and stirring okay so that makes no sense but it's hilarious anyway Saskatchewan huh? interesting, fun word to say, it just rolls off your tongue, can that even be said with a straight face? i'm in a silly mood forgive me update when you can after all this is a very evil cliffhanger and needs to be finished, I can't wait to see what happens next my spam code is TWRT was is that a perverted form of twit?
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Title: update
Reviewed By: dream girl On: April 27, 2006 22:32 EDT
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update as soon as you can!
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Title: review?
Reviewed By: inukoro On: April 27, 2006 22:23 EDT
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haha well i cant wait til they hear the whole story. it would be even more interesting if cologne entered and maybe contributed her info as well, no? heh. and then at least shampoo would drop out. but meh. haha or maybe haapousai might know something?
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