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| "The Syndrome" Reviews/Comments [ 354 ] | | Pages (24): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 17 18 19 20 › » ] | Title: aka kagome -crossover
Reviewed By: kag-sess-or-die On: March 28, 2009 09:48 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
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Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
if i could rate everything on a scale of 1-10 it would be a twenty! This story is amazing i love how every other chapter is a flashback, it definetely keeps the story interesting. I love this story... keep it up and please update again soon. till then i wish you "Good Luck!"
| Reviewed By: Sovereignty [MediaMiner Member] On: March 28, 2009 06:59 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
these are the best lines parts what ever I wish that they would allow us to put things on new lines of paragraph it... He just blows me off "He did tell me that you won't talk to him or your mom about whatever's bugging you. So, Jakkie, what's wrong? Why so cranky?" Jakotsu laughed at her playful tone, deciding that if he could talk to anyone about his problem, it would be Kagome. "I don't know, Kaggie. I'm probably just being stupid, upset over nothing. Kagome's eyes grew wide. "You're telling me out of all the girls in our entire school… that you don't like any of them?" "Umm, yeah, well, I just found out that she's had a huge crush on me for years and is hoping I'm going to ask her to the dance. On top of that, it's made it weird with all of them. Apparently everyone has known about it forever but me." "Awkward," she said while making a face, Jak laughing as her eyes crossed. Focusing, she looked pointedly at him. "You could always go stag. You don't need a date." "Sure, if I want to look like a giant loser that couldn't get a date to save my life I could go alone." Suddenly inspiration sparked in Jak's eyes and his voice was full of excitement as he spoke. "There is one, a girl who I know would understand, who would be a great date, a ton of fun, and… Oh, and instead of looking like King Dork without a date taking her would make me look awesome! I'd be a hero. She's drop-dead gorgeous, absolutely stunning, and every guy in school is dying to take her but has zero chance. Yes, she's perfect." He lifted her to her feet with him as he stood and pressed a kiss to her forehead with a loud `mwah' before leaving the room with a flourish, poking his head back in for just a second. "Thanks Kags! I couldn't have figured this out without you!" "Inuyasha, you might as well quit growling already," Kagome said while only half paying attention to the very vicious sounding hanyou. "You know that Bank is gonna tell them all `no', so why get all worked up about it?" "Because the bastards shouldn't even be fucking asking, that's why! What the hell makes them think that they're even remotely good enough for you?" Kagome laughed and reached over to rub a soft white ear, flattening the fur that had bristled in his anger and frustration. "You do know I'm just a normal girl, right?" "Like hell!" he almost yelled with a snarl, making the few males closing in to attempt to talk to Kagome think twice and head in a safer direction. Inuyasha turned and looked at her with honest adoration in his eyes. "You are so much more than a normal girl. You're an angel, Kagome, and you'll never convince me otherwise." I'm really thankful you haven't tried to pee on me to mark me as your territory." "Trust me, babe, if I caught the half-breed even thinking about marking you in any way I'd kill him," an obnoxious, overconfident voice forced its way into their conversation. Kagome sighed heavily, holding tight to the ear between her fingers, knowing Inuyasha was smart enough not to try to pull away when she had him by the short and furries. "Kouga, personally I think you're incapable of killing Inuyasha, and if you even so much as tried you would regret it. Oh, and if anyone had any right to mark me it would be him, not you. I wish you'd just get it through your thick skull that I prefer his company to yours a million times over." "Take that, ya mangy bastard!" Inuyasha shot at the very put off wolf before wrapping his arm around her waist and pulling her closer. He locked eyes with Kouga and let out a low, dangerous snarl before growling, "Mine," his eyes flashing red for a moment before returning to their normal warm gold. Though he would never admit it, not even to himself, Kouga'd nearly wet himself at the hanyou's aggressive, possessive display and decided now was as good a time as any to make his retreat, before he was further humiliated in front of, and even by, his `woman'. "Yeah, yeah. Just you watch, half-breed. One day she's gonna trade up to | Reviewed By: Sovereignty [MediaMiner Member] On: March 26, 2009 20:30 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Dude.. this is CRUEL!!! I have to go to school now so I will give you a proper review later!! great chapter!
| Reviewed By: Sovereignty [MediaMiner Member] On: March 26, 2009 20:29 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Dude.. this is CRUEL!!! I have to go to school now so I will give you a proper review later!! great chapter!
| Reviewed By: loretta537 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 26, 2009 15:30 EDT
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thank you for updating this story is so very good. i cant wait to see them at the prom in two chapters, or for jak to realize that he likes guys :)
| Reviewed By: MangoAikoTse [MediaMiner Member] On: March 21, 2009 19:30 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG I love the story!!!! I hope you will continue the story!
| Reviewed By: i love kouga [MediaMiner Member] On: February 08, 2009 22:34 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
hey i love the story. its really really good.
| Reviewed By: Jaclyn On: February 08, 2009 18:29 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I just wanted to comment to mention how much I loved reading your story The Syndrome. I also wanted to say how much I HOPE you continue writing your story I would very much LOVE to finish it.
| Reviewed By: SlightlyMadHatter [MediaMiner Member] On: January 15, 2009 16:14 EST
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Every time I read it, this story gets better and better. I do hope one day that you will finish it. Either way, keep up the wonderful writing!
| Reviewed By: KayAkuma On: January 06, 2009 21:56 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Is there another chapter? I'm hooked on this story, and all of you work!
| Reviewed By: loretta537 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 08, 2008 04:39 EST
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please update this soon, i love this story.
| Title: love it
Reviewed By: Elven_mistress [MediaMiner Member] On: December 06, 2008 15:11 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this fic, I've read it several times over and i just can't wait for the next update. when are you gonna add the next chapter??
| Reviewed By: a_MikoS_heartache [MediaMiner Member] On: November 01, 2008 03:15 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
HIYA!! Its been a while since you last updated... 4 months? I hope your going to continue, and Ive been wondering if you have this posted anywhere else. You know, if you update it anywhere else before here.. i dont want to wait much longer. im impatient i know. but its really good and i want to know when they get together.
| Title: hey you!
Reviewed By: mrskouga [MediaMiner Member] On: September 30, 2008 10:50 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
hey you!!! you haven't updated in months!!! hurry up plzi really like this fanfic!!!!
| Reviewed By: golden_lily On: September 20, 2008 13:02 EDT
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I love this story and have been followig it almost since it started... But why so long between updates??? Please update soon!!!!!!!!!!
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