| "Return of the Demon" Reviews/Comments [ 165 ] |
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Reviewed By: MookieNH [MediaMiner Member] On: April 06, 2003 16:52 CDT
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Great scene with Ryou and Bakura...both of them NOT CARING about how "wrong" it is to be together in that way.
Mai's little tête-à-tête with Joey was too funny. How fitting that she'd end up with Otogi. The two of them actually make sense!
How the HELL did Yugi get the Dark Magician to go away?
Tea wasn't annoying in this chapter. Hooray!
The NEW IMPROVED warning was hysterically funny. I'm wicked bummed that I'm unable to view any of the artwork you have posted. (sigh) I might need to reboot cuz for some reason my computer lets me see artwork some days...and other days...nada.
By the way, interesting little tidbit about Xpyne and the intense make-out dreams. The closest I ever came to one of those was one dream I had after reading too many GW fics. Duo Maxwell, me, against a wall...then ONE KISS was all I got before I woke up! (sigh) I think I'd be jealous of your dreams if I was still single.
Oooh, the PLOT is to appear soon! I actually have to say, you haven't been very PWP so far, so I can't wait to see what more you two have cooked up. |
Reviewed By: MookieNH [MediaMiner Member] On: April 06, 2003 16:22 CDT
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Phew!
OK. First the boring part of the review. I have to just point out that this is the SECOND fic in which "throes of passion" has been correctly spelled. And I have to say, THROWS of passion certainly invokes a much different visual image if that's what I read. Heh.
But now...I must point out that "per say" is really "per se" (I thought it was per se for a while, then I kept seeing it spelled per say, so I looked it up on www.m-w.com - one of my fave websites - and whattya know, this time I was RIGHT!) Another "pet peeve" of mine (since I didn't get the slang term until someone explained it to me) - I really don't see the term "wife-beater" as fitting the rest of the story. A wife-beater should be a person. (LOL! Listen to me. "SHOULD BE A PERSON" - sounds like I'm condoning domestic abuse here.) Perhaps I live a sheltered life, but it sounds so...like something you'd see on an episode of COPS. That's my only complaint, anal retentive freak that I am when it comes to certain words.
OK. Now to the good stuff.
The Dark Magician's (D-Mag!) appearance was GREAT, and you are RIGHT...he DOES so much look like Kaiba! I've always thought D-Mag was way too hot to be stuck in a deck of cards. What is Yugi's problem - who WOULDN'T want D-Mag coming onto them? (Awww, Yugi is so faithful!). The Dark Magician's comment about the mage being the one who got Yugi (YAMI!) in that state was great. More hints of the past!
I absolutely LOVED the scene with Bakura and Joey. Even Joey's momentary dominant position was wonderful. I've never been a big fan of Joey paired with anyone, but in this fic, wow, I really think that Bakura and he make quite a couple.
What else?
Yugi's dismay and surprise at "catching" Yami in the act was cute and funny. How COULD he not know that was what would be going on, anyway?
I loved this chapter. Something about Yami/Seto action, D-Mag's appearance (wiping drool off chin), and the whole Bakura stringing Joey along thing were all well written. LOVED IT!
Sigh...only three more chapters to go before I'm all caught up with the story. Oh, well. |
Reviewed By: MookieNH [MediaMiner Member] On: April 06, 2003 13:15 CDT
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Bakura's cussing out Joey in Egyptian - and what he was saying - was too funny!
I am glad you aren't rushing into revealing Seto's role in the relationship to everyone.
I hope Bakura gets back at Joey. I don't care if Bakura deserved it...he's still one of my faves! |
Reviewed By: MookieNH [MediaMiner Member] On: April 06, 2003 12:51 CDT
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Once again, Bakura cracks me up. I can't say that enough!
Seto's comments in the author's notes are right. He DOES tend to get aroused rather easily (not that I'm complaining).
Ryou's eyes are still glazed over - ha ha ha!
BTW, Advil is good, but I converted to Aleve, myself. Of course, nothing beats prescription percocets... |
Reviewed By: MookieNH [MediaMiner Member] On: April 06, 2003 12:30 CDT
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ACK! Well, we had Seto getting off on the whole Yami straddling him thing, Bakura and Ryou once again (damn I love those two), and the whole Yami Ryou thing ("my extremely VOCAL sex life?" LOL!)
Poor Joey, thinking Honda was making fun of his masculinity...I think he's more upset cuz he is struggling with his own sexual preference himself.
Looking forward to what happens to them next. |
Reviewed By: MookieNH [MediaMiner Member] On: April 06, 2003 11:55 CDT
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Wow. Nicely done lemons. Bakura and Ryou crack me up despite the fact that I think my body temperature rose about seven degrees.
I look forward to the "morning afters" - and I skim the author's notes...but only because I'm eager to get to the next chapter! (At least I'm reading them! Actually, they're quite funny.) |
Reviewed By: Yumei [MediaMiner Member] On: June 10, 2003 01:14 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey! Long time no update! ^_^;; you guys did such a great job! Even with all those tense moments there's still humor (o_o; you gotta teach me how to do that) *cough* >_> eniwai~! I could rant for hours on how great you are o_O; but you probably get that enough eniwai n nV
Btw, that part about the sword and Nubian was hilarious! Bakura makes me crack up in this fic Lol! ^^;; and the part with Jounouchi's jacket, lmao... haha.. you guys are great.
The long wait was worth it o_O; great job on your fics (I love all of them! xDDD)
Hope you update soon! ^_^!! |
Reviewed By: Bronze Eagle [MediaMiner Member] On: March 28, 2003 19:38 CST
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Poor Yami-chan!!!! Why'd ya have to go do something like that to him? ::hisses at Pegsy:: Pwease update soon. ::puppy eyes:: I wiw wuv you for evew and evew .... |Don't think it's working, aibou.| -.- Oh, shut up. Stupid voices in the head. ::sticks tounge out at Blue-chan:: I'm so glad I finally found these other chapters!! I'd only read to 4 or 5 until I decided to see if this was posted on ff.net ... then of course I had to come here for the unedited version. ^.~ Can't wait for the next chapter. Ja, minna-chan. |
Reviewed By: Death Shadow Dragon On: March 28, 2003 17:24 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WHEN ARE YOU GUYS GONNA UPDATE!!??????????? I'M WAITING FOR THE NEXT CHAPTER! GET IT UP SOON, O.K!? |
Reviewed By: Monoshiri the Mystic Tomato On: March 23, 2003 16:38 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Aww, no, you left everyone hanging again!! *whines* No faiiiir! Plus, torturing poor Yami-kun, and the mysterious evil dude...you know, it's not as obvious as you think as to who that guy is. I have no idea!! Is he a Duel Monster? A person?! *Bangs head against the wall* Pleeeeze post the next chapter soon! |
Reviewed By: Queen of the Bishies [MediaMiner Member] On: March 15, 2003 20:39 CST
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jesus... I pity Seto... but... seeing that scene over and ove-
Bakura: -WHAP- |
Reviewed By: Queen of the Bishies [MediaMiner Member] On: March 15, 2003 17:01 CST
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-grin- what gunna happen next? did ya know if you eat chocolate, lemonade, and cookies, the chapter will be lemonyer?? |
Reviewed By: Queen of the Bishies [MediaMiner Member] On: March 15, 2003 15:11 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
BUWAHAHAHAHA! poor Seto. and yami. and mokuba. and Bakura! -grins, and stares at muse-
Bakura: shaddap |
Reviewed By: Crimson Dreamer On: March 15, 2003 13:27 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Crimson: Cliffhanger... -o_O- ... no... must... have... more...
Yami Crimson: Baka! ::THWAPS Crimson:: You're a writer too, you know they'll get it posted when it's done
Crimson: OWIE! But YAMI! I want chapter 11 now! ::cries::
Yami Crimson: Baka... ::SWEATDROPS:: |
Reviewed By: Amethyst Sin On: March 14, 2003 17:51 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
-starts crying too, glomps Phiona- PHIONA!! KILL PEGASUS!!
Phiona: Hey hey HEY! OFF!
-sniffles-
Phiona: oh fine... -cuddles Amy-
^^ SANKYOU PHIONA-SAMA! ^____________^ GOOD JOB!! GO SOLI AND XPYNE! Pretty please write more. Please? -starry eyes- You know you want to!! |
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