| "Everything Happens For A Reason" Reviews/Comments [ 156 ] |
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Reviewed By: outtadaloop [MediaMiner Member] On: June 09, 2003 09:30 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great start to a promising B/V get-together! Both Bulma and Vegeta are very much in character - especially when you explained Bulma's "secret" in the prologue. There are still a few years until Trunks is born so there seems to be plenty of time for their intriguing relationship to develop. Once again, very nicely done! Can't wait for the next update ~ |
Reviewed By: little_ninjin [MediaMiner Member] On: June 09, 2003 09:06 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
The character exposition in your prologue was excellent. 'scribe's right- you do have these characters down pat! i especially like how you use dialogue between Dende and Bunni to help us understand Vegeta.
the chemistry is excellent. i caught the mental attraction between bulma and vegeta, first woith bulma being taken aback by being able to share her thougthw with another man, who was not her father! (freudian! ) then Vegeta when he said she put too much value on the visual.
great start. |
Reviewed By: bbs On: June 09, 2003 08:46 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
I've only read the prologue but I love the way you are getting into her character. I can't wait to get back to it and read the first chapter. |
Reviewed By: phantomscribe72 On: June 09, 2003 07:07 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
How do you keep doing it???
Another master piece in the making! You have Bulma ad Vegeta's characters down flat! I can't wait until the next update! |
Reviewed By: Kewla [MediaMiner Member] On: June 14, 2003 09:41 CDT
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Very Nice...!!! It's amazing how you keep writing the best stories!! You're so talented!!!
So, she's going to build him a training room and she has given him her private guest room to use as his quarters...wonder what Yamcha's reaction will be once he's wished back...of course he'll be to late to save her from the sexy Saiyan Prince...not that she will want or need to be saved...hahaha!!!! Seems like she can handle Vegeta quite well on her own...
Waiting............................................................................................................................................ |
Reviewed By: phantomscribe72 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 26, 2003 00:20 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this! I love the way you get into Vegeta's head. You have a true gift for writing his character. |
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