| "Everything Happens For A Reason" Reviews/Comments [ 156 ] |
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Title: "Everything Happens For A Reason
Reviewed By: mlf On: September 21, 2004 20:55 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
ember your something else. i only wish that i could write like you...how much i want them together but understand why you are doing this..i can't wait for the next chapter...please update soon...maria
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Reviewed By: silver wolf (can't log in) On: September 19, 2004 12:22 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I liked it, write more, please!
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Reviewed By: manga the Awesome One in Pigtails On: September 02, 2004 13:47 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey! This disappeared from my favourites list over at FF.net and it took me quite a bit of digging to find it again! I'm glad I did. MAN what a twist that last chapter was! Why did you call it "the paranormal gooseberry?" Anyway, I'm glad to see this thing is still going. There are far too few really good B/Vs out there. Keep up the good work!
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Reviewed By: bimbo n ditz On: August 22, 2004 14:47 CDT
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awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww b n v r made 4 each otha yamcha is alosa get him shot or sumin!!!!!!!! lol gta fly great work! hope 2 c more soon!!!!!! (more b/v) lol bye byez n surfs up!
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Reviewed By: Ikata [MediaMiner Member] On: August 15, 2004 06:37 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*sigh* You mean to tell me I spent this long reading it and it's not finished? :'( that's not fair! *desperately looks for the link to the next chapter* IT'S NOT THERE! Um, Great story, if at all possible can you email me when you post the next chapter? aqua_angel19@yahoo.com. Arigatou (I knew what a wanker was, and I like the word too)
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Title: ch.17
Reviewed By: LS On: August 07, 2004 02:08 CDT
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What an eerily lovely image...being held by both loves at once, one alive and one ghostly, one in front of her and one behind her, one flesh and the other ethereal...sort of creepy and poignant at the same time. I like how in the end you use a similar image in that Vegeta lifts her out of Yamcha's spectral arms. I like the moment when Vegeta allows Bulma to stroke his forehead and it does not escape Yamcha's notice. I like the part when Vegeta senses the truth, and puts his interloper on notice.
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Reviewed By: Shiro Ryu On: August 05, 2004 21:44 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hmmm ..., and Vegeta is the evil one huh? Yamucha right now has my vote for being an evil user! I hope Bulma finds out soon about what is happening to her. Maybe Vegeta can teach her some psychic self-defence. Anyway, I'm so glad to see you are updating. Great chapter! Please update soon! ^_^
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Reviewed By: Snazzy On: August 04, 2004 11:27 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Indeed a very unexpected twist. But a very pleasant one =) I, too, was expecting a steamy lemon (which I was looking forward to) but in stead we got the whole Yamcha ghost thingy (great idea by the way). You keep suprising us. Very well done. Hope to see a new chapter soon ^_^
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Reviewed By: phantomscribe72 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 04, 2004 11:09 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Poor Yamcha, he's fighting a losing battle here. And poor Bulma! It must be so awfuk to be torn between the two of them. I have a feeling Vegetea isn't going to take this interference so lightly...
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Reviewed By: dbz fan jess On: August 04, 2004 01:27 CDT
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someone kill yamacha COMPLETELY.... ahhhh... well I guess I'll have to wait for the next chappy
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Reviewed By: debbiechan [MediaMiner Member] On: August 03, 2004 22:24 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
oh my! here I was expecting another wonderful lemon like in Saiyan for all Seasons, and I got something better! oh, that was clever, oh that was intense, and I loved this chapter! You're on quite a roll! This story is so original and Yamcha is being given his due as a substantial (if insubstantial in body, lol!) character in this love triangle! You're handling the otherworldly elements with just the right touch! And tell me, what's up with mm.org not accepting italics???? I tried and tried to fix them in my last story but no go (the stories uploaded fine on other sites :-( In any event, the action was clear but I know what it's like not to have the formatting you want--I'm a visual person too! If it helps, I "felt" where your italics should be (haha--they were ghosts like Yamcha!) WONDERFUL CHAPTER!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: sweetness427 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 03, 2004 21:05 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
ok that just sucks, not the story, what u did to poor veggie. i like the story, please update again soon.
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Reviewed By: The Oujis Mate [MediaMiner Member] On: August 03, 2004 18:35 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I admit that the twist was unexpected, but I shold have known; you're a brilliant author and you're not going to make a story boring by making the get together easy. I'm glad you finally updated this story, but I know you've got tons of other stories you're working on (which are all equally good) so I forgive you. Anyway, I can't wait until you're next installment of this fic.
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Reviewed By: Abbi aka "theblueone" On: July 26, 2004 23:15 CDT
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I must say that I thoroughly enjoyed this fanfiction and that from the instant I first negan reading it I could tell that you were British. The diction you used was spectacular and engaging. "Grown up" vocabulary is something seldom seen in most fanfictions (considering most of the ones I've read have been written by Americans) and I must say cheers to you for writing in such a mature fashion. My one complaint is the continual repetition of the "f" word (ha ha, I feel like I'm in elementary school again from saying it that way). I'm not trying to be a moralist or anything, it's just that I felt it was out of character. I don't see either of the characters as using such hard language. Vegeta is Vegeta, but there are ways to show his dark, evil, sexy personality without using harsh words. Sry for the preaching! Other than that, I love the fic! Keep up the good work and I can't wait to read the next chapter! You're doing a great job! :-)
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Reviewed By: Prince Vegeta1 On: July 15, 2004 16:47 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Sorry but I had to write another review. I just can't stop reading that section when Vegeta says "take it" that part of the story is so sexy.
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