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Title: Chapter 15 Vegetas present
Reviewed By: VenusLegacy On: November 22, 2004 17:24 CST
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OOH I can't wait to see what factor Yamcha is going to play in all this and that demon Shuma is an interesting character i'm not sure if i should trust him i mean he's a demon, but then i guess King Yemma nominated him for the task for a reason so i'm just going to have to see what happens. When Vegeta was meditating on his own i wasn't completely convinced about his conclusion, when he said: 'She was the problem. She was the thing that needed to be eliminated. Without her, there was no problem - there was no additional desire. ' Because Bulma wasn't a problem when he was fighting frieza on Namek and he still wasn't able to become a super saiyan. And although he may have gotten rid of his 'additional DESIRE' it does not change the fact that he still passionately DESIRES to become a super saiyan. Is Vegeta pushing Bulma away in the hope that he will become a super saiyan. If so is he completely disregarding the notion of Compassion being the key? Oh well i'm on to the next chapter
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Title: Chapter 14 Everything happens for a reason
Reviewed By: VenusLegacy On: November 22, 2004 16:49 CST
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I'm liking this story especially the way you've introduced a deal between Bulma, which has Vegeta consciously searching for the key to becoming a super saiyan through Bulma. I was a bit confused about chapter 14, i mean when Bulma and Vegeta were naked on the beach and she strolled up to him grabbing his balls, whilst at the same time telling vegeta she didn't want to sleep with him. Was she trying to convince him to disregard his desire? If this is the case it reminds me of when Goku who in the Anime says becoming a super saiyan arises out of a need not a desire. Its interesting to see if Vegeta realises this as i remember him saying to Bulma in earlier chapters that there is no difference between the two (Desire and Need). If this is the case its a mean way for Vegeta to find the key, by having Bulma present his desire to him on a platter and then having him have to deny it in favour for the greater good. But Vegeta has to learn some way and this is a much more exciting lesson. Speaking of which Vegetas lessons for excitement are brilliant, for when he said he would streak with Bulma i was shocked. I was worried about The Deal Vegeta and Bulma made as Vegetas lessons of Excitement might clash with Bulmas lessons of Compassion due to the fact that they both have different views on each. But it has all worked out well so far. I am definately enjoying this story
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Reviewed By: The Oujis Mate [MediaMiner Member] On: November 04, 2004 17:45 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Kick ass chapter!! Sorry I haven't been on in awhile, but things were busy. Anyway, I'm so glad you're keeping up with this story and I can't wait to see what happens next!!
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Reviewed By: phantomscribe72 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 14, 2004 09:34 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
O.o. Yamcha has some explaining to do. Great chapter, Ember. It may have been hard to write, but it was a pleasure to read.
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Reviewed By: catgirl26 (didn't feel like signing in) On: October 12, 2004 19:49 CDT
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Great chapter, even though I'm sorry to see Vegeta leave! *giggle* I do wonder how this will work out, now that Yamcha's back and my lovely Saiyan Prince will be out of the picture for a while. I'm also getting pretty curious about how Shuma will adjust to Earth. He's starting to grow on me!
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Reviewed By: Kendraless [MediaMiner Member] On: October 11, 2004 06:15 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
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Title: Everything Happens For A Reason
Reviewed By: mlf On: October 09, 2004 13:14 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
it was a great chapter and i can't wait to read what shes going to say to yamcha about what he did.it's ok that you chopped it up a little it's a good change..i want to read more so update!!!!!!! maria
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Reviewed By: vegeta1 On: October 08, 2004 23:21 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
loved it loved it loved it (^_^) great chapter I can't wait til the next
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Reviewed By: debbiechan [MediaMiner Member] On: October 08, 2004 11:04 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That may have been a hard chapter to write but it was a great, easy read! This story is so original. I have a special fondness for canon timeline fics (not a real a/u girl here) and I know, now that I've started writing, how hard it is to weave actual anime scenes with an original story. This chapter worked on many levels--it gave just enough of the anime scenes without being repetitious and it illuminated those scenes. I am so happy with the way you're handling Yamcha here--he is flawed, lovely, human, and achingly likable. I've almost forgotten about Vegeta--oops, did I say that outloud? Ah, well, I know you'll snap my interest back to the prince soon--You shot up him into space just like in the anime, and I'm twitching with anticipation!!!
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Reviewed By: mischief maker(not logged in) On: October 05, 2004 22:16 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great chapter! I love how he can admit that Bulma won (even if is only to himself) ~_^
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Reviewed By: Dark Rain On: September 28, 2004 18:44 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very nice!!! I am very impressed with how well you have written this and I am waiting very eagerly for the next chapter! Please hurry!!
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Reviewed By: debbiechan [MediaMiner Member] On: September 27, 2004 20:50 CDT
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yes indeedy that was fun. It's quite fun to be reading a 3 yrs fic and have no clue as to what's going to happen next. I love a self-torturing Vegeta and yet when he said "both" to Bulma, it was all lightness and surprise here! Lovely exchange.
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Title: Everything Happens For A Reason"
Reviewed By: mlf On: September 27, 2004 11:26 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
lmfao he's so funny when he wants to be.but i really want them together...and i hope when yamcha gets wished back that she HURTS him for what he did..until next time maria
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Reviewed By: Snazzy On: September 27, 2004 11:03 CDT
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Great chapter again! I don't know how you do it, but your chapters are still as good as say a year ago, if not better. Please update soon ^__^
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Reviewed By: Kiera [MediaMiner Member] On: September 24, 2004 01:58 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WRITE MORE CHAPTERS!!!
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