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Reviewed By: kikyo7089 On: August 23, 2004 18:05 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great job! With this chapter. Can't wait for the next one. Please update soon!!!
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Title: Amazing chapter
Reviewed By: Bulma Storm On: August 23, 2004 18:04 EDT
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WONDERFUL Chapter!!!!!!!!!!! Excellent! Suspense!!!!!!!!!! I loved it! Please, update soon!
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Reviewed By: bobmeave On: August 08, 2004 21:16 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
finally an other chapter! A really god one indeed I can't for you to get the next one out. You have to update soon please
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Reviewed By: me On: August 07, 2004 00:08 EDT
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well things are certainly starting to heat up aren't they? Man, for a minute I thought that Vegeta was going to figure Bulma out. But what if Vegeta tracks her down by her smell? What will she do then?
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Reviewed By: Laura J On: August 06, 2004 14:28 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ahhh!! I love this story sooo much!! It has such a good plot line and i am so excited for the next chapter!! You are such a good writer; you make me feel as if i know both Vegeta nad Bulma personally! Their characters are set up so well!
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Reviewed By: iron kitty [MediaMiner Member] On: August 05, 2004 14:13 EDT
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And yet again an outstanding installment ^_^, particularly when Vegeta was trying to get the 'tarp' off her ^_^. Thanks for the update, I'll be looking forward to the next one! Esther
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Reviewed By: mona On: August 05, 2004 12:00 EDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
love the story....please...update soon
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Title: Review of Chapter Two
Reviewed By: crazyhelga [MediaMiner Member] On: August 05, 2004 10:52 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This chapter was simply amazing! And I can't wait to see what happens between either Bulma and Brolli or Bulma and Vegeta, though I would most definitly prefer the latter of the two pairs. You're keeping us all in suspense at what Vegeta's going to do when he finds out Bulma is really not who she claims to be, and I love it! Well, here's to another great chapter and more of them to come! Peace! Stacey ~ Crazyhelga
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Reviewed By: Cooey On: August 05, 2004 09:42 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Thank you sooo much for updating with this fantastic chapter. More please. Soon?
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Reviewed By: EvilSaint (not signed in) On: August 05, 2004 04:42 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OK, a bunch of my author-friends have been complaining that one-liner reviews, not explaining what was liked and disliked about their fics, are terrible so I'm going to try and be specific in this one. First of all, your Vegeta has been my favourite since Falling in Love for the First Time and this one is no exception. In most stories where Frieza didn't feature, I was disappointed by his characterisation, but the way you handle it here is simply masterful. You've also done an excellent job with Bulma in the slave role. A lot of people fall into the trap of making her too much like the Anime Bulma in this type of scenario and personally I find that disturbing. I don't think there exists such a thing as a happy-go-lucky "pleasure slave," yet you didn't turn her into a twisted, emotional wreck - which I don't believe Vegeta would've ever looked twice at - either. This last chapter was amazing. That scene where they're playing around with each other was very well done. A lot of the time when people try to explore Vegeta's gentler side it comes across as either a forced or exaggerated, but the balance between Vegeta's kindness and cruelty as well as Bulma's vulnerability and strength is perfect in this story. I guess the only complaint I have is that I can't read the whole thing all at once, lol. Thanks for a wonderful story, and please update soon ^_~
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Reviewed By: Melina On: August 05, 2004 01:34 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Like always, the chapter was well written. I hope Bulma doesn't following through with her plan with Brolly but I doubt she will, right? Please let me be right! I cannot wait for the chapter! You are really good when it comes to adding suspense to your stories.
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Title: unspoken
Reviewed By: Kichi(gattakka700@aol) On: August 04, 2004 22:36 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
very interesting so far. I can't wait to see Vegeta's reaction when he see's the little hottie hiding under the tarp! lol!
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Reviewed By: Katrinachan On: August 04, 2004 21:09 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh my God, thank you for that chapter! I've been having car problems and been very distressed, but that chapter made my day. It's my favorite fanfic that I'm reading and I can't wait till the next chapter. I'm excited about Vegeta's approaching visit, and how Bulma will handle it. There are so many things that could go wrong. Unspoken is such a creative story! Update soon!!!
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Title: Turned up!!
Reviewed By: Deranged Meds [MediaMiner Member] On: August 04, 2004 20:24 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
hahah I loved this chapter!!! I wonder will Bulma fake i mean if she do will her master know it... Or what will happen! hmm, I gotta know
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Reviewed By: kikyo7089@yahoo.com On: August 04, 2004 19:45 EDT
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This story is getting very interesting. I like it so much. Please update soon!!!
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