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Reviewed By: Free-sprit [MediaMiner Member] On: August 10, 2005 10:06 EDT
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A´bout time! omg! I've been waiting for this fic for ages, and it was worth it! But please don't do it again! I really love this fic. You're a very talented writer... I've actually read all your fics.... love all of them. :)
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Reviewed By: dbzfanjess On: August 06, 2005 18:51 EDT
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oh wow that was a great chapter. I loved the scene with brolli and I knew that Vegeta had to have it terminated. Even if she would hate him for killing her child, it would be a constant reminder. I can't wait to read teh next chapter.
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Reviewed By: autumn [MediaMiner Member] On: August 05, 2005 12:37 EDT
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Hurray! You updated! Wow, that was an emotionally-charged chapter. I can't believe Brolli is dead! I really felt for Vegeta at the end. I mean, ultimately he is right, she would not want to have a daily reminder of the h*ll her life was with Brolli. But that doesn't mean she would have chosen to abort the baby. Regardless it was her choice to make... I have a feeling that is going to bite him in the *ss before long. I did like how you slipped in that he made the decision that was best for *him*. Very in character.
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Reviewed By: LisaB [MediaMiner Member] On: August 04, 2005 23:32 EDT
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Interesting. I wonder how this will play out. I can't believe that Bulma would want Brolli's child, but then there's no point in putting it in there unless it to make conflict. Watch the homonyms: bare instead of bear. It should be opposing, not apposing.
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Reviewed By: LinkinParkFreak [MediaMiner Member] On: August 04, 2005 17:16 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well after reading through the whole thing I will say that you have an awesome way with words and how you write made the story like an addiction to finish off and read. I see when you update is like a rare treat. So I will wait till next time. Loved it.
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Title: oh, I get it. I'm a bit slow, the title of your review, not yourself....
Reviewed By: *points down* On: August 04, 2005 06:07 EDT
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"...well done on* the whole..." Stupid typos.
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Title: wtf? Title? Um...Special Events Supervisor??
Reviewed By: 3 o'clock Tangerine On: August 04, 2005 06:02 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
The lower ratings for Style and Grammer are just because your tenses get a little iffy, switching from past to present, enjoyment is still a ten because that somehow doesn't effect the flow like it usually would (at least for me, tense changes usually make me take a double take, which really sucks in potentially good stories). Originality is down, because I've seen it before, however not as eloquently and thoughtfully written. (Or with as much intelligence, I even had to look up 1 of the words you used!!) -- I think it is amazing how your fanfiction reads more like a book and less like a fanfiction (do you know what I mean...probably not) any way it is very refreshing to see paragraphs of a decent length. -- Also, your portrayal of both characters is really very accurate, in my opinion. Most people get down Vegeta's hard-ass side, and then switch him all of the sudden to a secretly sweet guy as soon as bulma walks into the room. Your background information is very appropriate!-- Well done one the whole and please motivate yourself to write more (says the hypocrite to the person who just posted a new chapter). I hope you don't leave it hanging, I'd have to be very angry!! I think I am going to look up your other stuff, way to be enticing. *stares at the computer with watery tired eyes* Oh yeah! You did a really good job in naming your chapters. The names suggested one thing, but then you added something else, surprising, and pleasant. Keep shreiben!
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Reviewed By: tin797 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 04, 2005 00:35 EDT
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Thank you for writing. I would be very sad if you wont want to write anymore
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Reviewed By: LinkinParkFreak [MediaMiner Member] On: August 04, 2005 00:18 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was written so well. I loved it and I will keep moving through. I hope it stays just as good.
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Reviewed By: Myria On: August 03, 2005 11:50 EDT
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I feel sorry for the innocent baby with in her, its so unfair that the baby becames a victum in all this becuase of the sins of the father and have to be terminated.
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Reviewed By: sosos On: August 03, 2005 01:40 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow what a great chapter i can't wait to read the next part and you have to update sooner than last time please!!!!
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Reviewed By: marvenball On: August 02, 2005 22:54 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WOW!!! At last a new chapter. You just post and i can't wait to read the next one but please you have to update sooner this time.
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Reviewed By: Jasmine J On: August 02, 2005 15:57 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
{applause}
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Title: Raine123
Reviewed By: Authoress Raine [MediaMiner Member] On: August 01, 2005 17:13 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE!!!!!!!!!!! WONDERFUL!!!! MORE NOW!! NO WAIT! NOW!!!!! :D
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Reviewed By: Gohans_Onna [MediaMiner Member] On: August 01, 2005 14:43 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
JOY! You're BACK!! Excellent chapter...I LOVE YOU!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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