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Reviewed By: unistar [MediaMiner Member] On: August 06, 2007 17:33 EDT Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review: great chapter updates... finally they meet again... hope kagome will be fine... wonder what will happen now... update as soon as you can... please and thank you!
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Reviewed By: Sassa [MediaMiner Member] On: August 06, 2007 10:01 EDT Comment/Review: Rin is beautifully described. I don't knoe how you managed to capture the air of happiness constantly surrounding her, even when lurking shadows haut her. Like the fact that she's been abandonned by the one person she cares about four years ago. No wonder Sesshomaru thinks a lot. If he stops and feels he'd probably pull his own ears about his stupidity until they had to be called horns instead. : ) And yes, Kagome on a horse! She must look magnificent in her new miko outfit - geniously done to come up with that! And the name... minning of Midoriko but not at all the same... clever!
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Reviewed By: kagome4hiei(nsi) On: August 05, 2007 23:03 EDT Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review: That was seriously great! I just have one question...if this takes place only a few years after the actual story than how is it considered an AU? Someone may have asked you this already and I'm sorry if I wasn't paying attention but Ijust had to know. Anyways, update soon! I really like the story line and the way it's going.
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Title: wow Reviewed By: blackr0s3(not logged in) On: August 05, 2007 22:42 EDT Comment/Review: yay u updated!!! i loved it like i love every other chapter! what does midorii mean? green? I cant wait for ur nxt update I'll be waiting fo another min blowing chapter!!!
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Reviewed By: susieray74 On: August 05, 2007 22:39 EDT Comment/Review: Ok, you need to write faster :) I'm enjoying this story and look everynight to see if there is a new chapter. Keep up the good work.
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Reviewed By: Cynbad146 On: August 05, 2007 22:39 EDT Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review: I can not wait until InuYasha and Kagome meet up. I can only imagine what will happen. This story just continues to get better and better. Keep going! You are doing wonderful! Cynbad146
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Reviewed By: unistar [MediaMiner Member] On: July 30, 2007 18:37 EDT Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review: great chapter update... like it so far... update as soon as you can... please and thank you!
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Reviewed By: Cynbad146 On: July 29, 2007 21:16 EDT Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review: This story is really getting more interesting. Matter of fact, it is one of the few good ones that I have run across lately. I am really hoping that you will complete it, short or long version. It is good. Best wishes, Cynbad146
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Reviewed By: wudelfin [MediaMiner Member] On: July 29, 2007 13:04 EDT Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review: as lovely as it is. I see the relationship betweem sess/rin is a parental one but the way you wrote it is does have the potental of romance. kudos that a complement. I'm usually against this pairing.
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Title: and another 1 Reviewed By: blackr0s3 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 29, 2007 12:39 EDT Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10 Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review: You've done it again another great chapter!!! I can't wait for the next chapter hopefully that's when inu and kag meet again!!! you really are a great writer heck better than great!!! You're the word that is better than any compliment ever created and im not so sure which compliment is that since well its never been created eheheh but u really r a better than great writer and this fic is oneof the best i've ever had the pleasure of reading!!!
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Reviewed By: Sassa [MediaMiner Member] On: July 29, 2007 09:37 EDT Comment/Review: Very good Shippou/Inuyasha interaction! Their way to communicate shows thins truly has changed during these five years. I also think Inuyashas reaction to the thought of Kagome returning was very believeable. His fear is justified, especially since he seems to not have processed his emotions concerning her though yet. And I always love peeks into the mind of the great Sesshomaru. He always seem to have the upper hand of things, so he must be quite the thinker. Love it!
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Reviewed By: Knittingknots [MediaMiner Member] On: July 29, 2007 07:27 EDT Comment/Review: Poor Rin! The fight training dialogue between InuYasha and Shippou was very good.
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Reviewed By: Lucifer_Spades [MediaMiner Member] On: July 29, 2007 03:20 EDT Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10 Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review: Ah ha, she ups the ante, and I'm all in. Well done, I have nothing to add to this chapter. The points were made, the plot was thickend,a maturing Inuyasha,insightful Shippo, angsty Sesshomaru, and a determined Rin (the very mimic of her beloved, bullheaded, arrogent Lord I might add *mini applause*)Keep it up, I await the next installment. ~*Luce*~
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Reviewed By: sufferingkagome [MediaMiner Member] On: July 29, 2007 03:00 EDT Comment/Review: i love it!!!!!
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Reviewed By: Lucifer_Spades [MediaMiner Member] On: July 27, 2007 14:04 EDT Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10 Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review: You've taken a somewhat difficult plot line and met the challange quite well, I am enjoying it a great deal, the only recomendations I have is to get a beta as there are many spelling, grammer, and word usage/vocabulary mistakes and reduce the amount of image painting you do as it doesn't add to the story and rather makes some parts tedious. For example in the opening paragraph you describe the look on kagome's face the expression in her eye the way the tear falls and what it looks like when it catches on her lip, or when describing Akai's neck arch you describe it as candy cane like where as simply saying his neck was arched gracefully would have sufficed and not pulled up odd images of barber pole striped horses. All in all you are telling a wonderful story, just try not to make it so wordy, simpler is usually better. Of course you are free to ignore anything I say as it is YOUR story.
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