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| "Purity 9: Subterfuge" Reviews/Comments [ 2359 ] | | Pages (158): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 17 18 19 20 › » ] | Reviewed By: OROsan0677 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 29, 2012 23:13 PDT
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Aww more freeing the lobsters, I love it! So V seems to start weighing stuff in, relationship wise; at least, I hope that's what she is doing. Thoughts and prayers out to those in the hurricane's path! | Reviewed By: xSerenityx020 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 29, 2012 22:29 PDT
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You gotta release the lobsters :) and I hope someone does call about one of the balloons, Madison's or Bas would be hilarious. I can just see Evan gettin chased by bubby now lol | Reviewed By: xSerenityx020 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 29, 2012 18:24 PDT
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She won't admit it but he's right lol she was starting to get annoyed by him. Can't wait to see what's planned next! | Title: GO MADDY!
Reviewed By: ji-an [MediaMiner Member] On: October 29, 2012 17:13 PDT
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Man, Valerie really is slowly feeling more and more of the awkwardness around Marvin isn't she. I gotta say, I do feel a little sorry for him, especially since he's completely oblivious to the affection that Valerie has for Evan. Also, Evan, while being noble is super nice of him, I hope he strikes gold soon! Thanks for the wonderful chapter! I didn't expect an update so soon but it made me very happy! There are so few couples I get into because of how cliche and miss-matched they are! I'm glad you created characters that are both enjoyable on their own, and lovable together! Thanks again! | Reviewed By: OROsan0677 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 29, 2012 14:11 PDT
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I knew it, but thank you Maddy for being the gal she is! I'm happy to read that Valerie is comparing everything Marvin does to how Evan does it differently. Maybe that will show her that Marvin just isn't the guy for her :) Hope everyone in the path of Sandy stays safe! | Title: "Guessing Game" and "Calling the Bluff"
Reviewed By: Ryguy5387 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 29, 2012 13:12 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I was excited to read "Guessing Game" this morning, as always; it's one of my favorite parts of the day! (It's so nice to be looking forward to Mondays, Wednesdays, and Friday's again! :-)) And, of course, it did not disappoint. The character interactions were wonderful, the Marvin phone call was an interesting surprise, and I did not expect Evan's reaction at all, even though it worked perfectly. It was very strong. Receiving "Calling the Bluff" early was VERY WELCOME, since I was released from work due to Hurricane Sandy (although, does this mean we have to wait until Friday for the next one? ;-)). "Calling the Bluff," to me, is the quintessential chapter when I think of one of your stories. It's full of the wonderful character interactions that I mentioned earlier; it uses internal monologue perfectly by focusing on the important parts of the story. Marvin's annoying habits -- perhaps not "annoying," but, rather, un-Evan like -- made this agonizing to read in the most wonderful way. The tension between Marvin's borderline impotent, self-effacing mannerisms versus his completely well-meaning, good personality just feels tragic. It's painfully obvious that he loves Valerie in his way, but he's the only one that doesn't realize there's something not quite... ideal about it; it's way more weak and friendly than it ought to be. Valerie's point-of-view, alternating between comparisons to Evan, guilt, and genuine affection for him convey that tension with so much force. I'm a bit surprised that more time wasn't spent on Evan's reaction to seeing her there, but more would probably be unnecessary. Evan vocalizing to Valerie the reason that he gave his youkai to push Valerie and Marivn together was enough. The truth was enough. Of course, the day now ends on a much stronger cliffhanger,("Guessing Game" has a slightly weaker cliffhanger than "Calling the Bluff," I think) but I'm still thankful that you gave us another chapter to make this hurricane a bit more bearable! (I think I may start this story from the beginning... as long as I don't lose my power. ;-)) | Title: Thank you!
Reviewed By: iheartinuyasha426 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 29, 2012 10:23 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I can't begin to explain how excited I was that you started updating this story again. I remember you saying that once you finally finished writing it you would upload more chapters. When I got my email alert saying there was a new chapter, I squealed. I LOVE this story. Honestly, I love all of your stories and I feel like I know each of your characters personally. You are an amazing writer. I wanted to say thank you for updating early. I live in PA and we're going to get hit with the hurricane in the next 24 hours. Again, thank you! | Reviewed By: oblivion-bringr [MediaMiner Member] On: October 29, 2012 09:51 PDT
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Thanks so much!!!! :-D I loathe Marvin and V too for not despising what she is doing. But I looooove Evviee! Lil I was so excited to see the new chapter notification in my inbox. | Reviewed By: oblivion-bringr [MediaMiner Member] On: October 29, 2012 04:37 PDT
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Oops not married I meant to say engaged. And leading him on knowing she's got her safety guys ring on. Ugh lol | Reviewed By: oblivion-bringr [MediaMiner Member] On: October 29, 2012 04:35 PDT
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HEY! Remember me? So glad ur posting again. I hope all is well with ur health and ur family. :D On to the review. I was wondering when Marvin would pop up again. I'm sure Evan overheard and was reminded that shes still married. Cant feel guilty if ur not doing anything wrong V. I just love Evan. He's been my favorite since he was introduced. P.S. this hurricane is so crazy and annoying. But luckily I got a day off. (Navy said no work today because winds and rain are too bad on base). Ive been inside the past few days. Please post another chapter today so I don't die of boredom. Thanks if u actually do! And once again its good to have you back. I was checking ur website for update on how things were going for u. God bless. | Reviewed By: ji-an [MediaMiner Member] On: October 29, 2012 00:42 PDT
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DARN MARVIN! What a buzzkill. Poor Evan. I don't hate Marvin, but I wish Valerie would connect a few dots. I'm still wondering what her present is for Evan. Also, the joke about Bas' penis. Hilarious. I hope Evan DOES pants him with Valerie around. XD | Reviewed By: Dark Inu Fan [MediaMiner Member] On: October 29, 2012 00:08 PDT
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Sadly, it was about due for Marvin to show up again. Did Mikey really call, or did Evan just overhear his voice on her phone? For a time, they could pretend that they belong together, and now that reality called 'Marvin' flew into town. Keep up the good work, dark (Maybe this is the time that Valerie will be able to cut it off. How many months has it been since they'd really spoken to each other?) | Reviewed By: OROsan0677 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 28, 2012 23:03 PDT
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Oh no, Marvin is back! I take it Evan over heard the conversation and that's why he told Valerie that he had to redo the shoot? I know I usually send a review through the forum, however sometimes my phone doesn't like to load it up correctly. | Reviewed By: sutlesarcasm [MediaMiner Member] On: October 28, 2012 21:59 PDT
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I shoulda kept my mouth shut, I shoulda kept my mouth shut, I shoulda kept my MOUTH SHUT, I can't stand mice, why can't he find someone to fund his research that is as mousey as him who decides she much have his company for life or die? Sue? Can't you do something about him? He's just irritating me to DEATH...um, sorry, got carried away there | Reviewed By: cjflutterbye [MediaMiner Member] On: October 27, 2012 13:38 PDT
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I just realized how long you've been posting this story! So glad that it is progressing so well! | | Pages (158): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 17 18 19 20 › » ] |
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