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| "Purity 9: Subterfuge" Reviews/Comments [ 2359 ] | | Pages (158): [ « ‹ 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 17 18 19 20 21 22 › » ] | Reviewed By: Dark Inu Fan [MediaMiner Member] On: October 22, 2012 14:07 PDT
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Dieter may have been the one to come up with the crazy stuff, but Evan was the one that never learned how to say 'no'. I just hope that Garrett isn't as much of an instigator... or we could just be seeing a mini-Dieter in the making. Its going to be fun seeing what Kaci comes up with to buy with that much. I know that I can make that last a good long while... but it IS New York that she's in. Keep up the good work, dark | Reviewed By: Tashwampa [MediaMiner Member] On: October 21, 2012 12:20 PDT
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It's too much! THere;s too much love in the air! I have no idea what to do with myself! If I smile anymore my face will split. Evan is the ish, by the way. I have never heard of anyone being so funny. I wanna meet somone this hilarious in real life, and Valerie is this spitfire, and I feel like her sister's the same way, and freakin' Garret. Oh-My-God! I love that kid! | Reviewed By: sutlesarcasm [MediaMiner Member] On: October 20, 2012 00:21 PDT
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Only Even could be such a sweetheart and a colossal ass in one sentence. I don't know how you get these chapters out without laughing yourself off your chair...but he's making progress, one stop forward, 1/2 half step back. haven't heard ah, ah, ha, what'shisname's name in a long time...maybe more progress than one might think? | Reviewed By: Dark Inu Fan [MediaMiner Member] On: October 20, 2012 00:05 PDT
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The fact that Evan's willing to have one of his guest rooms completely decked out in things that Valerie thinks Kaci will like is a giant statement on his part. Then again, if he makes one guest room into 'hers', then she'll have to come back, right? And Garrett likely has his own room set up as well. An Valerie... Hers is Evan's room, no matter what she tries to deny. And if he can get on Kaci's good side, that'll give him just that many more brownie points... not like he needs any, really, at this point. Keep up the good work, dark | Reviewed By: smpnst [MediaMiner Member] On: October 19, 2012 22:22 PDT
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great chapter!!! but you already know that :D | Reviewed By: anime_game_lover [MediaMiner Member] On: October 19, 2012 13:16 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Just wanted to let you know I'm still here reading this fic. I absolutely love how its going and will wait on pins and needles for the next update. (even if I dident like where it was going I would still want to read it XD) Your writing ability, as always, leaves me in awe. | Reviewed By: SoulofSixes [MediaMiner Member] On: October 17, 2012 17:09 PDT
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Very nice. Gives the feeling that something big is gonna happen next. Can't wait to see what it is. So very glad your writing again. | Reviewed By: Tashwampa [MediaMiner Member] On: October 17, 2012 14:18 PDT
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WHy are they so amazing? If I had conversations like this, I would always be smiling. They're just so perfect together. How can you make them so interesting, but realatable? Ugh, I love this so much! | Reviewed By: Ryguy5387 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 17, 2012 06:24 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
There's nothing quite like the moment of the day when you realize that a new chapter of Purity was uploaded last night and you've not yet read it. The language is beautiful, as always, and the characterizations are top-notch. You, Sue, have a way with forming characters that is absolutely amazing to watch. My day is now much better than it would be without Purity. My only concern is with the structure of the story. What is it trying to be -- a novel? A series of novels? A soap opera? On the one hand, this story works because it seems to show the progression of the relationship between Valerie and Evan in real time. Because we have spent so much time with the, their relationship feels genuine, and when they do get together, it will be much more rich and rewarding because of it. However, as much as I enjoy chapters like this -- and I do enjoy them, don't get me wrong -- chapters like this one feel superfluous to me. What makes *this* tour different from the others? How are the characters advanced in a meaningful way? I can see how they are advancing in a realistic way, and I appreciate that, but it feels like filler. Perhaps I'm just not seeing the forest for the trees here. Maybe I would feel better if Media Miner allowed dividing this story into "books," or maybe rereading this will give me a better sense of cohesion. If this story is intended to be structured in terms of a novel, then it doesn't seem to be working very well. I can maybe see where it could be a series of novels, but some of that depends on where it ends up. I get the feeling that you're pushing for something more -- something greater -- and that makes these comments a bit moot. I wonder if you will put this into a PDF file like the other Purity parts, and if so, whether you will go through and start axing content. Part of me wonders whether or not you could just strip the InuYasha elements from the story completely, tighten it up, and send it to a publisher. I think you've got the writing skill, style, and content for it. | Reviewed By: sutlesarcasm [MediaMiner Member] On: October 17, 2012 00:49 PDT
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The more he opens up to her, the more under this stories spell I fall. I absolutely love the universe you write in, it's so...it would be so EASY to believe it's real, it almost makes my heart hurt that it isn't. Thanks Sueric, good to see your voice again. | Reviewed By: Dark Inu Fan [MediaMiner Member] On: October 16, 2012 22:51 PDT
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Y'know, usually the argument is who has to ride in the 'bitch' seat... not who has to be the one driving. I think that has the potential for some very nice road trips in the future. Keep up the good work, dark | Reviewed By: Tashwampa [MediaMiner Member] On: October 15, 2012 04:08 PDT
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The chapter that came before the last one...! She's coming around! More than ever I think, which makes me smile. Made my day better, too so thanks! | Reviewed By: vvkimbo07 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 14, 2012 22:06 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Love the update as always!!! But I definitely noticed something was off when I read the chapter...glad you realized you posted them out of order! ;) | Reviewed By: xSerenityx020 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 12, 2012 22:02 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh how I've missed them! I had almost forgotten how perverted he was lol you definitely made my week better with this update, even posted about it on tumbler lol I wonder what V has in mind, Evan just hopes he walks out and she's naked lol See ya next time! | Reviewed By: slsonic [MediaMiner Member] On: October 11, 2012 07:15 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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YES, AN UPDATE!! I'm very curious as to what V has planned...I'm going to be thinking about that all morning now. Thanks for the update! Hope all is well, we missed you! :) | | Pages (158): [ « ‹ 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 17 18 19 20 21 22 › » ] |
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