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| "Purity 9: Subterfuge" Reviews/Comments [ 2359 ] | | Pages (158): [ « ‹ 12 13 14 15 16 17 18 19 20 21 22 23 24 25 26 27 28 29 30 31 › » ] | Title: chapter 171
Reviewed By: xSerenityx020 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 22, 2011 05:17 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
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Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well, at least she's sorta admitting to herself that she wants Evan, so that's good. Still don't like Marvin. And that's awesome that her brothers on tour with Evan :) Even though she probably is gonna nail his balls to the wall about it. Can't wait for the next one!!! | Reviewed By: theablackthorn [MediaMiner Member] On: June 22, 2011 01:35 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
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Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Evan is a very bad man! V'll be livid but in a way he is right. V, sometimes you gotta take a chance. | Title: Good Christ
Reviewed By: Cray [MediaMiner Member] On: June 21, 2011 21:27 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
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Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
oh my goodness, where do I start. I stumbled upon this story and I fell completely in love with it, I've have been up all night reading it. I love your writing flow, the way Valerie and Evan converse is really natural. Your imagery is very descriptive, I almost forgot I was reading. All in all this is simply amazing I can't wait for the next chapters! | Reviewed By: lilbabybee [MediaMiner Member] On: June 21, 2011 17:18 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh V! Just open up your heart and Evan will love you forever! Not that she knows what forever really means.... Great chapter Sue! I'm curious to know how Garrett will do with his first time. We'll see! Thanks for the early chapter! | Reviewed By: ji-an [MediaMiner Member] On: June 21, 2011 15:41 PDT
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Lol, Breaking the fourth wall and making fun of silly yaoi fanfictions. Nice. Did you put that in there so you could try your hand at making your own yaoi fanfiction? ^_^ And I agree with Evan, Marvin is annoying. I bet he's one of those people that believes so much in their own opinions that they don't listen to what other people think. "I'm right, you're wrong, go die." At least Evan is mature and trusts her enough to let her have her freedom, unlike some other fanfics I've read where the male character is SO jealous he restricts his girl's freedom. That's not right! I don't care HOW much you love her! And I can't wait for V to beat the shit out of Evan for stealing her brother. Also, I wonder what she'd do if Sesshoumaru made an appearance. And Valerie needs to learn to take a chance. There seems to be no one she's closer to then Evan, but she just can't take him seriously can she? Also, I'd cry if she left him. He doesn't need anymore rejection. | Reviewed By: sutlesarcasm [MediaMiner Member] On: June 21, 2011 12:20 PDT
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Laughing hysterically, sutlesarcasm pays tribute to AdamantFan...Marvin the Mugwhomp! I don't know what that is, but it sure was funny. One of my closest friends had a little brother who used to make up words, two of which I still use...Piggus Rossus. That means you are a pig beyond all pigs. Mugwhomp...what a great word | Reviewed By: sutlesarcasm [MediaMiner Member] On: June 21, 2011 12:11 PDT
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OMG, I don't know if I'll ever stop laughing, a fanfic within a fanfic, such a dirty mind, what ever you do, DONT give it a bath, LOL! So she has figured out that she loves him, and believes he loves her is a superficial way that will die with time, she really isn't thinking it through. He has proved he has way more depth than that, she just hasn't put the pieces together yet. I think the next few weeks with Marvin should just about do the trick. That long an amount of uninterupted time will bring her face to face with the fact that she won't be able to live with someone so absorbed in something not them, meaning her/him, not him/work. Hopefully, she will also realize that NOT being with Evan is MUCH worse than being with him with the possibility of losing him later. He has just become too important to her, she doesn't realize that she is that important to him too. As for Garrett, well, Zel Roka is a sex/rock god...it stands to reason that if he left with his cherry, he AIN'T comming home with one. LOL, V will get over it...someday, ROTFLMAO | Title: OMGOSH
Reviewed By: AtamaHitoride [MediaMiner Member] On: June 21, 2011 10:45 PDT
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EVAN!!! YOU CAN'T DO THAT! lmao omgosh... so funny and wrong and... wrong! haha (my baby brother just turned 15 and if someone had "hooked him up" that way...) But... I'm sure Garret will enjoy it? haha omgosh so very wrong! Poor Val, she has no idea what she really wants, she better get a grip soon! Even Evan has limits, we all do. | Title: Volunteer
Reviewed By: AdamantFan [MediaMiner Member] On: June 21, 2011 06:21 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
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Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Do not care much for the user/loser, Marvin needs to volunteer to some forsaken place to further his career with no cell phone reception. Tragic, of course not its all for the better. Enjoyed all your characters from your stories just not that mugwhomp. Take care | Title: I"M SO SOOOORRRRYYYY!
Reviewed By: Tashwampa [MediaMiner Member] On: June 20, 2011 08:15 PDT
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AH!!! I haven't update in so long, bad Tashwampa, ba,bad ,naughty bad!!! AAAnnntyway, I've enjoyed the last few chapters!! They're incredibly wonderful!! I was taking very malevolentt pleasure in Marvin's dicomfort. I may be a bad person for that, but oh well!! I love how Valerie can talk to her parents now in such a familiar way. It's just lovely. | Reviewed By: theablackthorn [MediaMiner Member] On: June 20, 2011 02:36 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
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Ohhh V I can see a bit of a revelation in your future about Mr Marvin. | Reviewed By: theablackthorn [MediaMiner Member] On: June 20, 2011 02:25 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
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Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Gotta say I adore Evan ;) | Title: ...
Reviewed By: iheartinuyasha426 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 20, 2011 01:40 PDT
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Eww...Mudwin. Hah, I'd have loved to hear what Evan would have said had V handed over the phone. | Title: chapter 170
Reviewed By: xSerenityx020 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 19, 2011 19:49 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ugh how did I know Marvin was gonna show up soon, he always ruins the progress Evans made, he just needs to go away. I'm very curious on what Evans planning, can't imagine anyone he knows that wouldn't have a passport unless its one of V's family... that could be interesting. Have you ever read any of Sarah Dessens books? V reminds me of one of her characters. Anywho can't wait to see what happens next! Maybe V will learn Evans big secret soon. Can't wait! | Reviewed By: Dark Inu Fan [MediaMiner Member] On: June 18, 2011 18:33 PDT
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Ah, so by the time you have this story set, VideoChat has been improved to the point where its not choppy anymore? I guess there are improvements to come, aren't there? I'm glad that Bas was able to find the name for Evan to contact to talk about the donor list. Keep up the good work, dark | | Pages (158): [ « ‹ 12 13 14 15 16 17 18 19 20 21 22 23 24 25 26 27 28 29 30 31 › » ] |
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