| "Fixation" Reviews/Comments [ 184 ] |
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Reviewed By: PRINCESS_P [MediaMiner Member] On: July 20, 2010 14:22 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yay!! ur a such an amazing writer! keep it up! please update this asap :)
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Reviewed By: chewy booey On: July 19, 2010 23:41 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oooooh that one was delicious! I'm so excited! Can't wait for the next one, great job!!
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Reviewed By: Nintendocat [MediaMiner Member] On: July 19, 2010 16:58 PDT
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Wow, I love how Vegeta knew that she was panicking at the sight of someone looming over her and made her stand. Yamcha continues to fail at noticing things. -_- And it's too bad that Bulma got scared when Vegeta kissed her but given what's happened it'll be awhile before she can trust someone enough to let go a bit more. And I can't wait until we get more of Vegeta's point of view, specifically his thoughts of having kissed her and not getting to go through with it because he became a source of her fear. Knowing him he's probably angry with himself for letting go in the first place though.
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Reviewed By: Lollie [MediaMiner Member] On: July 19, 2010 10:08 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Poor Yamcha, but I love how Vegeta senses Bulma's distress and provides an outing for her. I also loved the kiss of course!
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Reviewed By: jenniferwl On: July 19, 2010 03:09 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I was about to lose my mind when I couldn't pick up chapter 8 @ FF, then I realized it would be here too and thank god!! So worth it!!!! Love it!!!
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Reviewed By: gokusgirl [MediaMiner Member] On: July 18, 2010 20:14 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
What an intense chapter! I could feel the sparks fly between them when they kissed! Poor Bulma...I want to tell you that I've seen a lot of BV fic in my day. Most of it out here now is garbage...but this one...ho ho ho is a gem. You writing style is superb....thank you for sharing this wonder piece with us, and making BV wonderful to read again. :)
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Reviewed By: mutgaba [MediaMiner Member] On: July 18, 2010 18:27 PDT
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Tempest, have I told you how freaking happy I am that you started writing B/V's again? Because your stories are great and I always love them. This one is so interesting. Definitely unique in the world of B/V's and very well written. You capture the chemistry between them so very well. Ah, makes for awesome reading. This chapter was especially good. Can't wait for the next one :D
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Reviewed By: chewy booey On: July 15, 2010 13:23 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Aw it's been so long since I read your updated chapters! I'm pumped! Can't wait for more!!
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Title: Fixation
Reviewed By: ShauteWan On: July 14, 2010 22:18 PDT
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You have a fascinating imagination...And I loved the way you mix words. Vegeta's P.O.V was flawless..lookin forward to more
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Reviewed By: pisq On: July 12, 2010 15:07 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG! That's awful, so she sees her wound...Vegeta is starting to fall for the bat-shit crazy woman lol
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Reviewed By: gokusgirl [MediaMiner Member] On: July 09, 2010 10:58 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Incredible. I hope more is coming soon!
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Title: latest update
Reviewed By: Saeri Jenn On: July 08, 2010 23:50 PDT
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^_^ Excellant work there with the latest addition. I really got the flow and connectivity of the chapter to the piece as a whole with this one. I really liked how you're exploring Vegeta's character and how it relates to the plot as you did Bulma's earlier. You're laying a great foundation here. So keep up the fantasitic work. A small suggestion for editing purposes: there may be a little too many commas throughout the piece--may want to scale back just a piece with them. Other than that fantastic job on the proofing/editing as always. Don't lose your steam now! Keep up the great work as you're able. I'll be watching for more updates.
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Reviewed By: hello! On: July 07, 2010 23:52 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I was having a hard time trying to see how Vegeta was going to be attracted to this Bulma, but these last two chapters solved that for me. I guess I didn't really like this Bulma, but I'm sticking with you no matter what.
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Reviewed By: RukaA On: July 07, 2010 16:35 PDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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I am so glad you're finally updating this fic. Chapter 7 is brilliant, your potrayal of Vegeta is perfect here. Just the right train of thought. Loving it so much =)
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Title: latest update
Reviewed By: Saeri Jenn On: June 29, 2010 13:25 PDT
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You're doing very well with your writing here. Glad to see the story progressing nicely. A small suggestion: there seems to be a feeling of disconnection between chapters four and five--almost like they belong to different stories. What I mean is one moment we're in the GR setting next Vegeta is angry, Bulma is cornering her security team captin, and we're back in the room. Maybe the feeling of disconnection comes from a lack of describing the characters' movement from the GR back to the room and how the story got to the point where Bulma is corner her security captain. Also I had a bit of difficulty understanding what Vegeta was so angry about in the beginning though it was nicely wraped up in the end of chapter five. You are doing a wonderful job with this story. Please update as you can and I'll be looking forward to reading the latest addition.
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