| "Fixation" Reviews/Comments [ 184 ] |
| Pages (13): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 › » ] |
Title: Great Development
Reviewed By: autumn [MediaMiner Member] On: March 14, 2011 01:37 PDT
Comment/Review:
Okay first off, I got a nice surprise today when I logged in to read the new chapter and realized I had missed the notification for this one! So lucky me, I got TWO new chapters to read, woo hoo! On to the story, this was a great development. I love the way the guy used the maid to torture poor Bulma, and I love how Vegeta is staying so much in character, even if it does make him look like an uncaring ass. To that end, I liked the observation of the cop noting that while he didn't embrace Bulma, neither did he shove her away. I also like how he was keeping an eye on her, and protecting her, almost instinctually. It's the most you can expect from Vegeta, I think. Oh! Loved that Bunny threw him for a loop, though! All in all, enjoyable chapter and great plot development. Off to read the next one! |
Title: ?! :)
Reviewed By: shibalover On: March 13, 2011 17:25 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Is he the dude or not....?? I wont jump to conclusions just yet. You might have a twist up your sleeve. ;) Can't wait for more! |
Reviewed By: Can't Wait On: March 12, 2011 14:16 PST
Comment/Review:
I can't wait for more! I'm glad they found the bastard, although I wish Vegeta and Bulma were in this chapter, too. I'm a little depressed that this is almost over, but I can't wait to see how things end! :) |
Reviewed By: MiniC On: March 12, 2011 10:43 PST
Comment/Review:
again no V&B??? It was ok to have like one chapter of the cops side of story but 4??? I kinda like the story better without them. |
Reviewed By: Chewy Booey On: March 11, 2011 20:17 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm so sad that the story is coming to an end, but at the same time thrilled because I can't wait to see what happens with Vegeta and Bulma. This chapter was intense, and I love the attention to detail and the dialogue. Wonderful job! |
Reviewed By: Kinky-Typo On: March 11, 2011 15:41 PST
Comment/Review:
Awesome chapter. Vegeta to the rescue! :D Looking forward to more :) |
Reviewed By: Awesome On: March 10, 2011 10:26 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You've had me hooked to this story from the very beginning. I absolutely love it! I'm so excited for the next chapter, hopefully it's coming soon! Even with the formatting issues it's a great story! The format doesn't really matter when you're ready something this good. :) |
Title: update
Reviewed By: fan2344 On: March 04, 2011 17:24 PST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
can't wait till the next chapter! |
Reviewed By: jay_e On: March 02, 2011 04:44 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Every time you update my heart gets so happy. You're an amazing writer. All of your stories are great!! You must have an amazing sex life. Lol |
Reviewed By: Chewy Booey On: March 01, 2011 19:32 PST
Comment/Review:
Ahhh!!! This is getting so damn intense! I wanted to scream when the detectives hit the dead end. Wonderful job, you really know how to create suspense. Can't wait for the next chapter! |
Reviewed By: preciousjade [MediaMiner Member] On: March 01, 2011 19:27 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ooh this getting so good. At least they finally have a brief description of the killer. Thank you, I was so excited to see that u updated so soon. Please update again soon. |
Title: Original!
Reviewed By: Iceis [MediaMiner Member] On: February 26, 2011 08:58 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
God, I loved this. You know my first thought after reading the first few chapters was that- Wow, why is she writing fanfiction when she has the ability to write actual novels. But you know what? I am so glad you are taking time to actually write more for such a huge fanbase of people. The writing is beautiful and informative and doesn't drawl on forever. My first biggest point I have is how incredibly original this is! What a great way to show a possible flaw with being wished back after death. It's amazing that Vegeta also has his death by freeza to relate with her by. The characters feel so close to their original personality, I have nothing to say about possible OOC moments. I just didn't feel any. The sex is emboldening and sexy, but feels so necessary for the story line. I had hoped their first time would be more rough and a moment of strength for Bulma and not something where she fell into herself and you very VERY much delivered. I have to admit I fell into a sort of panic whenever Vegeta touched her hair thinking that Bulma would flip out on him, but I am completely satisfied that she didn't react because it drove home the sense of security she felt with Vegeta. I think the last few chapters lost their format when you uploaded them and made it a little more difficult to read so you may want to see if you can space it a little when you have time, but obviously people are still working through it and loving your plot as it flows. You're a great writer and made taking the time to read it well worth my night. Thank you. |
Reviewed By: chewy booey On: February 24, 2011 12:54 PST
Comment/Review:
Ah! Suspense and a cliff hanger! Brilliant. Thank you! Can't wait for the next chapter! |
Reviewed By: vegeta's chew_toy On: February 24, 2011 03:26 PST
Comment/Review:
I'm so happy you updated this brilliant story! Now that you gave us this tit bit of information about the killer the suspense is REALLY eating me up. ^^ |
Reviewed By: preciousjade [MediaMiner Member] On: February 23, 2011 19:21 PST
Comment/Review:
Please update soon! I can't wait to see what is going on a capsule corp. I have a love/relationship with cliffies. The suspense is killing me. |
| Pages (13): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 › » ] |
