| "Fixation" Reviews/Comments [ 184 ] |
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Reviewed By: pisq On: August 17, 2010 09:28 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wonderful development. And the killer knows she's alive! OMG I expect a new chapter soon or I'll go nuts!!!
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Reviewed By: Kinky Typo [MediaMiner Member] On: August 16, 2010 19:15 PDT
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I love you. Period. That was an amazing chapter. No words. Just it was awesome. Can't wait for more. Thanks for another great story!
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Reviewed By: Lollie [MediaMiner Member] On: August 16, 2010 10:47 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Perfect!
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Reviewed By: Nintendocat [MediaMiner Member] On: August 16, 2010 08:59 PDT
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Okay so we know that the killer isn't any of the cast we've talked to recently, since he just now learned about it and your killer is quite psycho, you've set him up quite nicely. And I love Vegeta reminiscing about his past and about Bulma making him feel alive. You're such a great tease about their relationship, I love it. Vegeta's already having to use a lot of restraint it seems so hopefully he'll be able to hold on long enough to help both of them a little. Love the chapter, can't wait for more.
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Reviewed By: fr1nkl3 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 16, 2010 02:58 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow ! left hanging! i wish i had your imagination, but reading this gives me ideas! awesome writing and understanding :D
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Reviewed By: KB On: August 16, 2010 02:43 PDT
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...the ending scene made me go squee then pictured her like kissing him...going further(Because I WANT her to push it)...and he's like grasping the back of the couch like desperately before it like breaks. o.o
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Reviewed By: Vegeta's Blue-Haired Angel [MediaMiner Member] On: August 15, 2010 23:36 PDT
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You're a goddamn tease D:
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Title: latest update--ch. 8
Reviewed By: Saeri Jenn On: August 14, 2010 10:10 PDT
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Love the subtle brush off Vegeta gives to Yamucha. You're setting up a wonderful plot foundation with having Vegeta push and pick at Bulma. (Dare I think it?) It seems as though Vegeta sees himself within Bulma going through the similiar motions of dealing with the after effects of torture, and he has decided to keep pushing her forward as he would himself so she isn't lost--it's very endearing for Vegeta's character. Wonderful job. Longing for another update but please take your time.
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Reviewed By: Violet62. On: August 10, 2010 22:26 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I can't wait for more . Please continue ! Your fics are one of the best !
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Reviewed By: Kinky Typo [MediaMiner Member] On: July 31, 2010 20:24 PDT
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I haven't been on the computer in awhile so sorry I haven't commented. Wow, love this chapter. I like the unspoken acknowledgement Vegeta and Bulma had when Yamcha was around and I'm excited to see that the sexual tension is brewing! Love it and look forward to more .
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Reviewed By: darkangel05 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 27, 2010 11:58 PDT
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this is a good fic so dont wait so long to update!!!
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Reviewed By: PRINCESS_P [MediaMiner Member] On: July 20, 2010 14:22 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yay!! ur a such an amazing writer! keep it up! please update this asap :)
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Reviewed By: chewy booey On: July 19, 2010 23:41 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oooooh that one was delicious! I'm so excited! Can't wait for the next one, great job!!
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Reviewed By: Nintendocat [MediaMiner Member] On: July 19, 2010 16:58 PDT
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Wow, I love how Vegeta knew that she was panicking at the sight of someone looming over her and made her stand. Yamcha continues to fail at noticing things. -_- And it's too bad that Bulma got scared when Vegeta kissed her but given what's happened it'll be awhile before she can trust someone enough to let go a bit more. And I can't wait until we get more of Vegeta's point of view, specifically his thoughts of having kissed her and not getting to go through with it because he became a source of her fear. Knowing him he's probably angry with himself for letting go in the first place though.
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Reviewed By: Lollie [MediaMiner Member] On: July 19, 2010 10:08 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Poor Yamcha, but I love how Vegeta senses Bulma's distress and provides an outing for her. I also loved the kiss of course!
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