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Reviewed By: Katrina_chan [MediaMiner Member] On: September 06, 2004 12:40 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was wonderfully thought out. I loved how you planned their meeting so well. I feel sorry for Bulma and I hope she shows up to meet Vegeta. I'm trying to think of anything I was unhappy with and nothing comes to mind. Keep up the fantastic work. I'll be waiting for the next chapter.
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Reviewed By: Venus Legacy On: September 03, 2004 11:58 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was fantastic, especially the last chapter where i was left hanging off the edge of my seat wondering if Vegeta will realise that Bulma is a ningen. I liked the way you developed Vegetas character the way the love and bond he felt towards his mother shaped his views on women. I'm not sure whether he has a respect for women unique in the saiyajin culture as he abhors the buying and selling of women. Or if he is discusted at the women sold into slavery as sex slaves, for when he says ' Have my father's women either relocated or killed. It's time this whorehouse returns to a place of political power." He seems to not value the life of these women one bit whereas before i thought he abhored slavery because he felt that the life of a living being is too expensive to put a price on. When you added that statement of vegeta it made me realise that this is not the case for he seems to have a superior and condescending attitude towards women in the Harem which stems from the hatred he felt for his father for placing these women above his mother. Does that mean that Vegeta does not despise the act of slavery itself? If so how will he react to Bulma when he realises she is Brolli's favourite whore? I can't wait for the next update to see whether Vegeta will expose Bulma and see what she really looks like. However i have a feeling that Bulma might not show up to their next meeting for as she mentioned earlier he has no way of tracking her down.
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Reviewed By: hinagiku [MediaMiner Member] On: September 01, 2004 18:50 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well, I love this story. I like dark B/V storys, and this one is an especially good one. As you seem to manage in all your storys (I read and enjoyed them all), the tension is nearly unbearable. I'm always trying to forsee what will happen next (I have my fantasies at night), and you alway seem to surprise me. Anyway, I just wanted to say that I'm really REALLY happy that autors like you exist (I'm glad you update so often) and I'm sorry I don't review more often. I really don't deserve to read so well written stories when I don't review all the time. I'm trying to leave more reviews in the future and I just want you to remember that even if I don#t review all the time, I love your stories.
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Reviewed By: loves it On: August 30, 2004 23:22 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this story is so good. please update soon , because i'm dying to find what's goin happen. LGV forever loves it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: loves it On: August 30, 2004 23:19 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this story is so good. please update soon , because i'm dying to find what's goin happen. LGV forever loves it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: saki_g On: August 30, 2004 13:33 EDT
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Vegeta was so in character with what he did...but Poor Bulma! I can only imagine how painful his words must've been. And the expression of her face. :( I hope he REALLY regrets it!
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Title: ch3
Reviewed By: Bryony On: August 29, 2004 10:11 EDT
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Wow, i'm really enjoying this fic very much. :D There's a little problem with the order of chapters where chapter three is in chapter two's place as well as in chapter three's place but that can be easily solved. Neways, i'm liking the intrigue and can't wait for another chapter. ~bry
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Reviewed By: Kichigai17 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 26, 2004 15:20 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG I love this story sooooo much!!! Unspoken is much, much better than Unwanted which didnt really appeal to me at all. But this plot is sooo enthralling!! Goodness, i just cant get enough of it!! :-) !!!!!
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Reviewed By: iron kitty 1 On: August 26, 2004 12:34 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I felt so sorry for Bulma in this installment... I hope you have something up your sleeve to fix the mix-up (that Vegeta doesn't know about yet). But then again, you always do! I liked the way you had Vegeta keep his control, only touching Bulma to "keep appearances". Great job in keeping Vegeta in perfect snooty Saiyan character, and Bulma's introspection after Vegeta's little passion play was a sigh-maker (I felt really bad for her...). Great job!
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Reviewed By: me On: August 24, 2004 20:16 EDT
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hahahha, oh man, they were sooo freakin' close!!! ugh! oh man, tomorrow night......woo!!!! some drama is gonna happen!!!!!
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Title: UNSPOKEN
Reviewed By: carinne On: August 24, 2004 18:15 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
GREAT GREAT GREAT
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Reviewed By: Evil Saint (not signed in) On: August 24, 2004 13:07 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow O_o now that was one classic Vegeta moment... It's kinda hard to imagine B actually rocking up the courage to face him the next day after that little speech, shame, poor girl. Can't wait to see how they deal with this one ^_^
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Reviewed By: Sageling On: August 24, 2004 07:18 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ah man, poor Bulma >_< Great chapter! (as always :-P ) Pretty please with chocolate mouse on top, don't hold out too long with the next one, OK? I'm on the edge of my seat, here +_+
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Title: loved this chapter
Reviewed By: deranged-meds On: August 24, 2004 03:03 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey I loved this chapter!Hmmm I can't wait to find out what happens next... So Vegeta is going to take of the thing... Hmmm that can't be good... Or could it... But Vegeta will know that Bulma did lie to him... But didn't vegeta hear when Nappa said Bulma was defiant or whatever.... :::thinks:::: Well I can't wait to read more... Please keep the story comming.... WHat will Vegeta do?? What will Bulma do?? What will Vegeta say??? What will Bulma say??? See questions like these are going to be comming up so fucking much until you update!! Please be soon... You can't leave me dazed and confused.... I gotta read more... More... Much more.... Plus you can safley say that i see ths fanfic as one of those fics that get me out of my writers block... SO like when I read this i kinda get out of it... Or you could say it helps me... Well however you wanna say it I fucking love this story and can't wait to read more... I know my review is starting to get long... But i would like you to know that I love your story so damn much... Lol... And again you have to update soon.... Because those damn questions will be in my head until you update... WEll Im going to finnally end it!!! And please Update Soon!!!! I can't wait to read more!!!!
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Reviewed By: Mely On: August 24, 2004 02:16 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I don't know how it's possible that this story keeps getting better and better. Please update soon!
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