| "The Phoenix Blade: Time Lapse" Reviews/Comments [ 452 ] |
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Reviewed By: Ranuel [MediaMiner Member] On: November 25, 2006 18:24 PST
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LOL! I almost feel sorry for Kouga. Both in your fic and in the series if Ayame gets her way. Kagome's line about Ayame being his best bet was wonderful.
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Reviewed By: yashamaru1 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 16, 2006 18:31 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
o0o0o0o0 I LOVE THIS STORY!!! cant waut till you update... I just love everything.. your plot and story line... how you used actual episodes and changed them to fit your story!! truely great.. and I cant wait till the next chap comes... Ja
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Reviewed By: AnitaGrace [MediaMiner Member] On: November 09, 2006 15:24 PST
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Oh, this chapter was amazing. I'm so glad she figured it out. Sometimes I find this story difficult to read (difficult to concentrate) because it's so similar to the story I already know, but it's definitely worth it for chapters like this. I also think it's going to get easier now that the basics have been covered, i.e. Sango, Miroku, Koga, Naraku, etc. You're a great writer and way to go for your first fic! I'm so excited - I can't wait to get back to reading!
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Title: inuyashaloverr
Reviewed By: inuyashaloverr [MediaMiner Member] On: November 05, 2006 01:51 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Damn, I FINALLY got to read the new chapter, and w00t! it was good! Oh yes...Macho Fluffy indeed! Lol. That was great. I was wondering how it was gonna go down and how the brothers would act. Thought there was gonna be a pissing contest there for a second, lmao. And not just distance, but accuracies too, lol. Cant wait to see what goes on next. Update when you can. :D
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Reviewed By: Okaasan-7 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 03, 2006 15:24 PST
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She tried not to flinch as the metal muzzle scraped lightly along her scarred bicep; Inuyasha flicked the grillwork with his claw. The head recoiled and then cocked on one side to peer at him. -- Loved the detail. Also, great action sequences.
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Reviewed By: Inusbabe [MediaMiner Member] On: October 28, 2006 10:59 PDT
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I am in love with this story. How many more chapters do you think it would be. I read some of your offside lemons and liked the one the goes with this universe between Yash and Kagome in his office. I need some more fluff between Yash and Kagome, since we can't have a lemon until after the well closes.
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Title: inuyashaloverr
Reviewed By: inuyashaloverr [MediaMiner Member] On: October 27, 2006 21:26 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Awesome update. I love it when Sesshomaru goes all macho and that...noone to protect my ketsu, lol. Ah yes, the strong silent type. :P Great chapter, update when you can. :D
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Title: WOW
Reviewed By: Kestrel [MediaMiner Member] On: October 27, 2006 05:48 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, I just spent the last week reading this story, and I can definetly say that this is up there with my favorites. The plot is canon, but at the same time completely original and just by making Kagome a warrior you have made this your own. Everything works out. I simply love this story and can't wait for the next chapter. Please grace all of your loyal readers with a new chapter soon.
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Reviewed By: monykkka [MediaMiner Member] On: October 23, 2006 03:56 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
owwwwww damn shit fuck crap!!!!! i was so absorbed i didn't even notice time go by. I'd say this is by far THE BEST CHAPTER you ever wrote. Perfect characterization, perfect close-ups during the battle, and splendid introspection into the character's thoughts, just deep and detailed enough to make it all real... me being nuts about cannon fiction just adds, i guess :)) mannnn, please don't keep us waiting long for the next installment, or your muse will get angry with you and leave. I really don't know what I'd do then....
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Reviewed By: Jester08 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 20, 2006 20:19 PDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great chapter. I loved the way you made Inuyasha so desperate for Kagome. He needs some loving. LOL Update soon!!!
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Reviewed By: Nomina [MediaMiner Member] On: October 20, 2006 20:04 PDT
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ohh, wonderful action packed chapter. I loved the cute scene at the hotsprings. Poor frustrated Inuyasha. Kumo is so sweet in his attachment to Kagome. Please update soon.
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Reviewed By: Okaasan-7 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 20, 2006 13:16 PDT
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if you tickled the female head the right way, Jaken-sama's Staff of Two Heads would giggle instead of scream. -- I'd hate to think what the male head does if you tickle him just the right way, but I loved Rin's chatter. the six bony legs of an arachnid -- Umm, spiders have 8 legs.
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Reviewed By: Precious [MediaMiner Member] On: October 17, 2006 08:59 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, I feel like I should be handing you out some kind of award or something and I haven't even finished reading the whole story yet! I am ashamed to admit that I thought I might not like this story because of the millitary/action part but I am so happy you proved me wrong. You have taken careful thought and planning in creating this newly spun world. I am proud to say you have a through grasp of the original character profiles and have successfully bent them to your will so that they fit into this new reality. Things like having Yash mature enough to accept his postion in the house or having Koga swallow his to be able to joke about his failed attemps is nice turn of events that let us see the changes they have gone through. You also manage to go through the manga/anime events, snipping and adding where necessary, with such ease I have to remember that you actually took them out of order. Even if I don't always think it, I am glad that you made Kagome have the inner struggle about Yash and Inuyasha. It not only makes sense but if it were not there I believe the story would feel a bit empty and she would look utterly fickle. I would continue my long winded critque on all the charaters as well as the concepts but MM.org doesn't allow me the space to go into the detail I would like to. This story has everything. "I can't breath laughing" humor, "bring a tear to my eye" angst, "I can't believe that happened" action, and "warm feeling in my heart" romance. The idea of Kagome entering the Fedual Era a trained fighter is (in my mind) truly orginal. You have succeed in breathing life into this plot line where others (that I have seen) have failed to take into account the precious details that would change to make this believable. In my mind your story should be one of those named a literary canon as an exmaple to people of how to write a GOOD fan fiction. If the rest of your stories are as good as this then I believe you should be inducted into the Fan Fiction Hall of Fame with writers such as Sabican, RozeFire, terri botta, etc. Well hope I didn't make your ego to big but after seeing so many people not caring about their stories it is nice to know there are gems like this waiting to be discovered. Oh, I didn't mind to part where you skipped the Kikyo love triangle. (And I'm sure all Kagome/Inuyasha fans every where thank you.) Having Kagome with two Inus certianly takes the place of it instead. And I about fell out laughing when I found out that Kagome mangaed to attract two generations of wolf demons. Though I am quite sure Koga would not have give her up had she given him the chance. Opps...Okay I'll stop talking now. Sorry for any spelling mistakes.
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Reviewed By: ArtemisMoon [MediaMiner Member] On: October 16, 2006 19:58 PDT
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You just like to make my life difficult, forcing me to go through all the work of signing in just so I can leave a comment...*grumbles* Anyway, lol, at least this time I'm managing to keep up! I'm between tests, so it was a good stress reliever, even if it did have some heavier content. I trust you, though, so that despite all the drama, I know that there is sure to be a few light-hearted bits in there! I'm still missing Yashita, though. I dunno why I like him so much...maybe I feel sorry for him? LOL Well, hopefully he'll show up again soon! Until next chapter! ^_^
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Reviewed By: Jester08 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 06, 2006 19:46 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great chapter. Poor Kagome. I hope everything turns out all right. Update soon.
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