| "Close Quarters" Reviews/Comments [ 356 ] |
| Pages (24): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 17 18 19 20 › » ] |
Reviewed By: Leo-mae On: December 21, 2006 01:04 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ok, we all know that if you don't use protection you could get pregnant. You have illustrated this fact very well, but if you make her be pregnant i'm not going to read this any more. sorry i'm 18 turning 19 next month and I in no way want anything to do with babies till I'm at least 28. So please don't make her be pregnant. Other than that it was an ok chapter but a little short.
|
Reviewed By: kashudoreineko On: December 20, 2006 23:52 EST
Comment/Review:
Uh, if her period starts in only a few days, she's WAY too far along in her cycle. NO WAY she could get pregnant. As a woman trying DESPERATELY to conceive with my husband, I can tell you that that is a sure fact. Women of 28 day cycles have the potential to be fertile on days 10 - 18. That's it. Even if she had released an egg the day before, and it had been fertilized, it would not have enough time to implant into the uterine wall before menstruation caused the wall to slough off. Then, it takes a week after the period is over before there is enough wall built up again that a fertilized egg could implant. If a cell had been fertilized, it would either come out during the period, or die from having no where to implant. Just thought you should know. As soon as she said, "In a few days," everyone should have breahted a sigh of relief. Other than that, I'm really enjoying this story and very happy that you posted another chapter.
|
Reviewed By: cwillia [MediaMiner Member] On: December 20, 2006 22:43 EST
Comment/Review:
Okay the pregnancy thing kinda threw me are people still thinking like that (jumping to conclusions and all) I know you can get pregnant on your first time but geez. Also, the jumping into marriage thing, so not cool, he doesn't love her yet. Missed ya and can't wait for another update, don't hate college it'll be worth it in the end :-)
|
Title: Going Well
Reviewed By: colt [MediaMiner Member] On: December 20, 2006 19:08 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This story is completely holding my attention in the back of my mind. Its a very attention grabing story. The most recent chapter was interesting and a very well wrote cliff hanger and I loved it.
|
Reviewed By: OrlandoLover [MediaMiner Member] On: December 20, 2006 17:46 EST
Comment/Review:
loves it...update soon...SAVE THE EARTH IT'S THE ONLY PLANET WITH CHOCOLATE...Cheers
|
Title: Uggghhhh
Reviewed By: Opinions On: December 20, 2006 12:53 EST
Comment/Review:
This always happens. D: I get into reading a story, and only if it says 'Completed' and then poof. Not completed. xDDD I'm lazy to the point where I like to read it all in one sitting, but hey, It's a very good fic and I'll wait it out. 83 The dates are strange, so I'm not entirely sure when it was last updated, but I'll cling to the hope that it's still going. xDD; At any rate, very nice job. n_n;
|
Reviewed By: DarkMoonStar [MediaMiner Member] On: December 20, 2006 00:43 EST
Comment/Review:
Oh my, what if she's pregnant? This just gets better and better. Can't wait for more, please update soon!
|
Reviewed By: Rinlover [MediaMiner Member] On: December 19, 2006 19:05 EST
Comment/Review:
Yaaaaaay, thanks for updating ^___^ Now UPDATE AGAIN! With a new chapter ^_^ Great Chappy btw...
|
Title: AWSOMENESS!!!
Reviewed By: Kaname_Chan [MediaMiner Member] On: December 19, 2006 15:29 EST
Comment/Review:
Finally!! You updated!!! ^____^ I'm so happy! I've been dying to know what happens next! ^_^ Please put up the new chapter soon!
|
Title: Update!
Reviewed By: sunrisegoodbyes [MediaMiner Member] On: December 16, 2006 15:52 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I Love this fic! i see that you havent' updated in a while so you should start again!! This is a great fic and i hope to see more chapters up!
|
Reviewed By: -Suki- On: November 18, 2006 13:57 EST
Comment/Review:
It is a great story hope ull upday soon
|
Reviewed By: Leanne5582 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 13, 2006 23:02 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey! I love your story so far! Please continue it! :-) I'm sorry ure not reading sueric. She's one of my favorite authors, but each to their own. Another well r\written, really good story is called "Blood and Tears" by doggieearlover. It has a few dark parts but it's still REALLY good! Also many of the ones u mentioned are great too. Keep up the good work please! Leanne5582
|
Reviewed By: inukaggrrl06 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 11, 2006 22:38 EST
Comment/Review:
I hope you continue this story. I've been reading and re-reading this story and I am trying to be patient for the next chapter to come, but my patience is coming to a short end. Well I'm trying to hold onto to my patience for this story, I hope you update soon, because I am desperately wanting to continue this. Happy writings and a merry muse. Thanks for reading my comment. I'll be patient for a while more.
|
Reviewed By: animefreak492 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 15, 2006 05:26 EDT
Comment/Review:
This is a good story. Please update soon. Thankz much.
|
Reviewed By: Amethyst_Swirl On: October 08, 2006 23:37 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
EEEKKKKKKKKKK!!!!! I TOTALLY LUV UR STORY!!!! IT'S LIKE BEYOND AWESOME!!!!! well i see that u haven't updated in awile...i hope u can update soon! i'm just dying to read ur next chapters! and i hope u'll have a fabulas time with ur bf!!
|
| Pages (24): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 17 18 19 20 › » ] |
