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| "Facets of the Living Jewel" Reviews/Comments [ 534 ] | | Pages (36): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 17 18 19 20 › » ] | Reviewed By: Little Red [MediaMiner Member] On: March 14, 2009 23:22 PDT
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just into chapter 21, and it still feels a little broken. not quite flowing in certain places, but im beginning to think that its just your particular writting style. anywho, i still enjoy the story so ill keep reading.
| Reviewed By: sakuralovesinuyasha [MediaMiner Member] On: March 14, 2009 21:48 PDT
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This chapter was by far my favorite. Poor Kirara, she's so confused. This chapter made me cry due to Kirara talking about losing her kittens. It hit close to home for me and made me cry for her. I realize that these are only fictional characters, but you have written them to such a degree that they seem so very real. One cannot help but to feel connected and invested in them. I hope that Sesshomaru and Kirara will be allowed to have pups (kittens?) offspring of some kind! I truly enjoy your writing and will stay with your story until the end (and then I will probably have to read it a few more times!)!!
| Reviewed By: ardy1 On: March 13, 2009 16:28 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a very dense story and you have spent years writing it. In Dickens' time stories were released in monthly magazine format - something the mangas have revived. But your particular story draws so heavily on the sciences - which you actually describe/explain wonderfully, enough to keep the lay reader at some minimal level of comprehension - that there is the tendency to sometimes drag when it comes to pacing. For something that is periodically pubished - and in your case literally half a year or more can pass between chapters - this can be fatal to story flow. You are asking your readers to either manage to keep your storyline fresh in their own minds or go back and reread. Is this fair? Maybe for fanfic, it is. And god knows I can't claim to do any better. But there you have it - my sole complaint. You have lavished loving detail on virtually every aspect of this story. I do find myself growing a bit weary of the animal aspects of the youkai. Yes, it distinguishes their understanding of the world and relationships from humans, but doesn't it also make the probability of successful coexistance even more problematic, let alone the potential for successful comingling? I found myself caught by Sesshomouru's mother's contempt for Inuyasha's mother. Granted, it makes sense and goes to explain Sesshomouru's comtempt for his brother. But what does it say for the apparent aberation that was the Inu Tai youkai? Which all goes to explain why I think I have found your depiction of Sesshomouru perhaps the most compelling of all in this story. He has chosen to protect Rin, and by extension takes on Inuyasha's pack (worthy as extraordinary humans - not counting Shippou and Kirara, of course, but still an incomprehensible act) and has finally extended such recognition to accept Kirara as a mate. As she said herself at the end of the chapter - insane! Obviously, he is at least as iconoclastic as his father! Which, of course, he doesn't seem to give a damn about, since he is obviously a rule unto himself. This amuses me immensely. My only other comment is that you seem to have gotten so caught up in the mechanics and logistics of what is admittedly an incredibly involved tale as to have lost sight somewhat of the actual character interactions. Clearly this is a multipart orchestral piece rather than intimate chamber music. May I say that I miss the lyric interludes? Thank you so much for giving us two chapters in less than a week, especially after far too long a silence!
| Reviewed By: sheastarr334 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 12, 2009 08:16 PDT
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I love this story. I can't remember if I ever reviewed.... Anyway I LOVE the Sess/Kirara pairing. I've never read it before! I'm saving the story on my alert now!YAY!
| Reviewed By: Leo-mae On: March 11, 2009 17:47 PDT
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I breed and show purbred rabbits, trust me, I KNOW they can be evil. Umm....can we just get to some nice Sess/Kirara sex already? I just want u 2 know that I really love this story and I have recommended it 2 several people. Well update soon ok.
| Title: It's Official. . .
Reviewed By: Murasaki-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: March 11, 2009 17:40 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
. . .you write a better BattleKitten(TM) than Rumiko-sensei. I cannot tell you how much pleasure your work has brought me (at a time when I Really Need It) except to say that, being a sometime professional editor, I don't give out 10s for grammar. Thank you so much for throwing Sessh and Kirara into a bag from which they can't escape! M-chan
| Reviewed By: Bastion [MediaMiner Member] On: March 11, 2009 12:00 PDT
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So it seems Kirara finally gets it. Though it took Sess being more open than I have ever seen him to get her to understand. When you did this pairing at first I was seriously wondering how you'd make it work but so far it's become one of the more fascinating ones. Though there seems to be a surprising lack of meta-physics in this chapter. Heh. Keep it up, great work!
| Reviewed By: Snowfall [MediaMiner Member] On: March 11, 2009 08:10 PDT
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What an exciting chapter. You leave so many mysteries and managed to add action and fun. Mizuki is awesome and, I like the hebi a well. I really like her. What the hell is Naraku up to and how is he managing to attack? Bastard! I hope someone takes out his ass soon. Why would he try to kill Sango first? Is the baby a threat? Kilala referring to Rin as 'My-Rin' was so sweet. I feel so bad for her losing her kittens. I loved the way that the Tora now believes that both Sess and Kilala have unsuspected powers. Sess sure was bold with his moves on Kilala. I wonder if it is the heat affecting him. Ooh, and Kilala is so sensitive. I wonder if she can get preggers in her current form. That'll be interesting to find out. Your use of the word 'aroma' was pleasant as is the word. Refreshing. I find it strange that Sess would be focusing on mating when he has a bunch of Taiyoukai waiting on him. One is missing? I wonder what's up with that. Interesting. That last sentence was great. "Are you insane?" LOL He's already admitted it. I'm interested in hearing Sess's theories on what is happening concerning the strange occurences. Oooh, so all of this weirdness is the fault of Kagome's dad. I want to deck the idiot. Someone needs to figure out how to straighten all of this out. I'm anxious to find out what Kanna is up to as well. You have so many strands in this plot. It is very exciting. Oh, I almost forgot. I loved how Sess clawed Tora and can't believe that Kilala doubted him. I'd be pissed, too. Nice lime. Sesshoumaru sure knows what he's doing. Such a perv. LOL Thanks for getting chapters up so quickly! I look forward to the next installment. ^_^ Snow
| Reviewed By: angel-up-above-heaven [MediaMiner Member] On: March 11, 2009 04:04 PDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
eeppp.. i feel bad for saying this.. but i was a bit confused at the start XD
| Reviewed By: Little Red [MediaMiner Member] On: March 10, 2009 19:57 PDT
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i must admit, im a bit confused at times... i get the general idea, and i appreciate your use of correct termonology, but i feel that youre forgetting something kinda important... we dont all know/understand/care about quantum physics... parts of it are extremely well written, others just dont seem to have the right flow... i just finished chapter 14, so i still have a long ways to go before im caught up, but i thought id leave a comment and tell you what i think so far...
| Reviewed By: Ranuel [MediaMiner Member] On: March 10, 2009 17:14 PDT
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This chapter makes me happy. Wee! Drama, comedy, hot steaming lime goodness! Yay!
| Reviewed By: magedelbene [MediaMiner Member] On: March 10, 2009 16:49 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hello there sweetie!! You updated AGAIN!! :D Incredibly, I came to leave a review! O.o Well, lately I'm a bit "late" reading everything... :sigh: But, this time... I'm not. LOL Really, the Vade Retro... made me laugh out loud. You see, when we were kids and did sthg "kiddy" or annoyed our parents, they should look at us, with some kind of horrid face and said "Vade Retro Satanás" (don't need to translate, ne?LOL) So, brought back memories. To a latin, Latin is always there. So, loved both chapters and loved the way you play with the characters mixing the angst and the humour. The opposites and similarities, the misunderstandings and the oddities. Wonderfull the way you introduced and fused the mithology with the story. Wonderful! Excellent job sweetie! Thank you so much for the update!! :hugggs:
| Reviewed By: Snowfall [MediaMiner Member] On: March 09, 2009 22:21 PDT
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When Sesshoumaru said "No. Leave.", what was he referring to? Is he not ready to go through the ceremony and is he waiting on Inuyasha? Or was it concerning something else? By the way, the whole issue with his mother and the Ryuu's sister was really funny. Loved that. ^_^ Snow
| Reviewed By: Snowfall [MediaMiner Member] On: March 09, 2009 21:54 PDT
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Wow, this is all so confusing. Sesshoumaru is using Kilala's power? I assume that has something to do with all of the reality fluctuations. I really dislike that tiger and am excited that Sesshoumaru kicked his ass. I'm not sure if the drowning of Kilala's kittens is something that actually happened in the past or if it is one of those fluctuations. If it is history, I feel so sorry for her. But, Sesshoumaru will make sure that never happens again. ^_^ I can't believe how uncivilized the generals seem to be. A fight right off the bat. Wow, I wasn't expecting that. Kewl! So, the Inu-no-Taisho is one of the twelve heavenly generals? Is that true in the manga as well? That would be really neat. Well, fun chapter! I hope things get back to normal soon. Snow
| Title: 72
Reviewed By: lunatickat [MediaMiner Member] On: March 06, 2009 09:30 PST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh wow. There is so much going on in your fic right now it's hard to know where to begin. Especially since it's been a few chapters since I reviewed. Sorry! I've no excuse. Kagome's in mid-peril and time is freaking out all over the place. Your fic is truly one that I end up thinking about for days after reading a new chapter. It's not just enjoyable; it's a thinking person's story! Chapter 72 is no exception to this and the ending left me thinking about what could have happened. And also slightly panicked for Kirara. She didn't really have that creep tiger's kitten did she? I'm hoping it's just a time "what if..." that Sess triggered by pulling that weird strand when they were together in that dark space. (Wild, hopeful speculation on my part) And that black place they went to was fascinating too! Are they tied together now, Kirara and Sess? Is that why Sess can use fire now as an attack? I've got so many questions! And of course that's half the fun of reading your story. The anticipation of finding out. As always, your story is a total blast to read and I always appreciate the thoughtful research you do that adds to it. I always look forward to reading more and I hope real life is kind to you!
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