| "Laying Down the Law: Abuna i Dansu" Reviews/Comments [ 300 ] |
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Reviewed By: inuyashababe15 On: June 28, 2011 19:52 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
PLEASE UPDATE SOON!!!! i have been reading this story from the very beginning and check all the time for it to update which sadly doesnt happen :( i love everything thats going on with Akago and Gan! best couple ever. lol. also i liked the whole scene with Ranbo and Shitora during french. they need to get it on already! hahaa. so does Kagome and Inuyasha! i like how in the last chapter everyone was in a little better mood finally. :) update soon. PLEASEE!!! |
Reviewed By: anonimous1234567890 On: January 24, 2011 19:18 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I would actually like to give you 15 on the enjoyment factor....but apparently mediaminer doesnt want reviewers to get too excited. Fennella and that Kobu guy are actually a really cute unexpected couple. I kinda like that they're not as intense and main-character-y as the others. It's kinda refreshing to see Fennella in that position. My other favorite couple is Akago and Gan. WHERE IS MY AKAGO? lmao. i squeal all the time. I really like how you add certain segments of everyday life that are enjoyable to these characters in your chapters i.e. the ab contest thing. it makes the plot a lot more enjoyable and it makes the dramatic parts a lot more intense. I think it's a nice contrast. It's true that i dislike certain stories that are too off-tangent but its always nice to be not so plot driven, which you have done here. :) In the prequel to this, you had chapters that dedicated solely to their lives like the curveball one was cute, and the one with the fathers was endearing too. Because, your characters, although shouldering big responsabilities are teenagers...gan is 16. she is by far one of the greatest characters aside from Ranbou. hehe. i want to mail order a half ranbou and half akago and a little bit of inuyasha...:) I also enjoy the character kagome a lot...i mean she's not as wild as shitora or rin and not as sensible as sango and ayame which i find is a good mix because she seems to be dealing with certain lingering issues. And she's not as 'saintly' (i use this term loosely) as the other characters would imagine. I think you should further develop these characteristics that surprise the rest of the gang and your faithful readers like the tattoo thing. OH AND BTW, are her and inuyasha gonna get it on soon? actually make ranbou and shitora get it on first.......:) but i digress I also REALLY like axel and mad max and the jack rabbits. They're just so laid back and so cool. I wish i was a jackrabbit. One thing i guess you can add more in, though no pressure because this is your story and your vision, but it would be cool to have like bonding moments between kagome and the members of her part of the gang? i forgot what it was called. but those characters are pretty interesting. I know mizumi is the main character of this but i'm rather indifferent towards mizumi, though i really like her brother (his name is too long for me to remmeber). but shitora has to end up with ranbou plz :) mizumi and bankotsu are cute i guess but they're not the couple i squeal for you know? Anyways, i just wrote the longest review and possibly the 1st in 2 years to you instead of studying for my upcoming exams...because i love this so much So while i'm waiting for my half ranbou and half akago thats coming in the mail, how bout you update as soon as you can? :) this is by far one of the best stories i've read of inu fanfiction. |
Reviewed By: anonimous1234567890 On: January 24, 2011 19:18 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I would actually like to give you 15 on the enjoyment factor....but apparently mediaminer doesnt want reviewers to get too excited. Fennella and that Kobu guy are actually a really cute unexpected couple. I kinda like that they're not as intense and main-character-y as the others. It's kinda refreshing to see Fennella in that position. My other favorite couple is Akago and Gan. WHERE IS MY AKAGO? lmao. i squeal all the time. I really like how you add certain segments of everyday life that are enjoyable to these characters in your chapters i.e. the ab contest thing. it makes the plot a lot more enjoyable and it makes the dramatic parts a lot more intense. I think it's a nice contrast. It's true that i dislike certain stories that are too off-tangent but its always nice to be not so plot driven, which you have done here. :) In the prequel to this, you had chapters that dedicated solely to their lives like the curveball one was cute, and the one with the fathers was endearing too. Because, your characters, although shouldering big responsabilities are teenagers...gan is 16. she is by far one of the greatest characters aside from Ranbou. hehe. i want to mail order a half ranbou and half akago and a little bit of inuyasha...:) I also enjoy the character kagome a lot...i mean she's not as wild as shitora or rin and not as sensible as sango and ayame which i find is a good mix because she seems to be dealing with certain lingering issues. And she's not as 'saintly' (i use this term loosely) as the other characters would imagine. I think you should further develop these characteristics that surprise the rest of the gang and your faithful readers like the tattoo thing. OH AND BTW, are her and inuyasha gonna get it on soon? actually make ranbou and shitora get it on first.......:) but i digress I also REALLY like axel and mad max and the jack rabbits. They're just so laid back and so cool. I wish i was a jackrabbit. One thing i guess you can add more in, though no pressure because this is your story and your vision, but it would be cool to have like bonding moments between kagome and the members of her part of the gang? i forgot what it was called. but those characters are pretty interesting. I know mizumi is the main character of this but i'm rather indifferent towards mizumi, though i really like her brother (his name is too long for me to remmeber). but shitora has to end up with ranbou plz :) mizumi and bankotsu are cute i guess but they're not the couple i squeal for you know? Anyways, i just wrote the longest review and possibly the 1st in 2 years to you instead of studying for my upcoming exams...because i love this so much So while i'm waiting for my half ranbou and half akago thats coming in the mail, how bout you update as soon as you can? :) this is by far one of the best stories i've read of inu fanfiction. |
Reviewed By: unistar [MediaMiner Member] On: January 03, 2011 21:21 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
great update... good that they're back from kagome's home... seems that everyone's got problems... nice inuyasha and kagome had their sweet moment... what's next... update when you can... please and thank you! |
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Reviewed By: fallenangeldai666 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 25, 2010 19:26 EST
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I's SOOOOOO HAPPY TO SEE YOU!!!!!!! *hugs!!!* so yeah, men are stupid. don't let them get between you and this awesome story!!! i've been on board with this sequel since you posted this very first chapter of 'Laying Down the Law' !!!!!! Eek!!! to have you continue the sequel is awesome!!! though one small detail. in the last chappie you post, the one in jan. 2009. ur spacing and stuff is all messed up. there are no breaks or anything. makes it tough to read. may wanna fix it if you have time! thank you so much for updating!!!!! I will read ASAP!!! I just saw the alert in my mailbox and had to come tell you how happy that it made me. :) looking forward to the new chappie and another update! |
Reviewed By: Tashwampa [MediaMiner Member] On: July 12, 2010 16:53 EDT
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KOLU. It's okay to be busy and not have time to devote entirely to your fanfic. Just know that I stand behind you, even if it's been awhile. Just write when you have time, and don't hold anything back!
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Reviewed By: Chelby_05 On: June 23, 2010 02:57 EDT
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Title: Sorry
Reviewed By: Chelby_05 On: June 23, 2010 02:57 EDT
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Title: Sorry
Reviewed By: Chelby_05 On: June 23, 2010 02:57 EDT
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Title: Sorry
Reviewed By: Chelby_05 On: June 23, 2010 02:57 EDT
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Title: Sorry
Reviewed By: Chelby_05 On: June 23, 2010 02:57 EDT
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Title: Sorry
Reviewed By: Chelby_05 On: June 23, 2010 02:57 EDT
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Title: Sorry
Reviewed By: Chelby_05 On: June 23, 2010 02:57 EDT
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Title: Sorry
Reviewed By: Chelby_05 On: June 23, 2010 02:57 EDT
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Title: Sorry
Reviewed By: Chelby_05 On: June 23, 2010 02:57 EDT
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