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Reviewed By: OmniPotent [MediaMiner Member] On: August 16, 2008 02:38 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well that was good progress on the story. So we have a sense of the plot with the merger being announced causing some pressure on Rukia. I wonder how this development will effect their relationship with one another? Will they be able to stand each other and make it or will it all fall apart? I'm also interested in Ichigo's perspective as he seems to be the one who'd make the first move from the way you've written his character. Oh and also the IchiRuki arguments aren't tiring, but rather something I'd see as in character. One great aspect about their relationship is the constant bickering which makes for a fun dynamic.
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Reviewed By: OmniPotent [MediaMiner Member] On: August 16, 2008 01:56 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was a good chapter. Worked nicely on character development as we got insight into Rukia and Ichigo's mind. The only thing I didn't like is the HitsuHina part (personal bias I just don't like either character really XD;). Anywayz, we can see that Rukia is starting to feel the need to start a possible relationship as she watches her friend develop hers. Then we have Ichigo who suddenly is starting to notice Rukia in a different view and have a sense of attraction towards her. Sounds great!
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Reviewed By: navirae [MediaMiner Member] On: August 15, 2008 23:18 CDT
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aaww poor rukia, cornered by her friend and supposed worst enemy hehe. haha ichi's thoughts are going to get him killed one day. Can't wait for the next update! Hope its soooonnnnn ^^'
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Reviewed By: Zapenbits [MediaMiner Member] On: August 15, 2008 23:06 CDT
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[Ichigo jerked up and blinked twice before taking a swift look down at mini-Ichigo to make sure he wasn't completely alert. No, he was good.] XDD. There aren't words. XDDD. ["How nineteenth century of you."] LOL. He makes me giggle. XD. Again, amazing chapter!=]] As always, update soon!^_^
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Reviewed By: akirk85029 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 13, 2008 23:04 CDT
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I can so picture Isshin trying to track Rukia down!!:) I'm wondering what's going to happen to change their current relationship!! Good chapter and definitely looking forward to the next one!!:)
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Reviewed By: yuwa [MediaMiner Member] On: August 12, 2008 23:04 CDT
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oi oi, well i like it, does it mean its written for me too? ooohhhh! ^-^v chaps nicely done.
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Reviewed By: haji_quest33 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 10, 2008 02:30 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh no it came out early and I missed it! What an awkward family picnic!! Ichigo is going to be in trouble tomorrow but I cant wait to see how work goes for him. Great chapter as always!
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Reviewed By: navirae [MediaMiner Member] On: August 10, 2008 01:21 CDT
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hehe, Ichi got quite the show. Wonder what Rukia would do if she ever found out he had been watching her the entire time haha. cute scene with rukia trying too help momo. happy you updated early...must do it more often mwahah >]
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Title: interesting
Reviewed By: BerserkRonin [MediaMiner Member] On: August 09, 2008 17:46 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
nice concept, I throroughly enjoyed reading it.
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Reviewed By: Bastion [MediaMiner Member] On: August 09, 2008 13:38 CDT
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Damn it I forgot to review... no wait. Anyway, though you've done this kind of relationship several times (having them angry with each other before falling for each other) it's interesting to see how you explore the different nuances each time. This time, their feelings of antagonism are the strongest I'd seen so far in any of your fics. You've given hints now and again showing how, despite how much they claim to dislike each other, forge some kind of friendship. I also like that you've used other Bleach characters to fill out the cast, Momo especially. You've used her very effectively. It'd be nice to see you use other characters in future stories. Okay, I'm done talkin'. You keep writin'!
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Title: Chapter 11
Reviewed By: Anbu_Kunoichi [MediaMiner Member] On: August 09, 2008 00:27 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Got to say this was another awesome update. I loved what happened this Sunday. =] Your detail was incredible, and I was majorly excited to see you had updated. I can't wait to see more of your plot unfold. And being generous with updates is always a plus. =]
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Reviewed By: shinigami_wannabe [MediaMiner Member] On: August 08, 2008 23:09 CDT
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Very nice surprise indeed! Was totally happy to see an early (out of schedule) update. Thanks!... I see a turning point for Ichigo here. I wonder how he'll treat Rukia come Monday after thinking her ass bite-able... And Karin's hilarious. I'm glad she doesn't let her brother get away with anything... I wonder what Ichigo would do about that tiny piece of info about Momo? Would be cool if Ichigo and Momo met soon. Would love to see that interaction... Anyways, well done on another well written chapter. Keep up the awesome work!
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Title: Addicting
Reviewed By: innocencedied2nite [MediaMiner Member] On: August 08, 2008 22:53 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love reading this, it is incredibly addicting! The way you portray the characters and their interactions is exciting and fascinating. I am eagerly looking forward to more. Keep up the awesome work!
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Reviewed By: Isabella90 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 08, 2008 22:12 CDT
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I laughed so hard I almost peed my pants. That was incredible. I loved the whole park scene. It was priceless. Now whenever Ichigo sees Rukia, he will see short spandex shorts and a sports bra. He'll walk around with a constant 'problem' all the time. That would give Uryuu lots of reasons to ridicule and humiliate Ichigo. I can't wait to see more of those moments. Maybe next time, it will be Rukia's turn to see Ichigo's fine body in all of its glory. This story makes me want to watch Mr. and Mrs. Smith just to see them beat the crap out of each other before the start frantically pawing at each other. I can so picture Ichigo and Rukia doing that in this story. Great Job.
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Reviewed By: Zapenbits [MediaMiner Member] On: August 08, 2008 21:08 CDT
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Hahahahaha. Again, wonderful chapter. I love how Rukia doesn't listen a lot to what Momo says yet knows exactly how to make her feel better by mentioning another topic ... or, well, subtopic. And, oh my gosh moment! Today was my last day at band camp and some girl was wearing a hoodie, in the middle of summer, outdoors! While we were marching! The girl next to me was like, "I bet she's trying to lose weight." When I looked confused I'm sure, she explained that you sweat more blah, blah, blah. That was so ironic that it was mentioned here too at the end! Gahhhh. If only she knew who was WATCHING her when she took off her shirt! Haha. Awesome chapter and, as always, update soon!^__^
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