| "In'lar-Anth - Through Darkest Destiny" Reviews/Comments [ 142 ] |
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Reviewed By: Dynishra The Vampire [MediaMiner Member] On: February 09, 2003 18:09 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
BRILLIENT!!!
omg this is one of the best i have ever read!!!
*grabs a leather belt and straps it about her forearm*
im totally addicted! im a ..a... desperately insane fan! yeah thats it... hmm.. well... uh...
FANTASTIC!
*taps the vain in her arm so it pops up and holds her arm out*
i need another shot!
god damn it! i refuse to go to that street corner! thats just ...well dispite being insanitary.. its just plain degrading for a vampire of my standing to go to a...*spits on the ground* a street corner!
no way
i get my stuff imported! therefore i humbely beg you to up date before all my hair falls...well is pulled off my head ^^
i only bookmark the best!!!
hents the foretold story is snuggly bookmarked.
Able to make sense of my insane ramblings?
Fantastic!
Ok then... waiting .. impatiently for chapter two....
CHOW!
From the Magnificenlty Brillient and Majestic..
Dynishra the Vampire... |
Reviewed By: Sade Kline On: February 09, 2003 19:29 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love it! I am enthralled by your magnificent writing style and how you can switch like that! Please continue! Have pity on this poor soul! I am axiously awaiting the sado-masochism! Hope it is out soon!! Please? *grovel* |
Reviewed By: nene2 On: February 10, 2003 05:05 CST
Comment/Review:
update! me very happy! *grin* this story gets better and better. poor goku has to go on a purging mission. that's terrible! i hope he can stop it... somehow. maybe evacuate all inhabitants with MT?
And Jeice shall keep his fingers away fron Vegeta. I never liked Dodoria - maybe you can kick him again a little harder?
... mmmm... maybe even Dodotia is only a poor misunderstood creatute who cries in his sleep everynight... maybe not.
anyway, keep on writing. |
Reviewed By: Dynishra The Vampire [MediaMiner Member] On: February 10, 2003 05:38 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well...uh hello... >
i had just written that last review when to my shock and delight i saw chapter two had poped up.
I read that merrily, jumped off the net, and went my merry way for a few hours...
Next time i checked my emails..
*her eye twitches*...
uh... *looks about for dodgy individuals*...uh..
*whipes the sweat beading on her forehead*
hmph.. well chapter two was great! AGAIN!
Fantastic!
hehe... yes.. very... *bites her lip..*
you said something about blood in that email?
*licks her lips*
*grins baring her fangs*
i do so love blood...
That rich sent..mmm..
*growls low*
*blinks slighly* uh.. humm..
*shakes her head* anyway..
that shot made me all high and fuzzy..
but still
I WILL NOT GO TO THAT.....CORNER..
*clenches her fists*
nope.. no way!
*blinks rapidly..*
damn.. i need another shot.. please?
ack! i am begging?!?!
*gapes in horror..*
no no.. no im not.. impossible..
*turns her back on them* i dont need you and...
and.. that... story...
*twitches*
hmph..
i refuse!
From the...
Magnificently Paranoid
Dynishra the Vampire
P.S .. man that email gave me the hebbe jebbes O.O |
Reviewed By: Chibi Gemi [MediaMiner Member] On: February 10, 2003 16:46 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Kurai: Look Gemi!! I found a chain!
(swinging on the 'Lemon Ave' sign) Oh good! Quick, get over here! (drops to ground)
Kurai: (wraps the chain around Gemi and the street sign)
HAHAHAHA!!! I'm not going anywhere now! I'll review every chapter and you'll never get rid of me!! MWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!!!!! (smug look)
Kurai: That's all well and good, but whose going to write your stories?
You and all my other muses and personalities.
Kurai: What are you going to do for food?
I shall live on lemons, limes and angst pie! I shall never go hungry again!! ^_^
Kurai: Okies. (turns to Holy Authors and bows) Gomen nasai, but she's determined to stick it out here. If Gemi gets too annoying....do what you have to. Extreme force it advised. I'll check up on her every chapter.
Leave!! Go and write!
Kurai: (sighs) Right. Thanks for the great chapter you two. we look forward to the next installment soon.
-Later Dayz & TAnx!! ^_^ |
Reviewed By: SaintMe [MediaMiner Member] On: February 10, 2003 18:44 CST
Comment/Review:
I was trying to catch up on this story last night, but the page had some kinda internal problems.. i was SO pissed when it died...
so ya, here's my review :) this last chapter was awesome (im not surprised)... and i find myself getting impatient! I WANT DIRTY SEX DAMNIT!!
*takes a deep breath*...
ok, you guys really are doing a great job in developing the relationship between Goku and past-Vegeta :) its all going so smoothly, but i still want hot monkey sex!! heh...
so ya, keep up the good work :)
I'll be waiting! |
Reviewed By: Kikoro On: February 10, 2003 22:22 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
ahhh you have satisfied me for the time being, but i await more of the story. *sits patiently at Angst Drive and Sap Boulevard.* cant wait for all the angst ridden and mushy stuff, and i think i know where your going with the Jiece thing... the thoughts alone are enough to drive me mad! Poor poor Veji-chan! and poor Goku, must you torture him too? well keep the goodness coming i await the inevidable SM fest. |
Reviewed By: Sade Kline On: February 11, 2003 21:43 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'll give that challenge a shot. I think Rogue did Jeice. But please continue! Just give me a map and I'll meet you at your corners! *begs* I'll even volunteer to clean them up! And if this is just the beginning of the drug, I want to know happens when I am absolutly hooked to the stronger one! >8-> Weeee! Ja! Please, if you need ammo to fight the fat lady, just ask! I don't want anything to impede you on your crusade! |
Reviewed By: NightTerrors81 On: February 12, 2003 21:43 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow!!!
that pretty much sums it up. This is a most refreshing DBZ fic, a great change from the normal fight, have sex, and bond stuff that is the norm. i have to say this is a one of a kind fiction. i'm really exited to find out what becomes of Gokuu and Bajiita. *_* the only thing that's weird for me is (although it's a logical aspect) that Bajiita doesn't call Gokuu Kakarotto ;_;... lol ^_^ hehe i have seen one fic that was kinda like this one but not really. the only thing they had in common was the go back in time when Bajitta was under Frieza's rule. it might seem like the same kind of concept but it was totally different, and i might add yours far surpassed it in writing quality and your plot is more thought out and organized (like a professional writers). i'm sure your story will be one of the best DBZ fan fics out there when it is completed ^_^;....
I am totally your new biggest fan!!!! |
Reviewed By: Tank-girl [MediaMiner Member] On: February 21, 2003 11:08 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is sooooo great ! There's so much emotiom expressed in the story I absolutely adore your stile of writing. What a joy to read ^^ |
Reviewed By: SaintMe [MediaMiner Member] On: February 13, 2003 22:34 CST
Comment/Review:
*falls outta her chair laughing*
I LOVED that fight between Goku and Vegeta!!! I had to stop every few minutes to remember to breath I was laughing so hard!! This just keeps getting better and better!!
So where's my hot monkey sex? *taps her foot impatiently*
oh, and btw... Im not sure if it's my computer that did it or not.. but at the end of this last chapter, your text went into computer code... *cries*
Please update soon! I'm goin crazy over here!
well.. I was crazy a while ago... BUT THAT'S BESIDES THE POINT!
MORE!
GIMME GIMME GIMME! |
Reviewed By: Lully On: February 13, 2003 23:29 CST
Comment/Review:
I thought this chapter was absolutely fabulous. Jeice and Zarbon both on the prowl...hehehe...well...that is scary. But the fight made the chapter...meeeeeeeeeeOW!!! So, just when is Goku going to clue into what our pretty boys actually want from he and Vegeta? This is just great. Look forward to more and soon, I hope. |
Reviewed By: alfarrar [MediaMiner Member] On: February 13, 2003 23:47 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
L'orn: "A'nore! A'nore! Did you read this fic yet?"
A'nore: *Puts down extremely interesting (not) thick medical journal she's attempting to study* "If you quit bugging me I will!"
*A'nore quickly reads first 4 chapters, looks at L'oren then reads again, and again and again....*
A'nore: "Oh my... Hey sis, do you know which city Dark Serapha and Rogue's street corners are located?"
L'orn: "No sis, But I sure wish I did. Why?"
A'nore: "They have Vegeta and Goku and are promising at least 6 lemons!!! Plus they even have that yummy bad guy Zarbon hidden there too!"
L'orn: "Zarbon! Zarbon! Zarbon!" *deep breath, must calm down* "Oh I just love Zarbon!"
A'nore: "This would be a good time to brush up on our people skills!"
L'orn: *shaking head confused* "Why?"
A'nore: "It would be a good idea if we attempt to get along with Dark Serapha and Rogue so they'll update and keeping bringing those handsome studmuff...um...I meant hot-blooded Saiyans around."
L'orn: "More Zarbon too?" *drolls all over her laptop's screen wallpaper which is a hunky Zarbie pic* "Okay I'm with you! But then I always go along with anything that you want, to my regret..."
A'nore: "AH Sis, now you know all my ideas are good ones!"
L'orn: "I remember an incident with the dean... and his brand new Ford Expedition...and whip cream...and duck tape... and dog poop...two dead chickens...and the college track team..."
A'nore: "Get expelled once and you never let me live it down!"
L'orn: "Because I got expelled too! Besides there was that one time at band camp..."
A'nore: *finally locating Dark Serapha's and Rogue's street corners* "Sheesh, I didn't know a clarinet would fit up...Just forget it. Besides we're kinda straying away from the point of this review. Remember we're suppose to be reviewing right now." ^Wink__Wink^
L'orn: "Oh Yeah! Please, Pretty, Pretty, Please! More! This is so awesome, I just love this story, I really like the unique style of writing and I really want to read about hot monkey sex, too! So...faster, um yes faster..." *prostrated on ground and begging beneath Rogue's street light, then waves at her twin who is kneeling below Dark Serapha's light* "Your turn."
A'nore: "Um...okay...Dark Serapha?" *points at sis still sprawled beneath Rogue's light and bites her bottom lip* "What she said."
*L'orn jumps up, grabbing her twin's ear and drags her away kicking and screaming. "Always trying to humiliate me" L'orn punches sis in the face then knees her in stomach. "This was your idea!" Before dragging her back over and throwing her down beneath Dark Serapha light.*
A'nore: *blurry pin-filled eyes peer up at Dark Serapha* "Please more..." *then collapses unconcious*
*L'orn pats sis on back then while force feeding her a sensu bean, spies Vegeta hiding behind Rogue and gives chase.........
Vegeta: "Crazy humans...For Kami's sake I'm only anime...ROGUE! If you want me to finish this damn story you'd better stop this crazy...OW!!...bitch...NOW!" |
Reviewed By: Naturi [MediaMiner Member] On: February 14, 2003 08:04 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Chapter 3 was funny as hell!! I could definitely see Goku fighting for food and Vegeta fighting for dominance!!! I craccked up when I read that part. I LOVE this story, and I was just wondering.....if Veggie-chan and Goku-kun get together, will their lovemaking be as fierce, primal and feral? *shudders erotically* Oh the thought..... *ahem* Please update soon..I likies a lot!!!! |
Reviewed By: Xero Sky [MediaMiner Member] On: February 14, 2003 12:47 CST
Comment/Review:
Poor boys... hungry, frustrated, and having to breathe the same atmosphere as Jeice and Zarbon. If I remember right, Vegeta gets to kill both of them in the future; I hope Goku does 'em both sooner than that!
Some nice tension here, with the two creepy guys making Vegeta's skin crawl and Goku's apparent inability to stop making his prince look bad. To be honest, the catfight went on a bit too long and was a bit hard to follow because of the multiple perspectives it was seen from. In general, however, I think you're handling the perspectives well, using Goku to describe unfamiliar things to the reader.
I will admit that I don't read a word of your after-chapter commentary, just because there's so much of it. That doesn't take away from your story, though.
All in all, a very promising fic so far, and I look forward to more!! |
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