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| "In'lar-Anth - Through Darkest Destiny" Reviews/Comments [ 142 ] | | Pages (10): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 › » ] | Reviewed By: Dynishra The Vampire [MediaMiner Member] On: April 19, 2003 07:40 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
As always, brilliant ladies.
Although it has taken me some time to review and i must appologise for that. Believe me when i say i read this chapter the moment it was sporned onto mediaminer.
I also must say it has been delightful to talk with you both.
I have given extremely serious thought to you wish for me to come clear of my 'lurking'. Even though my lovely penthouse which it at the peak story of a highrise nearby your lovely corner, i feel inclined to socialise among your lesser clients. And so, i will visit your ... hem... street corner.
*smirks darkly*
Also, i promice on my heart, that none will come to harm. That is harm from me or any other poor fools who think to portray violents upon your victoms.. uh clients.
i will protect them in any fashion i deem nessessary, considering your resident Saiyans seem far more interested in each other.
*smiles with a faint tad of mockery*
On an ending note. Dear Squall, i would never harm the ladies. I may be a vampire, but i have a common sense in not killing these lovely authoresses. How else would i enjoy such brillient fiction and smut as this with out their talented minds.
And tainted souls.
*grins*
You on they other hand, Squall, may do well to watch your back. The shadows have a way of catching their prey. *snickers*
With all that crap out of the way, Darkserapha and Rogue, brillient as always.
I look forward to the next chapter enthusiastically.
I do hope it will be soon. I maybe immortal, but you know they say time waits for no...hmph.. well i suppose i don't need to worry about that. ^^ i'm neather a man or a human.
*beams*
Chow ladies^^
~The Great and Magnificent,
Dynishra The Vampire...~ | Reviewed By: bachnelkenwurz@hotmail.com On: April 18, 2003 07:37 CDT
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I get the feeling this fucking computer don't want me to review properly...so if it's split in two im sorry. I try it one more time nevertheless...
A utterly desperate reader...and yes, I know I'm pathetic, but I'm totaly addicted to your story and the wonderful style of writing, in which it is kept...maybe it even can help me to improve my own English. My teacher would be very thankful, although I deny I will need some "special" new learned words when it comes up to lemon scenes... | Reviewed By: bachnelkenwurz On: April 18, 2003 07:32 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You two are so mean!!! Real sadists...Hidden charpters...I need them, so please allow me to get access to those charpters. >kissingyourfeet | Reviewed By: bachnelkenwurz On: April 18, 2003 07:30 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You two are so mean!!! Real sadists...Hidden charpters...I need them, so please allow me to get access to those charpters. >kissingyourfeet | Reviewed By: teteiforever2002 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 15, 2003 05:54 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I´ve been sitting for two days on this story and all I can say it`s stunning. I don`t like fics that are to much focused on their pairings instead on going on with the storyline. I´m glad that I finally found one story taht fulfils my wishes!
But I must say the two hidden chapters are quite shocking and perverse. I´ve never expected something like this. I think, however, this is exactly what you two have wanted.
Anyway, I´m going to review every chapter that is coming after chapter 8!!
Tetei | Reviewed By: Squall-sama [MediaMiner Member] On: April 14, 2003 21:30 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hmm... ok, where do i start. *blushes* i feel so out of place when i come upon a wonderful abode such as this that has had so many faithful reviewers and they all know one another so well... *looks around at lavish street-corner, lazy customers, two frightened/irritated Saiyajins and Serapha and Rogue nervously and innocently*
aye... i don't have any split personalities or partners in crime or wonderful lovers by my side to lighten things up either... well... not unless you count those troublesome G-boys hiding somewhere in the back of my head....
so, lets just start from the beginning. marvelous! well done! i love it! or what you have done of it so far at least... and i won't even press you for another chapter to be done soon becasue you two--one--two.... *confused* whatever--you're gracious enough to give us happy readers such long (a little drawn-out i'll admit, but thats fine) chapters, that i won't ask. =^_^=
i personally enjoy the parts where Vegy-chan and Goku are... 'romping' around together--or when they're together at all... you make those scenes so exciting and they're so rare and far that the two of them together is made all the better.
which bring to mind another thought: i can see why you had so much fun writing the last chapter 'The Prince's Decision'... it was VERY good! for once it didn't have every form of mass angstyness and mutilation in it like the other chapters. *laughs* Not that i mind, it's just that you two lovelies... do it so well...... almost too well.
Fight scenes are awsome! i could never write something like that without confusing myself, i don't know how you lovelies do it.
oh yeah, by the way... even though its been a while since the second 'hidden chapter' and i don't mind missing Jeice's second punishment... umm if i ask for access to every hidden chapter thus and forward... do i get it?? *hopeful look, grins stupidly like Goku would*
*laughs* nah, i'm just being silly, don't worry about that--i'll just have to learn to keep tabs on you two lovelies more often is all...
oh, you were also asking about why FF.net isn't taking the links you post up? or something like that--well i can give you that answer straigt off--becasue FF.net sucks a big fat one--thats why... *falls out of chair laughing at self* no, i know that's not a good enough excuse, but i've had issues with that horrible place ever since the bastards kicked me off... though, i've noticed that, since moving my home from there to here--there are many differences in the programs running the sites... i'm not a computer wiz but i have a friend that might be able to help. i just know that on FF.net it never took my 'word' documents completely and i had to... 'adjust' every one of my damn fics to fit to the format of the site--it would only take html documents, unlike this place where it takes any type of document and automatically formats it to show up on the posted page the way it supposed to look... *stares* did that make sense? FF.net, despite its popularity and name of being so big and bad and better than everywhere else, can't support a lot of things and i always had trouble when i had minor links connected to my fics anyhow--who knows--the place just sucks in my opinion... but like i said, if you wish mine and my friends advice, i don't mind helping. =^_^=
and... i have to say this... even if she has been lurking around for a while... damn vampires... always doing that, Dynishra is very brave and quite bold to push you two lovelies--or should i say Rogue the way she does... *glares* it irks me when someone does that... *gets possesive* *thinks to self, 'no threats, no inturding on Serapha and Rogue's personal space, the lovelies can take care of themselves...'* but damn it!! Vampire or no... *growls* shit now my true nature is coming out... *glares at nothing* *huffs* ok, I'll be good and leave Miss Vampire alone... for now...
so, yeah, anyway, i wanted to say, that despite Serapha being German, you're doing a damn good job... even if there are a few mistakes, but like you said, try writing a 32 page chapter-fic and not have any mistakes. =^_^= i think you lovelies are doing wonderfully, the only thing i might work on is the drawn out scenes--i don't know how to decribe what i mean, but in some parts, like mainly the Zarbon and Jeice scenes, are really drawn out and perhaps, instead of repeating the same thing over and over only in different words, get to the point a little sooner. but it looks like you're starting to do that anyhow.. the last two chapters were perfect, not too long in some places and just the right amount of time in other--i suppose because Freiza has entered the picture... or more of the plot has awakened--if you did that in every chapter (seeing as how you have 30+ pages to work with in each...=^_~=) the story migh possibly come along 'faster' unless you want to purposefully draw it out and tease us poor reviewers... *faints to ground melodramatically from teasing*
ok, *worried look* i hope i wasn't actually critisising or being rude there... i hate it when people are rude to me or 'talk down to me' i'm not stupid--and neither are you two lovelies--thats obvious to see, i just wanted to help a little if i even did.... =-_-=0
*huff* so... after talking--writing your ear off.. i'll just shut up now... *glances back at other 'customers' sprawled out on corner hopefully* and i don't want to intrude upon anything i'm not welcomed into... *bows smoothly and straitens up, walking off to find a nice perch of my own to wait on* | Reviewed By: Cat On: April 11, 2003 17:39 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very interesting. You really need to make more fics like this one! | Reviewed By: Tori On: April 10, 2003 16:55 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow! I loved this chapter! I wish you would've had Goku like "accidentally" hit that fat blob guy *(can't remember the name) a little too hard or something. Oh well, just so you know that I enjoyed this chapter! Let the good chaps roll in!
-Tori | Reviewed By: Tori On: April 10, 2003 15:44 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I find this fic strange compared to others I've read. But even though it isn't as engrossing, I'd still like to see what happens next...
-Tori | Reviewed By: Chibi Hoshi [MediaMiner Member] On: April 04, 2003 11:09 CST
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nonono! you weren't abandoned at all!! We all ran off to our sketchbooks to draw pics and try and get a hold of that video!! I know I wanna see it!! and also, could you send me a link to the second hidden chapter? my email is
chibi_hoshi@hotmail.com
Thankies so much! And now I'm off to read the next chapter and find my sketchbook. Sorry it's been a while since I reviewed, working 10 hours a day will really cut into your internet time. anyway, keep up the GREAT work, and I hope I can eventually get my wings on that video.. you'll have to send out waterproof versions, you know... otherwise we'll all ruin the videos we get cause we'll be drooling all over them.... talk to you soon!!
*Giggles and flutters wings, raising chalice of honeysuckle nectar and pulling out sketchbook from underneath mushroom-cap*
Chibi Hoshi* | Reviewed By: Mara On: April 03, 2003 16:38 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i must have the second hidden chapter ..... yaoi is sooooo yummy ^_^ especially with a SM twist... keep it up you two .. the story is one of the best i've ever read !!!!!
NightTerrors81@aol.com | Reviewed By: Megami Riley On: April 01, 2003 22:30 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm # 100!!!! ^____^ yay! I can't wait till you update. I have become obsessed with your fanfic. updateupdateupdate soon okay?!
*gives you candy and DBZ plushies* type faster!
--byes! | Reviewed By: Lully On: March 31, 2003 14:57 CST
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I always have to come here to finish reading. I don't receive email form list...go there to read and it truncates the message. Ah....wish I was thinking more clearly. Sorry if this review is lame but I wanted to make sure that I let you know...still reading...still enjoying...still anxious for the next part. Have to say the whole Vegeta taking care of Goku part was heartwarming. And...adored Raditz' perspective on the prince and Goku. Poor Goku...he is rather clueless, but not all his fault. | Reviewed By: alfarrar [MediaMiner Member] On: March 29, 2003 23:25 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Seated at an intimate little bistro table next to Dark Serapha's nest of fluffy pillows, sipping vodka spiked lemon ice (the only way to drink lemonade) from that little darlin' Chibi Gemi, are our dedicated reviewers A'nore and L'orn and their favorite boys Jeice and Zarbon.*
L'orn: First I just want to tell Dark Serapha, Thank you, your little recreation drug worked wonders on Zarbon. *leers suggestively at the still drug dazed Repta-jin*
A'nore: I'm so glad Jeice is so compliante now, I like my toys to know what's happening to them. I like them responsive. *runs long manicured nails down Jeices spine watching him tremble in fear*
L'orn: Whatever. *waves her hand and ignores twinny's comment* I actually prefer my pets eager and willing, if you know what I mean. *purrs as Zarbon nibbles her ear*
A'nore: HENTAI!
L'orn: Of course! *licks lips then smirks*
A'nore: Let's just review, okay? *eyes narrow dangerously* I'm sure no one wants to know about your night life.
L'orn: Jealous, lovely? *leers at twinny* It's not just limited to the nights...*evil smirk*
A'nore: Forget it. Now down to the real business of reviewing...Um...Goku's naiveness is adorable and I love how Vegeta gets so angry at the act, and doesn't realize Goku really doesn't know what's going on.
L'orn: It doesn't matter where in time those two are. Goku is always clueless and Vegeta's too stubborn to help him out...*rolls eyes*
A'nore: The fight scene was awesome...and I love how Vegy came to protect his Kaky... *grins happily*
L'orn: Almost as good as some hot monkey sex would be right about now...* winks and smiles encouragingly at DS and Rogue* Any time you ladies are ready, of course... | Reviewed By: Chibi Gemi [MediaMiner Member] On: March 28, 2003 23:24 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
...Hot monkey sex...hehehehe....
Y. Gemi: Shut up, you're the one who said that. Pervert.
Oh? I'm not the one trying to catch Jita and Kaky in a romp.
Y. Gemi: (blush, hides video camera behind back) I am NOT!
Kurai: (snorts) You're BOTH pervs. Now shut it and gush compliments to the Authoresses.
Angsty goodness!!
Y. Gemi: Fighting!
Jita protecting his Kaky!
Y. Gemi: Fighting!
Kurai: You're redundat.
Lemon Ice!!
Y. G. & Kurai: Huh??
I brought lemon ice. (points to a mobile cart) Among other things.
Both: why?
To share with anyone who wants it. I feel bad for missing the block party, so I figured, if it's ok with D.S. and Rogue, that I'd bring some lemony treats to tide everyone over with. (Grins and produces vodka) This makes it all even better, especially the lemonade.
Y.G.: So this is what we're going to do from now on? Pass out spiked lemonade?
Yuppers!! ^_^
Y.G.: WHOOHO!! LET ME AT IT!! (attacks cart with a vengance)
Kurai: (tackles Y.G.) Not now!
Hehehe... (hops around happily) This is going so well! And we get see what Older, crochety Vejita is up to. Is he being affected by the timeline? You would think so...(notices the big pile of pillows D.S. is on) OMG!! Pillows!! Evilsoftbadnessnonono!!!!!! (dives into the lemon cart)
Y.G. & Kurai: Udate soon please! (glance at the mildly shaking cart) ...she's going to need a good reason to come back out...
Later Dayz & TAnx!! ^_^
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