| "Everything Happens For A Reason" Reviews/Comments [ 156 ] |
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Reviewed By: Shiro Ryu On: August 05, 2004 21:44 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hmmm ..., and Vegeta is the evil one huh? Yamucha right now has my vote for being an evil user! I hope Bulma finds out soon about what is happening to her. Maybe Vegeta can teach her some psychic self-defence. Anyway, I'm so glad to see you are updating. Great chapter! Please update soon! ^_^
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Reviewed By: Snazzy On: August 04, 2004 11:27 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Indeed a very unexpected twist. But a very pleasant one =) I, too, was expecting a steamy lemon (which I was looking forward to) but in stead we got the whole Yamcha ghost thingy (great idea by the way). You keep suprising us. Very well done. Hope to see a new chapter soon ^_^
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Reviewed By: phantomscribe72 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 04, 2004 11:09 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Poor Yamcha, he's fighting a losing battle here. And poor Bulma! It must be so awfuk to be torn between the two of them. I have a feeling Vegetea isn't going to take this interference so lightly...
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Reviewed By: dbz fan jess On: August 04, 2004 01:27 CDT
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someone kill yamacha COMPLETELY.... ahhhh... well I guess I'll have to wait for the next chappy
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Reviewed By: debbiechan [MediaMiner Member] On: August 03, 2004 22:24 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
oh my! here I was expecting another wonderful lemon like in Saiyan for all Seasons, and I got something better! oh, that was clever, oh that was intense, and I loved this chapter! You're on quite a roll! This story is so original and Yamcha is being given his due as a substantial (if insubstantial in body, lol!) character in this love triangle! You're handling the otherworldly elements with just the right touch! And tell me, what's up with mm.org not accepting italics???? I tried and tried to fix them in my last story but no go (the stories uploaded fine on other sites :-( In any event, the action was clear but I know what it's like not to have the formatting you want--I'm a visual person too! If it helps, I "felt" where your italics should be (haha--they were ghosts like Yamcha!) WONDERFUL CHAPTER!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: sweetness427 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 03, 2004 21:05 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
ok that just sucks, not the story, what u did to poor veggie. i like the story, please update again soon.
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Reviewed By: The Oujis Mate [MediaMiner Member] On: August 03, 2004 18:35 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I admit that the twist was unexpected, but I shold have known; you're a brilliant author and you're not going to make a story boring by making the get together easy. I'm glad you finally updated this story, but I know you've got tons of other stories you're working on (which are all equally good) so I forgive you. Anyway, I can't wait until you're next installment of this fic.
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Reviewed By: Abbi aka "theblueone" On: July 26, 2004 23:15 CDT
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I must say that I thoroughly enjoyed this fanfiction and that from the instant I first negan reading it I could tell that you were British. The diction you used was spectacular and engaging. "Grown up" vocabulary is something seldom seen in most fanfictions (considering most of the ones I've read have been written by Americans) and I must say cheers to you for writing in such a mature fashion. My one complaint is the continual repetition of the "f" word (ha ha, I feel like I'm in elementary school again from saying it that way). I'm not trying to be a moralist or anything, it's just that I felt it was out of character. I don't see either of the characters as using such hard language. Vegeta is Vegeta, but there are ways to show his dark, evil, sexy personality without using harsh words. Sry for the preaching! Other than that, I love the fic! Keep up the good work and I can't wait to read the next chapter! You're doing a great job! :-)
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Reviewed By: Prince Vegeta1 On: July 15, 2004 16:47 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Sorry but I had to write another review. I just can't stop reading that section when Vegeta says "take it" that part of the story is so sexy.
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Reviewed By: Prince Vegeta1 On: July 15, 2004 16:14 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I absolutely love this fanfic and i cant wait to read chapter 17
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Title: ch.16 Take It
Reviewed By: library surfer On: June 05, 2004 00:03 CDT
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Nice chapter *^_~*. My favorite part is when Vegeta realizes he regrets pushing Bulma away...that whole little section when he knows she is the only one he trusts. I like when Bulma has a piece of paper stuck to her face as she wakes up ^_^...very vivid scene. {her little scene w/ Dende is nice too} I love when he suddenly crushes his lips to hers...and I love when he keeps telling her to 'take it'...great title for the chapter *^_~*.
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Reviewed By: Catreena [MediaMiner Member] On: June 04, 2004 21:55 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Okay, what the heck is up with that cliff hanger??? Right when you get the reader to the best and I might add most anticipated part you stop!!! LOL I really love this story as well as your other ones, btw, hurry up with Feeding Genius, PLEASE! And PLEASE hurry up with this next chapter.
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Reviewed By: bimbo n ditz On: May 23, 2004 05:33 CDT
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anothjer great g8 kool chappie!!!!! well done!!!!!! cant wait for more1!!!!!!!!!! b/v rock!!!! da footy chappuie has to be da best 1 yet tho lol xcellent work!!!!!! :0) gtg bye byez surfs up! (UPDATE SOON PLZ!!!!!) :)
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Reviewed By: Carla-phantomscribe72 On: May 21, 2004 19:18 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
GRRRRRRRRRRRRR!!!!!!! You keep leaving me hanging!!!! But I love every minute of it. I will refuse to leave my keyboard until you update. That means lots of stupid and pointless email for you. Come on now girl, do you really WANT me to clog up your precious email storage space?
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Reviewed By: Fibs On: May 19, 2004 15:06 CDT
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Oh my GOD !! Oh man this is getting good now! I SO cannot wait for the next update !! Hurry back ! Hurry back !! Hurry back !!!!!!!!!!!!!!! The final scene was amazing. Actually made me feel warm and fuzzy inside... this chapter rocks !! I love you !! Fibs
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